Celestia has sent for Fluttershy to do research on a carnivorous creature wreaking havoc in the mountains of Cantorlot. But it might be more difficult than any animal she's encountered before…
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HanadjisBox
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This is so interesting! I definetely wasn't expecting that type of monster, my mind was aiming to a more beast-like being. The tension over what was this dangerous creature is well settled, I couldn't stand not knowing how it looked! Though, it deepens into the psychological horror sometimes.
Anyway, and though I doubt you were planning that, the end sends CHILLS down your spine! It gives off some space to especulate. We only know– Sorry, I wouldn't like to give spoilers.
We only know Flutters made it to the back of the castle... To a wall, and that thing didn't kept too far of her, as the sun just peeked out. It gave it enough time to catch up, and what worries me the most, are the final words
They're IDENTICAL to the monster's lexicon, and it feels so off that that was the only thing to come out of "Fluttershy's" mouth. Sure, you can blame it on trauma and relief, but we may never know!
Another small detail I would like to add up into the theory is the fact the creature had patches of different fur added to itself, who's and how? It's creeping to think about it, but... It just resemble skinwalkers or skinstealers a little too much for me to be a coincidence!
Be it whatever it was, I really enjoyed this experience! Looking forward to your future writing.
Great story, I didn't expect that twist and the ending is just perfect.
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I apologize I forgot to add the note but on my website, you can see a picture of the creature https://hanadjisbox.wordpress.com/274-2/
Just for you since you seemed to really enjoy it, the creature’s design is based off of Flutterbye (the creature and Fluttershy are supposed to be similar but opposing)
I have to say, this was set up quite weirdly with celestia's request, but the scariness of the monster makes up for it.
this sentence really does it
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Oh, no need to be sorry! It was just a search away to find out the site! I wanted it to be a surprise, though.
I did like it, of course! The resemblance is quite noticeable, as well as the complete opposing, for example, the thing they both have to do with animals, one taking care of them, and the other taking them for dinner. The roles of prey and hunter played out pretty good!
As for the Flutterbye matter, I'm a bit lost, as I didn't knew about it until now, but I'm looking it up later, for sure! My presence back is to be taken for granted, with surprises, more feedback, commentary, and even theorizing, along with general praising, of course.
Once again, nice done! I'm dying to see more content from you, and your inevitable growth, both as a writer and artist, as in fame. You'll be hearing of me, no doubt.