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Zipp Storm162 stories ·185 members

What’s your past like?

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Despite the dark and tragic past, she keeps a smile on her face that conceals the 3 things she has known all too well her entire life:
Pain
Betrayal
Suffering

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Chapters (4)

Joy? I know everything about it! · 21st Apr 2024 · 1,034 words
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Chapter 1 · 27th Apr 2024 · 339 words
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Element number 35-Bromine · 27th Apr 2024 · 1,964 words
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Chapter 2 · 1st May 2024 · 602 words
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Flamewarrior02

Flamewarrior02 #1 · 1 week ago · · · Joy? I know everything about it! ·

Okay, minus some first story problems everyone goes through, this has my attention on where everything is going to go

ZippStorm23

ZippStorm23 #2 · 1 week ago · · · Joy? I know everything about it! ·

I can fix those problems if I know what they are!

Flamewarrior02

Flamewarrior02 #3 · 1 week ago · 1 · · Joy? I know everything about it! ·

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Well, a lot of those you’re not going to solve without more experience.

But if I had to suggest things for later chapters, I would maybe try and add more detail to engross the reader in more, as well as try to make it clear whose eyes were are seeing the world through. It took me a while to realize this was a Zipp focused story, and this could especially be a problem if we switch POVs

Other than that, writing more will allow you to find you footing and style.

Flamewarrior02