• Published 23rd Sep 2012
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Twilight's Eulogy - Scorch Xi



Spike delivers a speech for the dearly departed

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Twilights Eulogy

Have you ever felt loss? And I don't mean like losing your favorite toy, or losing a race. I mean true soul shattering loss. I thought I had. I thought I felt loss the day Rarity finally broke down and told me that we could never be together, I thought I had felt loss when Celestia told me the true story of how she had received my egg, and I thought I felt loss the day that our home burnt down.

All of that was trivial compared to this. After losing Rarity I had my older sister there to cheer me up with silly stories. When I learned about my past, I had the only family I've ever had right there holding me as I cried my heart out. When our house burnt down we lost all of our books, pictures, and even most of our money, but we still had each other.

Twilight raised me from the egg. She was always there for me. She took care of me when she was hardly old enough to take care of herself. She could have easily just handed me off to some professor or zoologist, who would treat me like an experiment or a mindless beast. In fact she was expected to. But she saw that spark of intelligence that made me, me. She decided that she was going to raise me and teach me as though I was just as smart as anypony else. If not for Twilight I wouldn't have all the amazing friends I have today, and dragons everywhere would still be thought of as nothing more than mindless killing machines.

When I was a baby and she was hardly more than a filly herself, she was the one that was always there for me. She made sure I had gems to eat. Even when her schedule was full of studies and exams, she still found time to teach me to read and write. Heck, I know more magical theory than any non-unicorn has any reason to know. She made sure that I was smart enough to hold my own when other ponies told me I couldn't. She made sure that every time someone said something mean about me, I knew they were wrong.

It still hurt of course, and sometimes when we would get back home to our tall tower, I would begin to cry about how I was different and how everypony hated me. She didn't brush me off or tell me how her problems were bigger and more important, as anyone would expect of a mare that age. No, she would hold me and tell me how kind and smart I was, she would put everything aside to make sure I felt loved and accepted. She treated me more like a brother or a son than a pet.

And later when the Princess sent us to Ponyville, and Twilight started making all these other friends who were so cool and fun, she still somehow found time to stay home and tell me a bedtime story, or levitate me around the room to make me feel like a super hero. And to help her out, I was her number one assistant. I would run errands, alphabetize books, and even help her with her studies when I could. We always found time for each other.

I remember once, I was in Canterlot talking to the princesses, they had been teaching me how to be a delegate, because we had agreed that when I was older I would be a liaison between ponies and dragons. We had finished my lesson and we were just sitting around telling stories, and we somehow got on the subject of some ponies that the princesses used to know, then they suddenly got sad and I realized that, as long as these two ponies have lived, every single pony they knew died. Then I realized I was going to go through the same thing. Rarity, Applejack, Fluttershy... all of them. I am going watch every single one of them die.

I guess Princess Celestia had expected this to happen one day so she just pulled out a letter and asked me to send it to Twilight. Not even five minutes later Twilight teleported into Celestia's chambers and grabbed me by the head telling me that everything was OK. I cried for hours, and she never left my side. I still sometimes cry when I think about my great lifespan and she's always there holding me when I do. She was always there.

Even when I thought about all my friends dying and how I knew I would have to deal with it someday, I never thought about Twilight dying. She has always been a constant in my mind, and I guess I could never bear the thought of losing her.

The one pony I could never think about losing was the first one to go. You know, I always thought she would die in some great battle with Discord or Chrysalis, all the Elements live too exciting a life for a death like this to be possible. A measly trip and a fall brought down the mighty master of magic, and now I will never get to hear her voice again, or feel her soft coat as she tells me everything is going to be OK. I will never get to see my sister again.

But no one can ever say she didn't live a full life. She was apprenticed under Princess Celestia, one of the greatest minds in history, she proved that dragons are just as intelligent as Ponies, She has saved the world countless times, and she has had the love of some of the greatest friends Equestria has ever known.

Twilight Sparkle was an amazing pony. She was a great friend, a loving sister, a loyal daughter, and, at least in my heart, the greatest mother a dragon could ask for. Equestria as a whole is better for having known Twilight Sparkle, and she will be missed for a very, very long time.

Comments ( 42 )

Ok, at first I was all "Typo in the title? Man, this is going to suck."

Needless to say, it was brilliant. I'd fix that Typo though, it should be "Twilight's" not "Twilights"
People are gonna downvote without reading just for that.

1321249
Fixed! thanks for pointing that out
1321305
thanks for all dem gifs. and it says in the story how she died.

1321305 She tripped and fell to the best of my knowledge, perhaps down some stairs into a box of sharp, rusty mettle pieces.

I thought this was a nice piece. It wasn't earth-shattering, but it was sweet.

I noticed you had a lot of run-on sentences and comma errors. Make sure you only have one thought per sentence, and make sure all your introductory phrases have commas after them. (Those are usually the ones that start with if, in, when, although, because, etc.)

~Scribblestick, TWE reviewer

1321353
Thank you. I'm not very good with grammar, so it is always good to have someone tell me when I screw up

1321321 A little bit but you don't go into details as to what she fell down or what happened in that fall that lead to her demise, also we don't know about the other Elements of Harmony bearers, are they still alive or are they dead? :applejackunsure:

I like this, but the style reads more like a diary entry or something than a eulogy - why would Spike start telling everypony about how Applejack and Fluttershy are going to die, at a funeral?

But nonetheless, I really like this :D Good idea.

1321433
"The one pony I could never think about losing was the first one to go"
Spike basically said that twilight was his first friend to die and this is her funeral so I thought it was to be assumed that everypony else was fine, and as for how she died, I was purposely vague about that. :scootangel:

1321454
well, he was caught up in his emotions, and he was telling a story about how great twilight is so I think he can be excused for saying something so sad

1321465 So you want to leave us hanging? :unsuresweetie:

1321478
lol I was purposely vague, because I couldn't decide how she died. I just know it had something to do with her tripping and falling.

1321492 So even you don't know how she died, than why write it, what good does a tragic sad story like this do if we don't know how the person who's being eulogised died? :facehoof:

1321504
The story is about Spike and how he is dealing with this emotionally, not how twilight died.

Ha! I just came away from someone mentioning that she finds Spike forgettable and considers him to be a pet, no better than Owlowiscious. This dose of medicine arrived right on time.

Except Twilight's dead. :pinkiesad2:

1321525
Glad I could be of help. and in anything I write, someone is bound to die

1321514 Still if you are going to mention how Twilight died you could at least make sure we're not left guessing, sorry if I'm giving you a hard time because I really did like this fic but the way you wrote Twilight's death left me and probably a few other readers with more questions than answers. :eeyup:

1321561
I completely understand, and I kind of did that on purpose, I like leaving the reader with the feeling that more went on behind the scenes than they know.

1321536 Oh, and just so it's clear, I wasn't talking about wanting a pick-me-up after reading someone's cheap opinion: I just thought the coincidence was cool. :twilightsheepish:

1321686
lol yea i got that

1321321 Well I kinda meant a nice detailed discription.

1321698 Tragic, isn't it?

1321712 I know...damn it was good though. I kinda hope the other Mane 6 are okay.:fluttercry:

1321730 They will die too, as the story stated.

Think the first bit would read better if it talked about his first crush finally breaking down, rather than mentioning Rarity by name. As fans of the show, we know he means Rarity, but saying first crush would keep more privacy for Rarity and him, as well as make more sense, for all the strangers in the audience.

Found some errors:
they had been teaching me how to be a delegate, because we had agreed that when I was older I would delegate between ponies and dragons - the verb delegate does not describe what the noun delegate does, unless, of course, the delegate spends his time appointing others. Liaise would probably be closer to the word you are looking for.

I guess I could never bare - bear.

Rarity, Apple Jack, Fluttershy - Applejack is one word.

all the Elements live too exciting of life’s for a - Should be all the Elements live too exciting a life for a or all the Elements live lives too exciting for a

Also incorrectly tagged as a Tragedy. Twilight falling down is a not a downfall. :scootangel:

1322781
Thank you! I was hoping that someone would point out all of the grammar mistakes that I was sure I had missed. I agree with you on all things except the Tragedy mark. I think this story could really go either way on that point. I debated on whether or not to mark it as tragedy and I decided to keep it as tragedy.

I'm sorry to act like a complete ass but, Why do people insist on killing off twilight?:rainbowhuh:

1322907
Because she is the most emotionally connected character to everypony on the show so it has more of an impact on everypony's emotions when she dies, including most of us Bronies.

1322853

Glad to help.

And as to the tragedy bit, combining sad and tragedy is actually an example of what not to do in the FAQ: Basically, don't have two conflicting tags on your story. For example, a story cannot be both Sad and Tragic, as they are just completely different genres. Use your common sense!

A tragedy would require the event that brings the character low to happen in the course of the story, usually toward the end, and typically due to a flaw of the character. For example, if you were to tell the tale of how Luna became Nightmare Moon and gets banished. Or a story where Twilight's desire for magical power leads to her accidentally killing Spike. Things build up, then the bad stuff happens.

On the other hand, a story about Luna being sad because of what she did as Nightmare Moon or Twilight being sad because she caused Spike's death, those could be sad, assuming the authors goal is to make the readers feel sad. Things happened, either before or early in the story and the characters are sad about it. Yours is this type, with the events that set the tone happening before the beginning of the story.

1322955
Damn, I guess you're right. Thanks again. I'm glad to get some real constructive criticism .

1322929 True. It always makes me sad when i read a fic about her death or if she is hurt. Thanks for telling me and not going mean on me or anything.

1322985
No problem. An honest question deserves an honest answer.

1322929
Poor Twilight... I wonder what she has to say for this...

why did I have to be listening to this?:pinkiesad2::fluttercry::applecry::raritydespair::raritycry:

Your grammar is still rough around the edges, but you've blown my mind once again! :pinkiehappy:

1330184
Thank you! Hopefully I will get better at my grammar eventually.

1372188
YAY! I got the clapping man! thank you :)

post-alicornication this doesn't have near the impact it once would have, but still, not bad. but then there's the other two parts of that three-parter to see...


one typo btw; 7th paragraph ending, ' I am going watch every single one of them die.' you're missing a 'to' here, you know where it goes i'm sure :P

2724865 I have to agree with you there, but I wrote this pre-princess, and unil that story arc is over we have no idea how mortal she will be

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