Between Equestria and Azeroth

by Sunny_Blast

The Princess

Kich is absolutely shocked. She never believed in miracles, and leave alone the fact that she gets sent to a dimension of the creatures that she saw in her own dreams! She heard whispers of the Canterlor ponies, and was surprised to see that they speak the same language.

Remembering the honorful traditions of her faction, she stood straight, and yelled out "Greetings, strangers! I am Kich, one of the best warriors of the Herd." - after her phrase, the ponies started giggling, and just walked away like nothing happened. She heard the whispers, such as "Another unicorn trying to pretend that they're from another dimension?" "Everyone should really stop copying Trixie, we already have enough show-offs."

Suddenly, she noticed a bigger pony with a three colored gigantic mane, who had a crown on her head, which, as an instinct, made Kich take her helmet off and bow, since she knew that only the Queen can wear a crown. Kich started speaking to her.

"My name is Kich. I come from the Herd, the city of Olgrimmar. And you, I'm guessing, are the Queen of this place?"
"Yes, my name is Celestia. Princess Celestia. How did you get here?" - she asked.
"I do not have any idea, as I was in a battle with the Alliance, a huge explosion just came out of nowhere, I passed out, and now I'm here."
"That is quite strange. Are you sure you are not lying?"
"What are you even thinking, princess? I've been taught never to be rude to the royalty, or to anyone in general."
"Alright. Let's get you to the hospital, you do seem to have quite a lot of wounds after this "battle" of yours." - said Celestia, grinning.

The princess escorted Kich to the hospital. On the way there, she saw that same pony, with bright green fur and a red and blue mane. It was Sunny Blast. Sunny herself was VERY shocked at the time to see one of the creatures that appeared in her visions, leave alone the fact that Kich was wearing the same armor! They had eye contact for about twenty seconds, and they couldn't even control it. They both were shocked.

Sunny Blast and Kich start walking towards each other, in a blank stare. Once they collide, they just stand there, for two minutes. And then, they start making out. Kich's rough tongue was almost like sandpaper inside Sunny Blast's smooth mouth. It was the most passionate kiss either of them had ever experienced (and it was also the first one). Then, Storm Shaker came and raped everyone.

THE END

Comments

[The ancient one]

Azeroth? As in the place Raven from DC's Teen Titans was born?

[Sunny_Blast]

1455009 No. Azeroth is the main planet from World of Warcraft. That's the crossover

[Sunny_Blast]

1455009 Raven is from Azarath* c:

[The ancient one]

1457152

Oh big difference in the spelling..

Alright though, good luck with your fic, I'll be prayin' for ya.

BTW, your icon kinda hurts the eyes. The colors are too sharp, at least for me.

[Sunny_Blast]

1457180 Is it better now?

[The ancient one]

1457201

Yes, but is your fic comedy based or what? I mean what's the overall tone?

[Sunny_Blast]

1457212 It is, I should say, more adventure concentrated.

[The ancient one]

1457271

Then you're going to want a cover that exemplifies the adventure concept, because right now it looks more comedy related.

[Sunny_Blast]

1457308 I was going to ask a friend of mine who does art to do a good cover for my story, but for now It'll be just a visual of Sunny Blast.

[The ancient one]

1457321

About that, self inserts are generally frowned upon here. It'll take a lot to get people interested, as most of them see it as wish fulfillment, which it kinda is. Also, "Sunny Blast" is not a very good pony name, it sticks out a bit. Take for instance my OC's name, Shifting Sands.

It seems to blend more. This is because, from what I have noticed, pony names tend to be more like expressions. "Twilight sparkle" can easily become "The twilight sparkles" or "Rainbow Dash", it easily becomes "A dash of rainbow". See what I mean? That's just personal preference though, so don't take it to heart.

[Sunny_Blast]

1457377 I understand. I probably will change my name :\ and it's very hard to make me mad, so you can critisize anything on the story, it will only help c:

[The ancient one]

1457689

Well, ok. Another thing, don't make chapters less than a thousand words each. I have a three thousand word minimum for most of my chapters. Also, take time writing them, don't rush. Take the time to think out the premise, characters, locations and such. In the end, it'll be worth it, because people will see the work you've put into it.

[Sunny_Blast]

1458224 okai c:

[Storm_Shaker]

Sunny, I feel that this is rushed. This chapter was random, why is royality strolling around Canterlot. Some things are left un-explained, and the dialog was badly portraied. Fix some things up grammaticlly, and with the quick and unenjoyable feel of this story. I like the consept, but I seriousally consider editing.

8 mustaches out of ten

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