The Princess of the Night was taken by envy, she turned into Nightmare Moon and tried to create the Eternal Night but was stopped by her sister and banished to the moon.
At least that's what tell the books.
Envy wasn't the only factor involved, past events converge and reveal to be more important than told the tales for the plot of one of the oldest stories in all of Equestria.
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Not a bad start for your first fic. I kind of dig how the translation from your native tongue gives the dialogue a bit of an olden feel.
Pace and such are a bit clunky, but it's your first fic. You'll improve. Keep writing, keep practicing...
Hmmm, interesting story.
I think it's way too fast paced and that you have several errors in the story but other than that I think it's doing okay.
It would be great if you went through the chapters again and maybe added some more detail too, this seriously could be a good story.
I can't wait to read more.
Incredible.