(1) Yeah, things have been going rough for everyone, and poor Beatrix is sad. Omina culpa tua, does that mean “it’s your fault?”
*checks Google translate* Yep!
Hmm, sounds like Omen is going to torment Beatrix, or at least her fears are going to do a good enough job in his place. Which honestly is better for him, much more time for him to work behind the scenes.
(2) Oh no, Dream Beatrix got her horn severed! And while I question if a fertility symbol would’ve actually worked, given that only Zeloph has been confirmed to knock up Beatrix (unless you count Bellatrix in Vampiric, but I assume that was before Bea became infertile), the Emotional Damage ™ is nevertheless present.
(3) Eh… blood and gore in a clop scene ._.
Well, I guess this is a way of continuously dealing Emotional Damage to Beatrix. Especially since all of her friends and family proclaim how Beatrix screwed them over.
(4) Oh dear, if Iclyn and the others hadn’t intervened could Omen have successfully broken Beatrix despite not being near her at all? Damn, his powers are becoming more and more powerful!
And yeah, it’s like Iclyn says, even in Beatrix’s nightmares they somehow end up having a twisted lewd nature to them, kind of what happened to Midnight.
At least in reality her friends are still there for her.
(5) Yeah, it seems that everyone has a lot to think about, which includes Eclipsed and her realizing that the two she looked up to the most had indirectly hurt her and that she technically was just a fake.
(6) Hmmm, just realized that I never used Google Translate to know what Chisana is saying, but to be honest the story does a pretty good job of making sure the reader can flow with the story and regard Chisana’s words as something akin to the accents Oona and Moxxi have instead of constantly translating the words.
Good job!
(7) Words of wisdom indeed from everyone! It is very fun to see everyone hang out.
(8) Ya know, apart from the one time that I did draw Lightning Spark (and then Nota subsequently made an even better version in less than 30 minutes) and included her in a story (which I deleted), I never really gave Lightning Spark’s build much thought.
I might consider drawing all of my characters as my art improves. I really like the album art cover I did for Layla and that’s kind of giving me hope that I can hopefully get better at drawing.
Also might as well make a new story where most of the OCs I have are included. Don’t plan on making a massive hundred chapter story (which would probably be Midnight’s Main Timeline, from Youth to Pre Lightendark Entry) yet, but a shorter series would be good. And hey, maybe I could feature new OCs.
What are the cup sizes of Snowy and Lightning Spark within this world? Obviously Layla has the biggest (idk what is her size either) but Snowy has gone through some… radical changes thanks to the changelings to say the least. While Lightning Spark just now has time to actually develop her form since she was also captured.
(9) I wonder when the pendant will become a crucial part of the story, if it does end up playing a significant role. Like, it has been mentioned a bunch of times and while its initial purpose was to simply introduce Kyube and Chisana to the gang, it would be pretty cool to see that it has some special properties thanks to the fact that the timeline was reset.
Like, what image is specifically within the pendant again? Because if it has a picture of Thunder, Snowy, Lightning and Midnight then it might actually be a relic from the past since in this world Thunder dies before Midnight is ever born. If that’s the case then it confirms that there’s something crucial that might be unlocked in the future.
(10) Well, at least the UFO can be healed easily, and that Lightning is currently not being supercharged.
Though I guess they should be careful of putting Equinox and Viscera in the same room.
Lol, Eclipse you have to run away before they force you to show everyone the vid! XD
Well at least we’ll now be able to see some interactions between those in Layla’s ship and Eclipse’s band. The fact that the storm has transferred to her world is a bit concerning. Also
Did the Demi Humans just get canceled by this world’s version of Twitter!? XD
(11) Alright, looks like Zeloph and Beatrix are now going to talk. At least Beatrix will now be able to say what she’s concerned about.
As I’m reading her explanation, yeah she does look like she’s been cornered. But Zeloph does raise good points like how Oona (and maybe even Aba) would end up dying of old age and that she doesn’t need the Necronomicon to do the right thing.
At least Zeloph has got through Beatrix. Hopefully there’s still time to prevent even more horrible tragedies from occurring.
(12) Oh no, it seems that Trixie and her two backstage friends might soon be heading to some form of chopping block! And it seems the story confirms that this is indeed the Trixie that had been Beatrix’s mother.
If Trixie escaped a terrible fate the first few times, maybe she might get lucky again? But then again she’s not protected by plot armor as she was in the beginning. Wonder what happened to those in Beatrix’s world, was it twisted like the others thanks to the Reset?
Welp, seems that her friends are screwed (literally) though again depending on time they might still end up being saved. Like the EqG versions have already died, let’s hope that the MLP versions of Trixie’s friends don’t die as well.
And Trixie herself is being plowed by Futa Chrysalis. Didn’t expect that.
(13) Wait nevermind, her friends are now dead. RIP
(14) Ah, Sombra has arrived. Interesting moral decision, he wants Cerise untouched. Sure it’s because he wants to turn her evil, but at the same time he feels like a father wanting his children to spread their wings. Of course, these wings would be made out of darkness but again, twisted compass.
At least Chrysalis can now enjoy Sombra’s new (stolen) body.
(15) Wait. Fabled knight lost in the Crystal Changeling War brought from cold storage. More useful than as a breeder, almost spend, Onomas can’t be passed down.
Are they talking about Thunder Storm and Snowy Blizzard!?
Oh dear, that is sure going to be a very deadly combo considering that Thunder Storm died while angry (at least I think so but either ways he died), so that means his spirit can be easily changed. Also depending if he got an Onoma or not in his final moments, having a Shockwave / Sonic Boom type Onoma that can potentially rupture organs and shatter shields would be very strong. And a Blizzard type Onoma would be super powerful as well if we’re talking about Snowy.
Depending on when they convert Snowy, she might have a chance to live afterwards as she’d just be a living soul inside of a suit of armor, not an undead one. Like I’m sure they’ll try and have her die by seeing if the changelings inside of her pop or eat her out, but if she doesn’t die then that could potentially lead to her someday being freed, kind of what happened with Zuri and her other sisters.
(16) How would the planet even be alive, heck how did the changelings mine all the way to the core? Physics!?
(17) Oh wait, he also plans to have his fun with Cerise? Well I guess this always happens across different timelines… But at least he also plans to have Cerise be on his side as queen?? Hmm, jealousy and tension could potentially spark between Chrysalis and Sombra over Cerise. Might even allow her to escape if she manages to resist long enough.
(18) Is Deinos better at chess than Midnight or is Midnight’s mindset troubled that he can’t focus? Also I guess he is older so that probably would reduce his skill. Well, I guess we’re going to have a discussion similar to Beatrix and Zeloph, hopefully with similar results.
Guessing Deinos showing the reality of the situation between changelings and equestrians and then offering the possibility of giving Midnight a way to remove his Hyper gene certainly helped Midnight flip his opinion. Mission success I guess. And now Midnight has shown his friendship by asking Deinos for a rematch. Thumbs up.
Somewhat expected Midnight to complain, saying that he needs his Hyper form to help in the war, but at the same time his Hyper form has done nothing but directly give Midnight so much pain physically and emotionally, unlike Beatrix where the Necronomicon has been the core part of her memories, the good the bad, her powers her challenges.
Hope that this solution of Deinos can be found before Midnight decides to press his luck in another battle. Or that Deinos can do this fast enough so that Midnight can quickly switch to his Onoma, which hopefully will leave him at a similar level to his Hyper form, whether with the same power or less power but higher stamina.
(19) Lol, I thought the cards would be poker for the gang, but it turns out they were clop!
Is Analise Anarchia? Sorry but I caught this and I wonder if Moxxi suddenly has a new nickname or if it’s autocorrect doing its thing.
Looks like the Twins, no matter which version, want to create some sauce with Arcanum!
(20) Oh, time to see what else happened in Midnight’s homeworld!
So Bloody Merry from Arcanum’s timeline has arrived into Midnight’s world? Cool!
And I’ve finished reading this chapter, though apparently I’ve been told the other story’s chapter is distinct from this one? Alright, I’ll check it out, probably tomorrow though. I'm a bit sick right now.
I think the most interesting scene is the Chrysalis scene, specifically where I’m predicting that Thunder and Snowy are going to be used as weapons for the changelings. It feels like it might end up happening. Next place is Midnight finally showing signs of getting along with Deinos, pretty nice to see him smile upon realizing that Deinos could help cure his Hyper gene, though I’m guessing Midnight will also need Zeloph to cure his soul since it might end up fracturing if he also decides to go all in on his Onoma.
I’ll see if I can write another comment for UaR but if not I’m happy to have read this chapter. Took a long while. See ya.
11579460 4) And kill Beatrix just like that? That wouldn’t be as fun. 8) Can’t speak for Snowy/Lightning, but I can attest that Layla is at least a size G. 19) Moxxi’s true name is Analise. Anarchia was just a name to mock her by the Divine Father.
11579514 (4) Oh yeah Oona was choking Beatrix in the dream.
So wait you can die in dreams and die in real life in this world? Cause well I assumed Beatrix would end up getting thrown into perpetual suffering (imagine William Afton Custom Night).
(8) At least G? I'm thinking bigger since Chrysalis would probably be a close contender as well given that she's the mother of all changelings. And a bunch of characters are already at DD.
Who can speak for Snowy and Lightning? Me? Hmmm, I do need to draw them more often. Will try to do that when I have enough time.
(19) Ah, I just thought Anarchia was her true name. My bad.
11579460 3. Yeah, wasn't any blood in the scene before Nota's edit, but it does fit a sacrifice scene!
7. Lightning is probably a C cup, Snowy over a DD+ even before the changeling alterations?
9. Good question, not sure where the pendant is headed myself, I love the idea it's connected to the old reality!
15. You got it!
16. Based on Hollow Earth theory, basically magic. Chrysalis had her changelings tunnel to every other hive, assassinated the protoquen of each, and claimed their offspring for her own until she basically ruled the entire underground.
18. Mostly due to Midnight's distracted condition, although Web Spinner is highly intelligent, so...
19. Good question, she's been called Ana for short, so maybe...?
(7) If Lightning had lived a normal life she probably would be D or DD (like in JAM but I'm currently wondering whether I want to consider her build there as canon or not. Will have to decide later in a future story)
If Snowy is DD+ before she was captured, she might be F or G now. But if Layla has the biggest set, she's probably K for... King????
Idk, anime chest logic lol.
(9) Depends on what's inside the pendant itself. I don't remember if any photo was mentioned. If the picture just has Thunder, Snowy, and Lightning then the pendant is just a pendant. But if it has Midnight as well then it's clearly a relic of the past since Thunder dies before Midnight is ever born.
(15) Nani.
(16) Ah, Hollow Earth? Well I guess this is a magical place of ponies and mythical creatures, so hollow earth shouldn't surprise me.
(18) Well at least they're on friendlier terms now.
(19) Nota explained that Analise is her true name. And I thought Anarchia was!
11579702 Here's how Notaponyperson and I typically write these collabs:
1. We discuss ideas.
2. He writes an outline.
3. I bang out a first draft.
4. We pass it back and forth, adding to and editing.
5. The finished result is posted, with the final edit decided on whose page the fic in question is posted on.
In this case, the Beatrix scene is more Nota's, while the Chrysalis stuff is more mine. You can definitely see the seams between our styles at times, such as he's much better at humor!
11579787 Well, i made a scene where ponies are affected by chaos and the first is a nightmare of Equestria attacked, the ponies blamed they caused this
I deeply apologize for taking so long with my work. But I have a house to that I am restoring with myself as the sole laborer. That said I am not a very good one. Big house.
Anyway.
That said I refused to spoil it but Bloody Merry does not die via bullet. I planed this, and while it will be over the top both Merry and Folklore both technically die at the final battle of The Symphony of Canterlot. Folklore though planed his "death" well in advance and gave the least expected the tool to do it. (High risk madness to save himself, you'll see. My first true attempt at both the Chekov's Gun and the Chekov's Gunman at once!)
I loved the interaction between Zeloph and Beatrix, she need not fear mortality. The price of her power is not worth it.
I can see you both took notes on me mentioning how much I enjoy the Twins from the Manor. I like my Hentai Anime Maid Fetish. That said... Bloody Merry returning from the grave through what I assume is Necromantic Bullshitery of the highest order, or a case of Reality Warping in what I assume is Desire Made Manifest.
Folklore as a character is many related things across his life until his death.
In order is, Son of a 19th century Druid far from home and his Medium wife. Antique Shop Clerk for a harsh teacher of the ways of Taoist Chi. University Student and Fencer. Soldier. Remorseful Bringer of Oblivion through a terrifyingly effective Chemical Weapon. Chemist, Occultist Magus, and Detective. Adventurer and Monster Hunter. Vigilante, Monster Hunter, Magus. Knight, Magus, Leader. - *You are Here. General. Mentor, Scientist. Scarred Old Stallion. A dead Hero.
11581140 No problem, real life always comes first!
Different continuity from yours so as not to contradict it, so think of this as a potential death Bloody Merry could have had. You're onto something with your speculation, but I won't spoil why she mysteriously returned!
The twins seemed a good contrast to Arcanum's no-nonsense 'tude! Glad he's finally able to have a happy moment!
11581275 To be fair it's a 75 year long life. We tend to do a lot of things and are not necessarily defined by our day jobs. In Folklore's case his life is the Equestrain Equivalent of being in the middle of the worst of the 20th Century.
From Eastern Zebrica, Goul, Ereen, Albion, The Fay Lands, North East Equestria, to Nippon, Germania, Arabia, Scorpan, and even the Dreamlands, The Subterranean Ruins of Hyperborea and it's Lost world of Dinosaur Mutated offshoots, Mars, the realms owned by the Shub-Niggurath worshipers, Yuggoth, K'n-Yan, Atlantis, Sheol (Hell), and Antarctica. In that life he stepped in all mentioned. He might have been until this story never meant to go to whole other alternate universes. But the fact he ended up in a fabricated universe, the nearest planet to /Earth/Terra, and an artificial planet just outside of the Solar System through alien abduction, premade Ancient Hyperborean Stargate, and Astral Projection. He was meant to see more than any of his contemporaries could even begin to imagine.
The Misconception that Folklore is innately a Detective is understandable. That is the mask I gave him. But in the bottom of his character he is a Clark Ashton Smith Wizard forced to live during the time of both World Wars.
Even with all of this, it is his protoge Spike that brings back life on the planet decades after his own death, and the organization that he created that made up the first Terrestrials capable of being able to defeat Aliens.
As weird as it sounds I traded any boring traditionally OP Gary Stu protagonist that bangs all the main cast of MLP and is worshiped for common decency and having the glory practically handed to him, by creating a Pulp Science fiction and Dark fantasy Odysseus that many believe I wasted on Pony Fiction, and that put some the pieces in motion for his species to save itself whose full scope of his action are not fully seen or acknowledge until long after his death. He still dies with no children of his own, and had lost an eye, and a foreleg permanently. Though with the amount of blood that had to be pumped back into him, and how much flesh and bone he had to either regenerate or replace he can be considered almost the pony Ship of Theseus by his death at 75 years of age.
Spike ends up doing more impressive shit. Like killing all the Lords of Sheol himself, stopping a couple of Alien invasions, and his blood restoring organic life to the planet after the Great Old Ones where done ravaging it.
11581300 Arcanum wears many hats in your lore, but detective is definitely the vibe Symphony of Canterlot's cover gives. However, he's mainly described as a warlock here, emphasizing his magic skills.
It could also work with his more hard edged style, since from what I've heard warlock means 'Oath Breaker', giving him the potential vibe of someone who's fallen from grace and feels a need to prove himself? (Not necessarily to others, but in his own mind.)
11581305 He had used corpses as sandbags. He was forced at gunpoint to produce a chemical weapon during his time in the legion, and during said war he had helped in a mutiny. Had chained his Commanding Officer that conspired to kill him to take full credit for the "discovery" of his chemical weapon to a pole in the middle of the fort courtyard and let him be eaten alive by a hoard of Zebra Created Zombies.
And this was his first war who he had fought in for four years. It's the reason he got C-PTSD and lived as an alcoholic bum living in the Manehattan Subway tunnels drinking with sapient undead and other bums for several months of constant attempted death by alcohol poisoning at 23. (Yes he retuned to University. Only barely finished his bachelor's degree in chemistry before he decided to attempt to die in the battlefield because Yog-Sothoth forced his mother to blow herself up with magic ectoplasm, and his dad became a bum and left to be with the Fairies, and his uncle dying of brain aneurism. Add to that Archive Key Yearling (Daring Do) using him for early fame while still being students as his first relationship.)
Alright, time to start commenting!
(1) Yeah, things have been going rough for everyone, and poor Beatrix is sad. Omina culpa tua, does that mean “it’s your fault?”
*checks Google translate* Yep!
Hmm, sounds like Omen is going to torment Beatrix, or at least her fears are going to do a good enough job in his place. Which honestly is better for him, much more time for him to work behind the scenes.
(2) Oh no, Dream Beatrix got her horn severed! And while I question if a fertility symbol would’ve actually worked, given that only Zeloph has been confirmed to knock up Beatrix (unless you count Bellatrix in Vampiric, but I assume that was before Bea became infertile), the Emotional Damage ™ is nevertheless present.
(3) Eh… blood and gore in a clop scene ._.
Well, I guess this is a way of continuously dealing Emotional Damage to Beatrix. Especially since all of her friends and family proclaim how Beatrix screwed them over.
(4) Oh dear, if Iclyn and the others hadn’t intervened could Omen have successfully broken Beatrix despite not being near her at all? Damn, his powers are becoming more and more powerful!
And yeah, it’s like Iclyn says, even in Beatrix’s nightmares they somehow end up having a twisted lewd nature to them, kind of what happened to Midnight.
At least in reality her friends are still there for her.
(5) Yeah, it seems that everyone has a lot to think about, which includes Eclipsed and her realizing that the two she looked up to the most had indirectly hurt her and that she technically was just a fake.
(6) Hmmm, just realized that I never used Google Translate to know what Chisana is saying, but to be honest the story does a pretty good job of making sure the reader can flow with the story and regard Chisana’s words as something akin to the accents Oona and Moxxi have instead of constantly translating the words.
Good job!
(7) Words of wisdom indeed from everyone! It is very fun to see everyone hang out.
(8) Ya know, apart from the one time that I did draw Lightning Spark (and then Nota subsequently made an even better version in less than 30 minutes) and included her in a story (which I deleted), I never really gave Lightning Spark’s build much thought.
I might consider drawing all of my characters as my art improves. I really like the album art cover I did for Layla and that’s kind of giving me hope that I can hopefully get better at drawing.
Also might as well make a new story where most of the OCs I have are included. Don’t plan on making a massive hundred chapter story (which would probably be Midnight’s Main Timeline, from Youth to Pre Lightendark Entry) yet, but a shorter series would be good. And hey, maybe I could feature new OCs.
What are the cup sizes of Snowy and Lightning Spark within this world? Obviously Layla has the biggest (idk what is her size either) but Snowy has gone through some… radical changes thanks to the changelings to say the least. While Lightning Spark just now has time to actually develop her form since she was also captured.
(9) I wonder when the pendant will become a crucial part of the story, if it does end up playing a significant role. Like, it has been mentioned a bunch of times and while its initial purpose was to simply introduce Kyube and Chisana to the gang, it would be pretty cool to see that it has some special properties thanks to the fact that the timeline was reset.
Like, what image is specifically within the pendant again? Because if it has a picture of Thunder, Snowy, Lightning and Midnight then it might actually be a relic from the past since in this world Thunder dies before Midnight is ever born. If that’s the case then it confirms that there’s something crucial that might be unlocked in the future.
(10) Well, at least the UFO can be healed easily, and that Lightning is currently not being supercharged.
Though I guess they should be careful of putting Equinox and Viscera in the same room.
Lol, Eclipse you have to run away before they force you to show everyone the vid! XD
Well at least we’ll now be able to see some interactions between those in Layla’s ship and Eclipse’s band. The fact that the storm has transferred to her world is a bit concerning. Also
Did the Demi Humans just get canceled by this world’s version of Twitter!? XD
(11) Alright, looks like Zeloph and Beatrix are now going to talk. At least Beatrix will now be able to say what she’s concerned about.
As I’m reading her explanation, yeah she does look like she’s been cornered. But Zeloph does raise good points like how Oona (and maybe even Aba) would end up dying of old age and that she doesn’t need the Necronomicon to do the right thing.
At least Zeloph has got through Beatrix. Hopefully there’s still time to prevent even more horrible tragedies from occurring.
(12) Oh no, it seems that Trixie and her two backstage friends might soon be heading to some form of chopping block! And it seems the story confirms that this is indeed the Trixie that had been Beatrix’s mother.
If Trixie escaped a terrible fate the first few times, maybe she might get lucky again? But then again she’s not protected by plot armor as she was in the beginning. Wonder what happened to those in Beatrix’s world, was it twisted like the others thanks to the Reset?
Welp, seems that her friends are screwed (literally) though again depending on time they might still end up being saved. Like the EqG versions have already died, let’s hope that the MLP versions of Trixie’s friends don’t die as well.
And Trixie herself is being plowed by Futa Chrysalis. Didn’t expect that.
(13) Wait nevermind, her friends are now dead. RIP
(14) Ah, Sombra has arrived. Interesting moral decision, he wants Cerise untouched. Sure it’s because he wants to turn her evil, but at the same time he feels like a father wanting his children to spread their wings. Of course, these wings would be made out of darkness but again, twisted compass.
At least Chrysalis can now enjoy Sombra’s new (stolen) body.
(15) Wait. Fabled knight lost in the Crystal Changeling War brought from cold storage. More useful than as a breeder, almost spend, Onomas can’t be passed down.
Are they talking about Thunder Storm and Snowy Blizzard!?
Oh dear, that is sure going to be a very deadly combo considering that Thunder Storm died while angry (at least I think so but either ways he died), so that means his spirit can be easily changed. Also depending if he got an Onoma or not in his final moments, having a Shockwave / Sonic Boom type Onoma that can potentially rupture organs and shatter shields would be very strong. And a Blizzard type Onoma would be super powerful as well if we’re talking about Snowy.
Depending on when they convert Snowy, she might have a chance to live afterwards as she’d just be a living soul inside of a suit of armor, not an undead one. Like I’m sure they’ll try and have her die by seeing if the changelings inside of her pop or eat her out, but if she doesn’t die then that could potentially lead to her someday being freed, kind of what happened with Zuri and her other sisters.
(16) How would the planet even be alive, heck how did the changelings mine all the way to the core? Physics!?
(17) Oh wait, he also plans to have his fun with Cerise? Well I guess this always happens across different timelines… But at least he also plans to have Cerise be on his side as queen?? Hmm, jealousy and tension could potentially spark between Chrysalis and Sombra over Cerise. Might even allow her to escape if she manages to resist long enough.
(18) Is Deinos better at chess than Midnight or is Midnight’s mindset troubled that he can’t focus? Also I guess he is older so that probably would reduce his skill. Well, I guess we’re going to have a discussion similar to Beatrix and Zeloph, hopefully with similar results.
Guessing Deinos showing the reality of the situation between changelings and equestrians and then offering the possibility of giving Midnight a way to remove his Hyper gene certainly helped Midnight flip his opinion. Mission success I guess. And now Midnight has shown his friendship by asking Deinos for a rematch. Thumbs up.
Somewhat expected Midnight to complain, saying that he needs his Hyper form to help in the war, but at the same time his Hyper form has done nothing but directly give Midnight so much pain physically and emotionally, unlike Beatrix where the Necronomicon has been the core part of her memories, the good the bad, her powers her challenges.
Hope that this solution of Deinos can be found before Midnight decides to press his luck in another battle. Or that Deinos can do this fast enough so that Midnight can quickly switch to his Onoma, which hopefully will leave him at a similar level to his Hyper form, whether with the same power or less power but higher stamina.
(19) Lol, I thought the cards would be poker for the gang, but it turns out they were clop!
Is Analise Anarchia? Sorry but I caught this and I wonder if Moxxi suddenly has a new nickname or if it’s autocorrect doing its thing.
Looks like the Twins, no matter which version, want to create some sauce with Arcanum!
(20) Oh, time to see what else happened in Midnight’s homeworld!
So Bloody Merry from Arcanum’s timeline has arrived into Midnight’s world? Cool!
And I’ve finished reading this chapter, though apparently I’ve been told the other story’s chapter is distinct from this one? Alright, I’ll check it out, probably tomorrow though. I'm a bit sick right now.
I think the most interesting scene is the Chrysalis scene, specifically where I’m predicting that Thunder and Snowy are going to be used as weapons for the changelings. It feels like it might end up happening. Next place is Midnight finally showing signs of getting along with Deinos, pretty nice to see him smile upon realizing that Deinos could help cure his Hyper gene, though I’m guessing Midnight will also need Zeloph to cure his soul since it might end up fracturing if he also decides to go all in on his Onoma.
I’ll see if I can write another comment for UaR but if not I’m happy to have read this chapter. Took a long while. See ya.
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4) And kill Beatrix just like that? That wouldn’t be as fun.
8) Can’t speak for Snowy/Lightning, but I can attest that Layla is at least a size G.
19) Moxxi’s true name is Analise. Anarchia was just a name to mock her by the Divine Father.
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(4) Oh yeah Oona was choking Beatrix in the dream.
So wait you can die in dreams and die in real life in this world? Cause well I assumed Beatrix would end up getting thrown into perpetual suffering (imagine William Afton Custom Night).
(8) At least G? I'm thinking bigger since Chrysalis would probably be a close contender as well given that she's the mother of all changelings. And a bunch of characters are already at DD.
Who can speak for Snowy and Lightning? Me? Hmmm, I do need to draw them more often. Will try to do that when I have enough time.
(19) Ah, I just thought Anarchia was her true name. My bad.
So no comment on 9 or 15?
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3. Yeah, wasn't any blood in the scene before Nota's edit, but it does fit a sacrifice scene!
7. Lightning is probably a C cup, Snowy over a DD+ even before the changeling alterations?
9. Good question, not sure where the pendant is headed myself, I love the idea it's connected to the old reality!
15. You got it!
16. Based on Hollow Earth theory, basically magic. Chrysalis had her changelings tunnel to every other hive, assassinated the protoquen of each, and claimed their offspring for her own until she basically ruled the entire underground.
18. Mostly due to Midnight's distracted condition, although Web Spinner is highly intelligent, so...
19. Good question, she's been called Ana for short, so maybe...?
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4) Yep.
And nothing between those comments has drawn my attention to reply.
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(4) Ah, very interesting.
Hmmm... Alright, well if silence is yes I might be correct or completely wrong. Either ways I can't wait to see the direction the story will take!
No spoilers for me lol.
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(3) Guess so.
(7) If Lightning had lived a normal life she probably would be D or DD (like in JAM but I'm currently wondering whether I want to consider her build there as canon or not. Will have to decide later in a future story)
If Snowy is DD+ before she was captured, she might be F or G now. But if Layla has the biggest set, she's probably K for... King????
Idk, anime chest logic lol.
(9) Depends on what's inside the pendant itself. I don't remember if any photo was mentioned. If the picture just has Thunder, Snowy, and Lightning then the pendant is just a pendant. But if it has Midnight as well then it's clearly a relic of the past since Thunder dies before Midnight is ever born.
(15) Nani.
(16) Ah, Hollow Earth? Well I guess this is a magical place of ponies and mythical creatures, so hollow earth shouldn't surprise me.
(18) Well at least they're on friendlier terms now.
(19) Nota explained that Analise is her true name. And I thought Anarchia was!
Nicely done! I cant see any difference in your cultist scene to what nota did. Just saying not that either of you gets victim of the rules.
And it reminds me of something i did, no offense
But i find sombra is quite in character.
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That's because the stories have united, thus parts of the chapter are the same.
Things probably will change once the stories split apart again
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Of course. It just says not to post
thus i was unsure about the cultist scene
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Well they work together. They're co authors so there should be no issue here.
It's like Collab crossover stories, I guess.
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I hope the staff sees it so
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It's fine.
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Okay
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Here's how Notaponyperson and I typically write these collabs:
1. We discuss ideas.
2. He writes an outline.
3. I bang out a first draft.
4. We pass it back and forth, adding to and editing.
5. The finished result is posted, with the final edit decided on whose page the fic in question is posted on.
In this case, the Beatrix scene is more Nota's, while the Chrysalis stuff is more mine. You can definitely see the seams between our styles at times, such as he's much better at humor!
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Of course. I was just afraid some staff guy might get you for this one rule.
As for my scene, Pardon, old habit. Its the "your fault" thing
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In which story?
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Do you know warhammer 40K?
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Ah, barely familiar with it. I'm aware of vague stuff like the God Emperor, orcs, space marines, Sisters of Battle, Slanesh, etc.
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Well, i made a scene where ponies are affected by chaos and the first is a nightmare of Equestria attacked, the ponies blamed they caused this
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I deeply apologize for taking so long with my work. But I have a house to that I am restoring with myself as the sole laborer. That said I am not a very good one. Big house.
Anyway.
That said I refused to spoil it but Bloody Merry does not die via bullet. I planed this, and while it will be over the top both Merry and Folklore both technically die at the final battle of The Symphony of Canterlot. Folklore though planed his "death" well in advance and gave the least expected the tool to do it. (High risk madness to save himself, you'll see. My first true attempt at both the Chekov's Gun and the Chekov's Gunman at once!)
I loved the interaction between Zeloph and Beatrix, she need not fear mortality. The price of her power is not worth it.
I can see you both took notes on me mentioning how much I enjoy the Twins from the Manor. I like my Hentai Anime Maid Fetish. That said... Bloody Merry returning from the grave through what I assume is Necromantic Bullshitery of the highest order, or a case of Reality Warping in what I assume is Desire Made Manifest.
Folklore as a character is many related things across his life until his death.
In order is, Son of a 19th century Druid far from home and his Medium wife.
Antique Shop Clerk for a harsh teacher of the ways of Taoist Chi.
University Student and Fencer.
Soldier.
Remorseful Bringer of Oblivion through a terrifyingly effective Chemical Weapon.
Chemist, Occultist Magus, and Detective.
Adventurer and Monster Hunter.
Vigilante, Monster Hunter, Magus.
Knight, Magus, Leader. - *You are Here.
General.
Mentor, Scientist.
Scarred Old Stallion.
A dead Hero.
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No problem, real life always comes first!
Different continuity from yours so as not to contradict it, so think of this as a potential death Bloody Merry could have had. You're onto something with your speculation, but I won't spoil why she mysteriously returned!
The twins seemed a good contrast to Arcanum's no-nonsense 'tude! Glad he's finally able to have a happy moment!
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Not to worry. I’ve been in a five month long process of immigration that never seems to end. The struggle is real!
On a side note, dang. And I thought I gave a lot of titles to characters!
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To be fair it's a 75 year long life. We tend to do a lot of things and are not necessarily defined by our day jobs. In Folklore's case his life is the Equestrain Equivalent of being in the middle of the worst of the 20th Century.
From Eastern Zebrica, Goul, Ereen, Albion, The Fay Lands, North East Equestria, to Nippon, Germania, Arabia, Scorpan, and even the Dreamlands, The Subterranean Ruins of Hyperborea and it's Lost world of Dinosaur Mutated offshoots, Mars, the realms owned by the Shub-Niggurath worshipers, Yuggoth, K'n-Yan, Atlantis, Sheol (Hell), and Antarctica. In that life he stepped in all mentioned. He might have been until this story never meant to go to whole other alternate universes. But the fact he ended up in a fabricated universe, the nearest planet to /Earth/Terra, and an artificial planet just outside of the Solar System through alien abduction, premade Ancient Hyperborean Stargate, and Astral Projection. He was meant to see more than any of his contemporaries could even begin to imagine.
The Misconception that Folklore is innately a Detective is understandable. That is the mask I gave him. But in the bottom of his character he is a Clark Ashton Smith Wizard forced to live during the time of both World Wars.
Even with all of this, it is his protoge Spike that brings back life on the planet decades after his own death, and the organization that he created that made up the first Terrestrials capable of being able to defeat Aliens.
As weird as it sounds I traded any boring traditionally OP Gary Stu protagonist that bangs all the main cast of MLP and is worshiped for common decency and having the glory practically handed to him, by creating a Pulp Science fiction and Dark fantasy Odysseus that many believe I wasted on Pony Fiction, and that put some the pieces in motion for his species to save itself whose full scope of his action are not fully seen or acknowledge until long after his death. He still dies with no children of his own, and had lost an eye, and a foreleg permanently. Though with the amount of blood that had to be pumped back into him, and how much flesh and bone he had to either regenerate or replace he can be considered almost the pony Ship of Theseus by his death at 75 years of age.
Spike ends up doing more impressive shit. Like killing all the Lords of Sheol himself, stopping a couple of Alien invasions, and his blood restoring organic life to the planet after the Great Old Ones where done ravaging it.
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Arcanum wears many hats in your lore, but detective is definitely the vibe Symphony of Canterlot's cover gives. However, he's mainly described as a warlock here, emphasizing his magic skills.
It could also work with his more hard edged style, since from what I've heard warlock means 'Oath Breaker', giving him the potential vibe of someone who's fallen from grace and feels a need to prove himself? (Not necessarily to others, but in his own mind.)
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He had used corpses as sandbags. He was forced at gunpoint to produce a chemical weapon during his time in the legion, and during said war he had helped in a mutiny. Had chained his Commanding Officer that conspired to kill him to take full credit for the "discovery" of his chemical weapon to a pole in the middle of the fort courtyard and let him be eaten alive by a hoard of Zebra Created Zombies.
And this was his first war who he had fought in for four years. It's the reason he got C-PTSD and lived as an alcoholic bum living in the Manehattan Subway tunnels drinking with sapient undead and other bums for several months of constant attempted death by alcohol poisoning at 23. (Yes he retuned to University. Only barely finished his bachelor's degree in chemistry before he decided to attempt to die in the battlefield because Yog-Sothoth forced his mother to blow herself up with magic ectoplasm, and his dad became a bum and left to be with the Fairies, and his uncle dying of brain aneurism. Add to that Archive Key Yearling (Daring Do) using him for early fame while still being students as his first relationship.)
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It's ok.
Wow, your character's lore is pretty extensive.
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Because I unfortunately planedout the framework for around ten stories with him and I haven't the time nor the focus to write them.
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You should definitely check out Arcanum's stories sometime, maybe start with Bad Night For The Future since it's short?
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Cool
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Nice