I like this

part 3......they end up in the stomach and well you know what happens next.... :(

11352709
naw naw, I don't wanna see that. I like those girls.

Pretty good man just one would needs to be edited.

Through needs to be changed to thought

He decided to forgo using his hooves at all. Either way any attempt to delay the inevitable was futile as his head flared and load after load of hot cum shot out, painting his chest, and a good bit of the ground around him as he moaned. His body was wracked with spasms as bolts of pleasure shot through him. It was so intense he couldn't even form a coherent though, able to do nothing but ride it out as he writhed on the ground for several minutes, even after his balls had nothing left to give.

11353001
Thanks for the feedback, I went through and fixed those mistakes. “Wouldn’t” does belong in the last one though. He knew she was old enough to understand, he just wasn’t comfortable explaining it.

11353027
Welcome. And kk. Maybe remove didn't then.

Oh man! I hope they're all stuck inside Big Mac for a long time. I'd love to read more. This is such a good story.

What did Apple bloom mean about a calf?

"Dangit, dangit, dangit!" Applebloom spat. "Well, as much as I hate to say this brother, ah'm gonna hafta help. If I can birth a calf, how hard can this be?"

I think this sentence in your story is missing the word "as".

11358663
Fixed. Thanks for pointing it out.

Loving the story so far