That…is a LOT of sexy. Me likey!

And Macintosh is a Stallion of many talents. However, I hope that one of said talents will be "Convincing AJ not-to castrate him when she finds out"

This was beautiful. Long, but beautiful. Keep up the good work, I better go start taking notes so I can make the love scenes in my fic better! (seriously, you're good). So have a moustache!

This Story is really Great!

Story going good so far. Can't wait for AppleJack and the others to find out exactly what Big Mac's business trip to meet with the Princesses was really for.

Not bad, one pony I'm worried about is Rainbow Dash. Her life's dream is to join the Wonderbolts a traveling stunt team that also appears to have emergency response duties. Between training, travel and other obligations that leaves very little time to raise a foal and Rainbow would never let herself be an absentee mom. Still if I thought of it Celestia must have thought of it too

Mmph. <3 That's all.

Though poor Mac is gonna have a lot of 'splainin' to do. Not lookin' forward to that nearly as much as I'm lookin' forward to his next "assignment!"

Great chapter, was a behemoth to read! A few comma errors(only a couple, ya just forgot to add one). It was well the wait, even though I kind of forgot about it! You got my attention again.

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I didn't get an alert when you answered, so I'm very sorry for taking so long to answer back!

Yes, he was, at the very least to Rarity. She tried her best to acquiesce to his whims, and he treated her like a doormat in return.

Which is one the reasons why I find the whole idea behind the pairing funny! Let's say Celestia sends Blueblood out with the order to "distract" Applejack to the best of his abilities, using all his "charm" and "poise". As it turns out, Applejack isn't susceptible to insincere flattery or shallow romancing, not to mention probably still sore about the Gala; and she sure as hell won't be treated like a maid anytime soon! If he wants to make any progress at all, he needs to be honest and sincere both to her and, ultimately, himself.

And they might've started finding things they actually like about the other, like Applejack's boundless determination, or how much she's doing for her family's sake (if there's one thing nobles take seriously, it's family!), or that Blueblood is actually vulnerable outside his comfort zone.

Celestia probably knew/hoped for all this in advance - she did, after all, correctly assume that Fluttershy could cure Discord of his pathological need to be a jerk. If all works out, she's got a match for the one Element she can't send Macintosh after, she got her nephew to get his act together, and two happy ponies. Maybe even another addition to the family!

And we, the readers, get to see a Prince make a fool of himself trying to woo a stubborn Applefarmer at the behest of his auntie, the souvereign. Opposites Attract at its finest.

Well most ponies would probably say "Oh you want to sleep with one of the princesses? HA! Only in your dreams."
Well it appears that for Big Mac that is a reality and he will never be getting a normal sleep again with a lover like Luna around.
Heck he cant even have a normal day with Celestia having the power to pull him into Memories during the day.

Oh I can just see it. By the end of this he will be in a bunker in Canterlot hiding from AJ with both Princesses protecting him.

This story just keeps getting better and better.
I really like the way you did Pinkie, and I can hardly wait for what comes next.
Hmm...We've got Twilight, Rainbow, and Fluttershy left. Fluttershy will be the real doozy for Big Macintosh...unless of course by then she's heard from the animals exactly what's going on...say, if Philomena or (if this takes place late in Season 3) Discord tells her what happened in Canterlot with Big Mac and the Princesses. The idea of Fluttershy getting assertive and literally strapping Big Mac down as she rides him is somehow intruiging...if a little freaky.
Getting Rainbow to be believable might be hard...as well as presenting what exactly her emotional needs are.
Really can't wait to see what happens with Twilight, though...and I'm getting the feeling Derpy will be in the mix, somehow.

I'll have to see this when I have time. *looks at clock: 12:35 AM*

... Which is NOW!

… “The precipice of ruined structure.” – There should be a ‘the’ between ‘of’ and ‘ruined’.
… “Big Macintosh taken her” – There should be a ‘had’ between ‘Macintosh’ and ‘taken’.
… “few seconds of wandering about” – I think you meant ‘wondering’.
… “his hands up cup and” – There should be a ‘to’ between ‘up’ and ‘cup’.
… “his own playbook book” – I’m not sure the second ‘book’ is needed… better give it to Twilight Sparkle when her chapter comes up.
… “expected them too” – ‘too’ should be ‘to’… or maybe even ‘’ta’, given it’s Mac dialogue.
At this point, I misread an entire line: “Apple Bloom looked up at Big Macintosh as he sat down next to her, the patches of syrup and bits of butter” – I misread it as “Apple butter”.
… What does it meeeean?
… “wondering the how one” – The ‘the’ isn’t needed there.
… “both or bodies and” – ‘or’ should be ‘our’.
… “between two of them” – I think ‘the’ should be placed between ‘between’ and ‘two’.
… “try to woe her” – I think you meant ‘woo’, not ‘woe’
… “this torturous state this on purpose” – The second ‘this’ isn’t needed.
… “I'm feel fine though” – This is Big Mac dialogue, but still… ‘I’m feel’ doesn’t sound right. Maybe “I’m feelin’” as a replacement, or something similar…?
… “a little business trip was to Canterlot” – Okay, I honestly can’t say there’s anything wrong with this statement, but it just feels off… maybe instead of ‘a’, it should be ‘your’… or just remove the ‘was’?
… “needle of turntable” – There should be a ‘the’ between ‘of’ and ‘turntable’.
… “inside the spread her arms wide” – This took a moment for me to ‘get’: ‘the’ should be ‘she’.
… “one of hands” – ‘her’ should be placed between ‘of’ and ‘hands’.
… “towards them determined expression” – I wanted to request a word, but I think you just need a comma between ‘them’ and ‘determined’.
… “went over to closet door” – There should be a ‘the’ between ‘to’ and ‘closet’.
… “down a some stairs” – The ‘a’ isn’t needed, but I think you were originally typing ‘down a set of stairs’, perhaps…?
… “a might bit confused” – ‘might’ should be ‘mite’.
… “before the you and I” – The ‘the’ is not needed.
… “free of an incriminating” – ‘an’ should be ‘any’.
… “interior of treehouse” – There should be a ‘the’ between ‘of’ and ‘treehouse’.
… “What she through the open” – Erm… This one I’m not too sure. ‘What she saw through’, I suppose?
… “to core of” – There should be a ‘the’ between ‘to’ and ‘core’.
… “unelss” – This should be ‘unless’.
… “his now unsheathed shaft painful pressing” – ‘painful’ should be ‘painfully’.
… “curvaceous Also” – There should be a period after ‘curvaceous’.
… “he slide himself” – ‘slide’ should be ‘slid’.
… “Pinkie."?"” - … What? Okay, I don’t even know what this is, but you quoted a question mark.
… “hilt insider the” – ‘insider’ should be ‘inside’.

I stuck with it. I waited for a few weeks, and THIS is the end result.

... Totally, Unquestionably, 100% worth the wait.

The charactertizations of Pinkie Pie and Rarity were very well-developed, especially for the former. Rarity was already believable, and is very, very hard for most writers to write, with 'limitations'. Pinkie Pie, on the other hand, was completely endearing. The idea of her having this much softer side, is very believable when you bring about episodes involving her birthday, or there being more than one of her.

You get the general idea that she's portrayed one way, but is possibly a whole other pony. I don't mean "Pinkamena", I mean somepony who loves to laugh, sure, but who has the moment when she doesn't laugh, and in those moments, she'd appreciate some form of feeling 'wanted' by those she entertains.

... Oddly enough, I don't usually consider her that deep, but you wrote her into this in an incredibly impressive, wonderful way. And if I could give a comment about how immersive this chapter was, well... they'd make a comment text limit. Heh... Sugarcube Corner, The Farm, the Clubhouse, even the party were all scenes that had vivid ideas of how events would transpire, and how to view them. It was more than describing scenery: it was describing the emotions that the scenery places in the hearts of the ponies.

... I really can't pay enough compliments and feel fulfilled, so at 3:38, I finish my three-hour, three minute "Read, Proofread, and Review" of "The Life of the Party".

Another great chapter. Now all the girls want to know why he was summoned to see Celestia. It's going to get harder and harder () for Big Mac to not spill the beans. I wonder who his next assignment is going to be? I have a feeling who his last two are going to be.

Mac be gettin' all the mare's. Even Ailcorn mare'z

Pinkie sex is good sex :3

Let me tell you, I really enjoy this story more than most. This is because the story isn't rushed at all, I also like the way the story is about 30 times as much real story as it is porn. Hope to see this story continued.

Fluttershy and RD's moment with Big Mac will truly be interesting.....but I'm scared it would be kind of predictable as well...
RD will be competitive as fuck
and Fluttershy well she would be timid and nervous.....

...then again Mr. Author, you surprised me with this outcome with Pinkie so.....I'm looking forward to the next installment!

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When she finds out?

I would be more interested in HOW she finds out...
- intercepting one of Mac's tip letters
- friends letting their Mac experience slip out
- "red-handed"
- AJ's turn for Mac treatment comes up

I also wonder which one is going to have the most complicated close-in... breaking through the shy-wall, the nerd-wall, the tomboy-wall or the Apple(?)-wall? Fluttershy will likely go down a similar route to Rarity, Twilight could be approached on an "experimental" basis, no idea what to do with Rainbow and AJ (if things swing that way) would be awkward... just come clean and say these are the princesses' orders?

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Author says that there will be no apple incest…instead, Mac will meet a mystery mare (I THINK IT'S DERPY)

Very nice work so far! and 16,000 words! Dam that's alot for one chapter my heart almost skipped a beat when I saw I'd have a nice chunk to read.

.... ok.... yes yes and yes. the way you did this was classy as hell and i congratulate you on it, more you magnificent bastard

you did
it did
keep up the great work

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I haven't figured out what to do with Applejack honestly, but it isn't going to be something like that. I know this story is already stretching the rules of plausibility, but Fancy Pants and Blueblood showing up in Ponyville seems kind of like a weird twist to me. I'm sure I'll think of something though! For AJ!

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I like that word. That word is good.

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A stallion of many talents indeed. No AJ seduction though. Although I do confess...I've read a few well-written AJ/Mac stories on here. I think someone made the comment earlier about how we fall further down the rabbit hole the more we read. It's happening to me too, but I don't necessarily regret it. Still, I don't think I'll be using the AppleMac angle in this story.

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Glad my work is inspirational for you. That is very flattering.

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Thanks for the compliment brony!

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He'll manage to keep a secret for a while longer, but during the last two chapters the snowball is going to be too big to stop!

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Maybe she won't be able to take the "heat," ya know? I kid though. I'm really looking forward to writing Dash's chapter. Who knows, maybe the Wonderbolts have a daycare program!

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He's a smooth operator. I'm sure he'll keep figuring out ways to dodge the bullet...for the time being.

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Point the comma errors out to me! Must fix...thanks for the compliment though. Glad you enjoyed it.

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That is interesting premise. Honestly, I keep putting off the Applejack situation because I'm not sure how to deal with it yet. I'm sure I'll think of something though...maybe it'll come to me in a dream. Luna willing, of course.

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I got no plans for World War Pony to go down on account of Big Mac's work, but who knows what will happen when all his ladies gather in one place at the same time...not me!

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Funny that you should mention animals for Fluttershy. They are going to be a big part of the plot for that chapter. After all, they go into heat too right, and who is the one who's in charge of making sure they are all happy and healthy?

I think Dash it will be easier to write for Dash after the events of season 3 revealed more of her personality. We know she has a really soft side to her as evidenced by her sneaky snuggles with tank, and I'm really looking forward to exploring that side of her character.

Twilight's chapter is already mapped out in my head. It. Will. Be. Awesome.

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Thanks again brony. I really appreciate the proofreading, and have already made all the suggested corrections. MS Word told me I was sitting at 15,500 words, but fimfiction.net is telling me over 16,000...who do I believe!

I'm glad you thought I added some depth to Pinkie Pie's character too. She was a lot of fun to write about.

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The plot thickens! But our hero will prevail.

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Hide your unicorns, hide your pegasi, cause this big guy is getting all the tail!

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Super-duper-awesome-amazingly-forever-and-always good indeed!

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I'm glad complimented me on the "not rushed" aspect. I hope you guys react to seeing your favorites or notification folder light up when I add a new chapter because the same thing happens for me when other authors on here update their works. I will always strive for quality over quantity though, and I certainly do believe that plot should take precedence over "plot." Puns!

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Those will be characteristics present in their chapters, but remember, this story is also about exploring those unfulfilled wants and desires that the show hints at concerning their personalities. I wonder if you guys can guess which mare is going to come next!

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So many walls to breakthrough...quite the daunting task. I really will try to make their experiences as novel as possible though. Please do sharpen your pitchforks and stop me if you guys see any cookie cutter formulas emerging.

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Mystery mare! Woot! I'm really debating about how I'll decide who the final lucky lady will be.

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I was scared that the word count would frighten some readers away, but I'm glad most of you seem to be over the moon about it. Someone write a 15,000 word story for me to read! I crave it so!

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Classy indeed, good sir. Swag.

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Will do! It always feels good to post a new chapter. Love seeing your guys responses.

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It's ok. I knew there would be no Applecest. I just wonder how will he convince AJ to let him stay a Stallion..,if you know what I mean.

Personally, I think the mystery mare will be Derpy.

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Wait...that would mean FLuttershy already knows that something is making heat worse for all the animals...making the females even more frisky and eager for a male. Logically, she would write Princess Celestia about it, asking if there is a magical explanation - not asking Twilight as she'd rather get a direct answer then expose her little darlings to the possibility of "experiments" - and probably get a straight answer about that comet. Which would mean...Fluttershy probably knows more about what's going on than Big Mac does.
Uh oh. That just gave me a mental image of FLuttershy knowing that Big Mac is doing the other girls too, and tries to make it all about the sex for her turn in an attempt to protect her heart...and Big Mac has to then get her to open up and see how much he genuinely cares about all of them, which is a big part of the reason Celestia picked him for them. THat could potentially make Fluttershy's chapter the most controvertially romantic one of the lot.

Hmm...given how it has been exploring the sides of each pony that is not shown much, that means you're exploring Dash's sensitive side? Possibly her...feminine side? Big Mac is going to make Dash feel pretty?

I have a feeling Twilight's read a LOT of dirty novels.

2169301 First, regarding AJ: The reason I suggested either Fancy Pants or Blueblood was because there's really no other noteworthy stallions mentioned so far in the story: Fancy Pants chimed up at the ceremony in Chapter 1, and Prince Blueblood's my idea for a more "obvious choice" in terms of not immersion, but coercion; I'd imagine that he'd gloat about being the nephew of royalty, as easily as he would give a rather 'unwilling' mare the reminder that he could somehow use the royalty of Canterlot at his disposal if they were to disobey him: In a way, it'd be a foil to Mac, who does things for the mare he's with. I considered other stallions: "Doctor Hooves" is too vague for usage, Cloudsdale stallions are probably only going to be with Cloudsdale mares, there's Mr. Cake (who's married, with foals), and several other "background" or "specialty" stallions that lack sufficient character to build anything around. There's Braeburn and Caramel, but I'm pretty sure they're cousins with Applejack, so that also doesn't seem likely.

The problem is how Applejack's "situation" can be sewn into the story, if given the time to bear fruit, but it entirely depends on who she'll be with. It's obvious she'll be with Big Mac, but it could go in an insane number of directions. I recall a comment you replied to a while ago that questioned your possible option of getting Big Mac with Applejack, and I think at the time, you were iffy about that particular scenario. The problem is, she's a mare, too. Logically, if the other 5 are not only options, but mandatory candidates for Big Macintosh, Applejack's gonna be with someone... Whether it's Big Mac or somepony else, however, is the important question: Especially since, if Big Mac is this scared of AJ learning his secret, I wonder if the opposite would be true: If Applejack would sleep with a stallion, then try hiding it from Big Macintosh: Not easy if the chance of pregnancy is increased with mares... oh dear.

I guess what I'm trying to say, is that when a story is this well-written in terms of not only the main story, but even the side plots such as the mares keeping secrets or figuring things out, it leaves a lot of room for the reader to imagine an insurmountable number of possibilities for what else could happen. When I get this immersed in the story, the creative juices just keep flowing... more like a broken dam than a glass of water. S-Sorry.

As for the chapter, I had actually started reading it BEFORE you edited in the Author's Notes (Which updated in after I refreshed the chapter screen), so I wasn't able to follow the request about Pinkie's character, yet I still expressed my opinion well on it, all things considered. She's got deep character... though calling it the "greatest day ever" sounds strange when the best of events occured at night. Then again, any day Pinkie's around is a good one, all in all.

I've never noticed Word and FIMfiction having inconsistencies. Strange... I wonder if it's the same for my OWN chapters... I'll have to check it out sometime, myself, likely when I finish my current three fics (Hooray for juggling, as well as for not posting fics as I type them, but rather waiting until they're complete, proofread, proofread again, posted chapter by chapter, and proofread again!). FIMfiction... I worry 'bout 'ya at times.

But without question, if this is the quality of work we get to see after waiting a while, I'd be more than happy to wait for your next chapters! Of course, I'll check in every now and then: Don't want 'ya to go falling off the planet or nothin', what if that happens mid-chapter!?

"Big Mac was on his way to Fluttershy's cottage, when YayOrNeigh fell from the sky after trying too hard to immerse himself into his own story."

... D-Don't write that in.

I....I....I.... Mmmmph. Man. Got me 6 times in one chapter. I literally read it in 5 minutes, and in that time I was biting my pillow in ecstasy. You certainly have a talent for this. SCREW IT I'M GOING AGAIN. *Is back one more time* MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMPH!

2169837 I know, right? The éclair is just THAT GOOD!

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>Really can't wait to see what happens with Twilight,
I could see it go down the line of Twilight finding reasons/excuses to reject BM's advances until BM tells her that she can consider it as BM passing down the "very special lessons" he received from Celestia and Luna.

"Are you bucking kidding me? Celestia and Luna taught you how to do this and instructed you to teach me? You are going to get banished to the moon for this."
"Eyup, eyup and nope."
Twilight considers writing a letter to confirm BM's claims but curiosity and lust make her choose to experiment first, not wanting to possibly pass on a chance to get an indirect lesson from her teacher. She can always have BM banished and locked away in the place he gets banished to later if she discovered he lied or happened to have questionable ulterior motives.

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I think there are a few more background stallions in Ponyville I can draw from, but as of now I haven't even thought about what to do with Applejack. That really is my biggest roadblock, and I'm putting it off vehemently.

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Wow, that's gotta be a speed reading/dexterous feat(s) world record. Were there any parts in particular that "worked" really well? Also, were there any parts that could be improved upon? I'm always curious about which scenes really get my readers going.

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We all know Twilight is clever, so that characteristic will figure into her chapter somehow. We also know she loves to read, so expect that too!

2170298 Well, remember that even by walking across "Plot Bridge", you're still gonna have to burn a few side-paths until you're left with something. Personally, it seems like the comet, as of now, doesn't appear to be bothering her much since the first chapter, which is already sorta weird...

That's really what I was basing my "stallion suggestions" on: "Once you eliminate the impossible (cousins, small-time character stallions, etc.), whatever remains must be the end result, regardless of implausibility".

... Of course, not all implausible ideas are possible, unless Applejack suddenly goes into her apple celler and finds King Sombra in an empty barrel of cider or something.

Sombra: "Hey, I'm just in here until someone thinks of something to do with my character. I think Braeburn fell asleep in the barrel next to me, so can you wake him up? We were in the middle of playing Battleship and he fell asleep."

2169918 Specially with my own *Sunglasses* CREAM FILLING. YEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!

2170298 CE'ST MAGNIFIQUE! NO IMPROVEMENTS TO BE MADE.

May I ask what your stories are? And with me, the more words the better, though in cases lie this one, in which the chapter has over 15k words, I'm a load more lenient towards grammatical errors, though I don't think I saw any in this one, a few in past Charles though.

In general, a very nice and we'll written story and I implore you to keep up the fantastic work

This story continues to amaze me. It managed to be absolutely sexy while also maintaining a heart-melting air of compassion. The way you use words to describe the scenes and emotions, it's just... incredible. It really helps put me in the scenes- especially the one with sitting at Sweet Apple Acres under the moonlight. As someone who loves being under the light of a full moon, I can say that that specific scene was something special.

Edit: (forgot the second part of the comment I was going to make) The way Big Macintosh handled Pinkie Pie was, as I said, heart-meltingly charming. It's just how he treated her like a person and not a fuckthing like so many clop / shipfic protagonists do... And it's not even like other characters disregard her personality, it's just that I rarely see her portrayed in such a light. The pony behind the energy, so to speak. It was... nice, for want of a better term. (It's 0400, so I claim an excuse for not having better words for it.)

Mac/Pinkie? Me gusta.

Looking forward to the next one!

A monster of a chapter: thoroughly funny, thoroughly true to the characters and thoroughly sexy. Very well written and I spotted no mistakes, excellent work.

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I'm not sure I understand the question. What do you mean by "what your stories are?" Thank you for the compliments though, I'm really glad you enjoyed reading it!

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That scene was a lot of fun to write. The same locale is also used at the start of the new chapter I'm working on, so stay tuned! Also, is quite the charmer, and was challenging to write for, but ultimately worth it. Glad you guys like my portrayal of her.

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Pinkie Pie agrees. (SFW)

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Glad I satisfied the criteria of my three tags for you brony! I actually keep finding errors as I reread it though, and some of them are so bad... Oh well, thank Faust for the ability to digitally update things!

2172775 you said at the end of one of the chapters that you were catching up on some stories you had been reading, I was wondering what some of them were.

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Oh, I gotcha. Check out "Que Sera, Sera." It is on the featured list right now. Very excellent story. Can't praise it enough.

ok super duper question time. for twilights chapter will she be unicorn or alicorn?

also keep up the awsome work man this chapter was goooooodd. it def shows character, and promise. the character development is truley spot on and as stated earlier in a previous post , by bronies i cant wait to see how you make twilights and fluttershys chapters, since rainbow is all tomboyish shell prob like a energetic and long lasting big mac, unless you go a different way with her.

HELL YEAH THE STORY IS BACK!

Wow, that was hard (no pun intended).

But incredibly beautiful! Great job! That fucking glorious storyline you got there is... well... pretty fucking glorious, and majestic.

the only thing I can say to this is
'Oh Snap! that was hot!"

Unbelievably sexy. I absolutely adore the relationship between Big Mac and Rarity. It's hilariously sexy. Fantastic writing, appreciable length (oh god why), and an all around very satisfactory read. And to top it all off, some serious troubles be brewin' in the future. Love how Applejack ties into all of this as the "mane antagonist" (oh god im horrible). At first I was worried Big Mac would have had to skip out on the special dinner with the Devil's food cake. THAT would've caused some fireworks.

Oh, and you did absolutely fantastic with Pinkie this chapter. Very in character, and loved it when her softer side came out. Both meanings of that apply. Fantastic work here, sir, I am most eager for your next delicious release (I need to stop writing now).

Someone give this writer a medal (+1 cookie) for 15000+ words. I enjoyed reading it the whole time.

The double meaning and connotation in this (Whether it be accidental or on purpose) is unbelievably awesome!
This was the part that made me for how ignorant I've been...

"but it had somethin' ta do with meetin' Princess Celestia and setting up a new farming venture..."

And just made me go...
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That was actually a sweet chapter (not sweet as in awesome, although it was awesome).
Also...

Congratulations, this is the first apparent "clopfic" that I have read and can actually comment that it's good!
I actually like this fic! It has character development, moral, and actual plot! (in more than one way)

You did good man you did good...
I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter.

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Flutteryshy and Rainbow Dash are pretty much mapped out. Twilight Sparkle is up in the air at the moment. One thing I don't understand about alicorns mating with other ponies, especially taking into consideration Shining Armor and Cadance's marriage, is can they produce off-spring? Obviously, Cadance was a foal once as shown during the wedding episodes, but can she and Shining Armor have a foal? Will the foal be an alicorn? I've already hinted that Celestia and Luna might be with child, but I was really hoping that the season finale would give me more insight into alicorns. Now I'm more confused than ever about what to do on that front. Thanks glorious leader -> She is so troll...

I think Twilight Sparkle will be a unicorn. Leaning towards that right now anyways. Heck, this is already pretty much an alternate reality fic.

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Kicking plot and taking names. Swag.

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All of these words make me happy about my storyline. As a token of thanks, have a moustache:

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Thanks! I like that avatar. Looks very angelic.

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Thanks for the compliments and witty puns brony, but none of you are guessing who the next pony is gonna be! Do I have to start dropping hints or what?

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MS Word is telling me 15.5k but fimfiction.net is telling me 16.5k...I don't know who to believe.

Also, I must confess...that little bit of wordplay was unintetional, but I suppose "farming" can include animal husbandry too. Kudos to me for being clever and not realizing it!

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Thanks for the compliments! I'm really glad you guys like my Pinkie Pie chapter. Honestly, I feel like she is the hardest mare to write serious things about because she is often quite quirky in the show. Thus, some portrayals of her just fall flat because they are either too silly or too serious.

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Thank you for the lofty praise, as well as taking a chance by reading my fic! As I've said in prior comments, I'm not interested in writing smut. I just want to place the characters I love in more complex and adult-like situations because they are so wonderfully vibrant and round. Story never takes a backseat to sex in any of my works, and I want events to unfold naturally, i.e., not randomly placing Big Mac in a room with a mare and have them go at it.

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I believe that since an Alicorn is both unicorn and pegasus that they can have any type of child depending on who they breed with. Earth ponies will make earth ponies, etc.

I don't know what everyone else said about this, but for some reason I loved this chapter. Amazing job. Purely amazing.
On a more objective note, you did the best that I have seen capturing Pinkie's personality in a fic, as well as being able to portray other personalities.

Additionally, I didn't notice any mistakes of any sort, so good job with that!

Keep on writing pure magic!