• Member Since 12th Mar, 2012
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Silver Train


Hello! My name is jack! If you want to learn more just ask!

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John wonders if he will ever get out of this rut and at least play on a stage for once. His chance might have come when he is transported to Equestria where Rock has not yet been discovered. But first he will have to coop with the circumstances and take on all the challenges that are unknown. With Gibson in hand he will open Equestria to a whole new genre of music.

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Good story, but grammar needs a ton of work. Believe me, it helps when writing.

First, capitalize names. John and Janis should be written as such.

Second, put periods where they should go; at the end of sentences.

Third, insert commas when needed.

Hope this helps, and please don't look at it as negative. This is supposed to be CONSTRUCTIVE criticism.

Sad to see a potentially great story abandoned.

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