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Coma

After two years in a supposedly fictional world said to be inside her head, Tara Sparks wakes up from a coma, and has to face living in the real world.

Chapters (3)

Chapter 1 · 18th Sep 2012 · 1,174 words
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Chapter 2 · 25th Sep 2012 · 1,040 words
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Why I am not updatng currently. · 8th Oct 2012 · 43 words
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eiuwmnsdfj #1 · Sep 17th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

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primeoetgrunn

primeoetgrunn #2 · Sep 17th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

I like this, cannot wait for the next chapter

Astiam300

Astiam300 #3 · Sep 17th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

Wooaaaaaah... That was really dark, I love how you pulled off this concept of the coma :)

Oh, and you might wanna correct this:

Twilight's bo
x was getting too tight to fit in.

Saki

Saki #4 · Sep 17th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

1291033 Who put freaking ads here? NONONONONO REPORTED

RedSektor

RedSektor #5 · Sep 18th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

1291488 HOW DARE YOU CORRECT ME! RAGE RAGE RAGE! Nah, but anyway I fixed it.

Astiam300

Astiam300 #6 · Sep 18th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

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Okay

RedSektor

RedSektor #7 · Sep 18th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

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Carpinus Caroliniana

Carpinus Caroliniana #8 · Sep 18th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

You plan on continuing this? It's a really interesting, if dark story.

Let me see if I can catch the analogues:

Twilight Sparkle --> Tara Sparks
Celestia --> Professor Clementine
Spike --> Mike
Shining Armor --> Shawn
Discord --> Dr. Discner
*Speculation*
Applejack --> Jacqueline Appel
Rainbow Dash --> Raina Dashiell
Rarity --> Rachel Bellau
Fluttershy --> Freya Shyes
Pinkie Pie --> Paulina Parker
Mrs. Cup Cake --> Carson Baker
Mr. Carrot Cake --> Carl Baker
Cheerilee --> Cherry Lee

You know what would be really creepy and an awesome mindfuck? If the college town she returns to is eerily like Ponyville.

On a side note, you may wanna proofread before you fully release it because there's some really noticible errors.

One question, why Professor Clementine instead of Professor Celeste or hell, even Professor Celestia? Full disclaimer, one of the TAs in my chemistry lab is named Celestia.

RedSektor

RedSektor #9 · Sep 19th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

1299204 Yeah I plan on continuing, I just have an issue where if I try and write more than one chapter a week, my stories come out utter shit because I have to balance public and online school, learning the piano (Still cant find the damn batteries), coming up with ideas for what to draw because I havent uploaded to DA in a month, and headaches. Not to mention finding a job. Oh and the errors are because I keep forgetting that you cant upload files to the site, and you have to write it into a in-browser text box, so I end up copying and pasting into it, a lot of things like in Twilights note to Celestia white there is about ten spaces between "Buck it up" and "Take responsibility" are simply the fact it doesnt like copy and pasted stories. Not to mention I have bad luck and every keyboard I have is sometimes unresponsive in some keys (I have bought and snapped six keyboards over my knee from rage in the past 2 months.) Oh and all of those names are right, and I will see about using that college town idea.