Rainbow Dash and Derpy Hooves,members of the Apple family by marriage,are not getting along with the family members.Big Macintosh is less than thrilled with RD's presence,and Granny Smith feels that the cross-eyed mailmare is a shame to the family.Long story short,Sweet Apple Acres is not so peaceful anymore.But all grudges must be put aside when the beloved Applejack is injured.The question is,can anyone put Applejack above their petty concerns?
A first person story told by Big Macintosh,Rainbow Dash and Derpy Hooves
Teen rating is probably not necessary,but I don't want to get people saying that I implied this was a totally clean story.
Chapters (2)
Oh, super.....it's dueling prudes at Sweet Apple Acres. I can almost hear Pinkie Pie doing her ring annoucer shtick right now:
"In the red corner wearing the yoke, standing at 15 hands and weighing 200 pounds, we have Big "Laconic Homophobe" Macintosh and in the green corner wearing the shawl we have Granny "Wait till marriage" Smith....may the best bluenose win."
I love the concept! If you could brush up on the general storytelling standards (mentioned by clonetrooper), it could easily be 4 star or higher. You have a great idea, good dialogue, and all that! Please edit it! The people who are downrating are just so put off by the issues in spacing that they don't even read it.
You are gonna continue this right ......please
Everybody,thank you! I am thrilled that this is good in somepony's eyes! I was afraid nobody would like it.And,sorry for spacing. This is my first real story I've done.
And,as I understand, I have to do this with dialogue?
Rainbow Dash trotted into the darkening Everfree Forest. She glanced around. She couldn't see Pinkie anywhere.
"Hello? Pinkie? Are you here?"