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Funny. I was just playing "Donkey Kong Country Returns".
I must admit, I can't agree with your Pinkie's opinion on bananas. I hate the things.
Your story here, however is great. Thumbed up.
This was very good. It seems like you have the technique you mentioned in the description nailed down to a T.
My only complaints would be that you overuse the word 'banana' (sounds stupid, I know, but hear me out). What I mean is you write 'banana' multiple times in a paragraph when a simple 'it' will do. It might have been a subtle bit of humour, but I'm not sure. Secondly, sometimes it ventures into "She did this. Then she did that" territory, especially near the end. There were a lot of short sentences that could have been merged into longer ones.
Other than that, it was really good. An upvote from me.
Hmm. Writing a lot about a little, eh? I wish I was good at that. It's something I rather enjoy, for reasons I can't seem to explain.
That is all.
all Pinkie Pie could think about was bannans
HAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHHAAHa
Thanks for the positive comments guys. I might fix some of the things you pointed out at some point, but this is incredibly hard to do, especially when it has to be a minimum of 1,000 words. There's only so much I can say about bananas.
1897079 Dude. This was amazing I could see pinkie tugging at the banana in my mind. So cute But just asking...does Celestia like bananas too?
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Maybe she does in a possible sequel
1908767 THAT WOULD BE AMAZING. Please do it
After I read this, I saw an ad directly underneath stating one can cut down on stomach fat by not eating five certain foods, and it had a picture of a banana. I wonder if that cannon's still in Canterlot Castle...
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Let's hope. *Maniacal laughter*
epic story is epic!!!!! you gained my respect!!!
LOLOLOLOL :D