(1) Ah, I think I remember saying how Omen might be playing a very long game, and well, as much as I'm happy that I was right, I did really wish he was one of the good guys.
Ah, I turned a blind eye to the signs lol.
(2) I want to know what voice he has. Would be interesting to hear!
(3) *Reads nervously as Cerise tries her best to confront Omen*
Yeah, I'm just nervous for when Omen decides that playtime is over and decides to fulfill his word of becoming Cerise's worst nightmare.
(4) Oh, Oh
Yeah no wonder Omen says that Beatrix and Oona asking for his help ended up benefiting him so much. Though aren't there other beings who control dreams? I'm guessing none to the extent of Oona and Omen?
(5) No! Omen is using Emotional Damage ™ on Cerise!
It's very effective.
Side Note: Reading Omen's font is kind of hard. But I like it.
(6) So Omen has been using the Hourglass to basically keep all realities in check so that he's able to intervene? Damn, the long game has definitely been benefiting him.
(7) Huh, definitely expected a bit more from Midnight's Onoma. Not at the same level as Lightning's of course for several reasons, but a 'small' gust of wind? Oof. On top of that, Penumbra got possessed by Sombra due to his rage towards Midnight (definitely calculated by Omen) and Midnight officially has expended almost all of his Hyper Stallion boost. He's now pretty much going into the negatives now.
(8) So pretty much everything is falling apart right now. Oh dear. Poor Kitsune, she lost a tail.
At least Arcanum got some help from the Twins to complete his circle???
Very interesting way to add lewd here.
(9) Ok so at least Moon Hammer managed to convince Fiery's wives to help focus the army's attention more to the changelings. But still, it would've been much better if the Crystal Empire and Beatrix's groups were allies!
(10) Oh shoot, now Beatrix is going to get roped into this mess. And I'm sure if she completely falls to the trap, then Tatyana would have less resistance when she invades Oona's world!
Yeah let's hope Beatrix is able to get herself out of the illusion of her mom and her stage group. Or maybe Iclyn helps save her.
Oh yay, Iclyn did save her!
Wait, is Shining Force Trixie canonically gone? Or is it another Omen trick? I'd like to believe the Omen trick since he just did that with Cerise, but then again we haven't seen Beatrix's mom since that Nightmare Night story.
(Reading ahead, uhm…)
(11) Alright, time to see what Kyube, Lightning, and Moonlight together can do! (Good thing they finally knocked Equinox out of commission!)
Another side note: In total how many years did Midnight lose thanks to Equinox and Fiery? I'm guess 20-30
(12) Oh shoot! Fiery beated Deinos?! Alright I did not expect that!
Like, I assumed that if Shining Armor, who was already kind of past his prime, was able to knock down Fiery using his Hypers Stallions strength, and Midnight, a bit fresher and more complete Hyper Stallion, had an assist from Equinox to best Deinos, we'd see Fiery lose. But he actually came out on top?!
He has miniature bad guy plot armor.
At least he laments how things used to be. I'm guessing he thinks he's doing what needs to be done eh?
(13) Huh, so he had the maids wear Moonlight's maid costume from now on. Huh.
RIP to those two maids who spoke out loud, as well as Midnight's world version of the Twins who exploded.
So Cadence and Shining were both holding back Fiery? Was Thunder still alive at that time? Probably. I guess that's why Fiery has so much hate towards Shining.
(14) If Shining hadn't restrained Fiery, would he have gone so low? Cause I'm guessing Fiery has a vendetta against Shining, so much hatred buried in his soul.
(15) RIP to the minotaur who was saved by Shining but probably died to the tentacles a few seconds later.
So Vox vs Beatrix is going to happen. (Yeah no lol) Also RIP to everyone that died so far, all the husbands, mothers, and children.
Yeah Fiery didn't help things here with that.
(16) Oh shoot, the Twins are going to be giving birth. Ah…
(17) I wonder what made Equinox become who she is. I don't remember much of her backstory?
(18) Midnight groaned with pain, deliriously believing he was being lifted into heaven’s gates.
XD
Yeah no bud, you're still alive, and you got a lot of work to do now.
(19) Nice to see a bunch of the crew together, though obviously Zeloph's group is somewhere else…
Yeah, if everyone is agreeing that Midnight screwed up, yeah he did screw up.
At least Equinox has now been placed in her own cell.
Oh wait, they're going to where Zeloph is? And already part of the universe is gone?! (Well Shadow's home world has been completely wiped).
Oh dear…
(20) Alright, time for some more stuff to talk about.
So I'm guessing we won't be seeing any more of Midnight's world until they return to it, probably for one of the finales?
(21) Also I'm guessing this is how PoW will connect with UaR until the stories split for their respective endings? Unless we do see some stuff happen, cause I imagine Fiery won't stay quiet. Neither would Chrysalis and Penumbra possessed by his Alt dad.
(22) Maybe we could see more self reflection from Fiery? That part was cool. Is the Crystal Empire Army still somewhat intact? I think we could see maybe another battle of them before they're probably wiped out in the finale.
(23) I have a feeling that by the end of this story, Midnight's world will pretty much be in between Cerise's world and Shadow's world in terms of population loss and destruction. And that's with other dimensions adding their population pool to his world!
His dimension might survive, but the people inside of it? Uhm…
(24) As I mentioned before, Midnight's Onoma reveal was pretty lackluster, especially compared to his sister. For all his Dragon Ball spiky mane, he pretty much only slapped Penumbra with a gust of wind before continuing to get pummeled (L)
And I'm pretty sure that the healing he'll get in Layla's ship will only help heal his physical wounds. Not his emotional, mental, or age wounds.
Pretty sad to see the state he's in. He saw his wife in a coffin, saw her brother become corrupted, Moonlight told him that their relationship is pretty much over, his homeworld is falling.
Yeah, it's good to hear that they'll return to save his home, but I imagine he might be feeling very depressed (or deep regret, etc etc). Dion will probably have to slap him back into focus, though I wouldn't be surprised that this doesn't work. Might require more attempts.
Like, I'm not saying he's not going to continue fighting, he still has Cerise to save. But, trying to view things from his perspective, does he deserve to see them all happy? (Self Question) Could he even see them all happy if his life is very close to collapsing?
He probably is going to have to think a lot. I guess this is where you could say this story permanently will affect a character.
Gone is the happy Midnight, at least for a long while.
We need to give these characters therapy. Make Snowy their therapist. We haven't seen her since the beginning of the story lol.
(25) So is the ring that Arcanum made gone or useless, considering that Beatrix and the crew will be traveling via Layla's ship?
(26) Also can't wait to hear Lilith talk about the Bible and Demi Humans.
Anyways, I liked this chapter. Was fun to read everything that happened, even though parts of it was sad like Cerise screaming in her nightmare and Midnight feeling casted out and deserving of everything he did.
Tad disappointed in Midnight's Onoma lol. (why am I saying this a third time, I ask myself as I'm reviewing my comment) Not in the writing of course, it's clean and perfect. I just expected a bit more considering what Lightning showed.
Then again his body can't even support it. Wonder if he'll even be able to use his Onoma outside of the 'small' gust of wind. XD
Oh wait, Deinos is there, maybe he can brew the potion? But Shining Armor isn't there to test it out (I don't remember reading such scene). Potential spot for things to go even more wrong with Midnight? Idk if Deinos's potion could reverse the damage done to his age. And I think his Onoma would also be impacted by his weakened body?
Could his Onoma still force his body to weaken even more just because he's unable to take any more? Idk how far his aging is. I'm guess 50-60s, Shining Force type. But Shining Armory was still strong. So I'm guessing 70-80s.
I'm guessing Dion will now have the opportunity to show Midnight how to rely on his own strength? Cause he can't really use his Hyper form as it's now going to be hitting him with negatives.
Would Midnight even be able to fight anymore (in his current condition)? Probably with this many question marks. ???????
Sure he has his Onoma, but depending the extent of his damage his Hyper for gave him, probably a minor boost, mostly range. Again if we're just comparing the presentation of Onoma (a bit unfair lol, also fourth time I'm mentioning this lol) then Midnight's is like a D tier and Lightning and Zeloph's are A and S tier. XD
Dion's is another A tier btw. And I'm just mentioning transformations I can remember right now. I'm very sleepy, it's 1:40AM.
Wouldn't be surprised if Midnight still attempts to use his Hyper form, even if it kills him. Maybe he will go to heaven by the end of this story.
And then his dad kicks him back down into reality so that he can continue the fight lol.
(27) Huh, somehow I'm writing more points.
What I'd like to see in the future?
Lots of things with Midnight. Fiery and his memory lane. Penumbra and Chrysalis. Beatrix's group and Zeloph's reuniting (ah…)
11555882 1. I also hoped Omen would be a good guy!
7. I figure Midnight manifested the will to invoke his Onoma, but his current state struggles to support it, thus the weak manifestation.
10. Yep, sadly Shining's Force version of Trixie is dead, or undead. Omen really hitting Beatrix where it hurts!
11. 20-30 sounds right.
12. Surprised me too, but Fiery fought Shining on the ground, directly, and with limited use of his Onoma which has gotten stronger. Of course, Fiery was badly wounded by Deinos despite his advantages!
13. Most likely Thunder Storm was indeed alive then.
14. Probably not, although Fiery would still have a dark side to him.
20. Definitely plan to explore Midnight's world more ASAP!
22. Yep, Crystal Empire is still intact.
25. Probably redundant, but he'll keep it just in case, assuming it wasn't lost in all the chaos?
26. Hmm, good question if the Onoma would affect Midnight's aging?
27. Thanks for reading and commenting! This is now my 2nd longest story, and will be my 1st once it finishes!
11556093 (1) Yeah. Wonder how the story would be if Omen was the good guy and the anomaly was just another being.
(7) Yeah I understood that. I wonder if the 'small' gust of wind is the most he can do right now. Cause he's pretty much running out of steam. He's probably in retirement age.
Pretty impressive that SF2 Shining still fought for so long.
(10) Nooooo!
I'm guessing if Omen did attack her homeworld, it might end up being dead like Shadow's? Don't imagine he'd allow Beatrix the hope of seeing her home ever again.
Quite sad given all her world survived. Just to die.
(11) Yeah.
(12) Ah. So Fiery was holding back against Shining?? Yeah his Onoma has gotten pretty strong. Where would he be in the tier list? (Definitely above Midnight lol)
(13) Ah. What do you think was his opinion of Shining and Cadence's decision that ultimately costed them their twin maids. Also interesting how the mares blamed Fiery for the loss and not Shining or Thunder.
Perhaps another reason why Fiery hated Shining? Fiery got all the blame and Shining the glory? And Thunder no recognition?
(14) He'd probably still think that for the Greater Good Sacrifices Must be Made.
(20) Huzzah.
(22) Oh that's good. How many soldiers did they lose?
(25) Ah ok. Well maybe those who stayed behind can use it?
(26) Like technically it shouldn't, but given his state and status, I wouldn't be surprised that his soul is so weak that even trying to use an Onoma will begin to have the same debuff as his Hyper stallion perk. Even if it wasn't and Deinos removed his Hyper gene, idk if his old body could support it or make much use of it.
He doesn't have enough stats to back it up anymore. If only there was a way for him to rewind his years. Cause at this point he's basically close to becoming incapable of fighting.
11556119 1. That would be a fun joke. But Arcanum refuses to be corrupted by the Necronomicon and Iclyn probably can't become the Cult Leader? She loves Oona and now Bea.
Alas, Omen is now the Cult Leader.
(10) Now what's their population loss? What happened to Flurry Heart from her world?
(12) I give his Onoma a B tier. Or maybe higher. Idk how fast his potential can grow but I wouldn't be surprised that just like fire, his growth consumes everything.
When he did acquire his? After Thunder died? Emotional Stress from his friend's death?
How long would he survive against Beatrix?
(13) He probably did the dirty work. As in the thing that nobody wanted to do but what he knew had to be done. The things that border war crimes.
That's why he's still extreme. He's practiced it for so long and now that he's in charge there's nobody to check and balance him.
(22) Oof. Out of their total?
(25) Yep!
Hmmm, so how would Midnight recover his life? Does his Onoma have a hidden stat/trait lol? Maybe there's something in Zeloph's world that could help him (and Shadow)?
Cause again he's pretty close to becoming incapable of fighting, if he hasn't past that limit already.
I'm guessing were it not for the fact that Shadow is dying, many from Zeloph's group would be max disappointed in Midnight? They still might be.
I wouldn't be opposed to Midnight Perma Dying in Lightendark if there's no other option. Cause uhm, that's where he's heading. He's on borrowed time.
I wonder what he'd say if Deinos offer to remove his Hyper gene. Like sure that's what he wanted originally, but (a) kind of too late (b) if he ever returns to being young he probably would want as much strength, Onoma and Hyper, as he can have (c) the whole Moonlight situation and his own shame would complicate matters further.
He also has a lot to think about. His stance towards changelings, his own actions, everything that's going on, Moonlight, Cerise.
I wonder if he can handle this or if we might see him emotionally crack. Just wondering what might come in the aftermath of the battle.
11556127 10. Beatrix's Flurry Heart is hopefully safe...for now.
12. I plan to reveal that down the line, let's say it's tied to the Amazons...
Fiery would stomp Beatrix in a melee battle, otherwise it could go either way depending on if he closed the distance before she nuked him?
13. Definitely makes sense!
22. Between the minotaurs, cultists, and changelings, not too surprising! Not too good at number crunching, guessing Fiery has thousands of troops in total?
11555882 1) I thought he would be a neat subversion, but sadly, not the case. His character direction could only lead him to being obviously evil. Sure, there are plenty of threats as it is, but not one so consequential as an anomaly like Beatrix, but without remorse. 2) I’ve always found his voice a challenge to get right, since to fluctuates from between being soft/slow to menacingly low. The best I could describe it is that he sounds close to Pitch Black in his passive form, and close to The Beast in his nahtdyr for. Both of whom partially inspired his design, btw! 4) The only other Onieromancer in the series thus far is Minerva, although not a strong as Omen or Oona. Others likely exist, but have yet to be seen. 5) The least you understand, the more you fear. Tis intentional. 6) That’s not quite it. Mandela’s Hourglass only has small effects on the overall timeline. But if used enough times, one can increases the duration of use, which is what’s helping him annihilate the multiverse. 7) Midnight doesn’t have that big of a connect to the arcane, so it’s expected any Onoma output would be little. I was debating on if he should even have one as a normal-ish fighter can add diversity to the cast. But since his sister and family have established a connection (plus an alternative specialty since the Hyper-Stallion gene is so dangerous), I figured I’d go along. 9) I was worried that adding more characters would become overwhelming, but I’ve grown to like their small contribution! Expect more stuff with them in the nearby future 10) Yeah, as far as I know, Shining Force’s Trixie is long gone and was brought back just to fuck with Beatrix. Omen means business. 11) He’s listed as being 20 on the trope page, so if a decade of his lifeline was taken, he would be 30. The white hair is likely due to the amount of stress he’s been put through. 12) Not really plot armor. Pyromancy is just inherently strong in this story. Zeloph and the Burning King can attest to that. Actually, now that I think about it, a duel between Zell and Fiery would be badass! 14) It’s been established a bunch of time that he puts sole blame on Shining for the death of his friends, family and the downfall of all Equestrians. It’s more than just a vendetta. It’s pure hatred. 17) Her backstory was never established. It’s just been assume the war has turned her into the callus, cunty opportunist she is today. 20/21) Yes. We’ve come to what is probably going to be my favourite part of the story; the convergence chapters! The stories of PoW and U&R will now directly intertwine with each other instead of a few communication segments. Outside of a few scenes to continue other plot lines, both stories are now one in the same, albeit with a few Point Of View differences. 23) Oh, believe me, none of what happens here will be easily fixed. The damage Omen has caused will be permanent. 24) As mentioned to Cerise, Omen’s overall goal, outside of the End of Days, is to hurt Beatrix where it counts. Why that’s his objective remains to be seen. But it starts with keeping all her friends and allies at their lowest states of mind. 25) Yeah, all his hard work was kinda wasted 26) Y’know, given that Beatrix is a dimensional travelling witch, who’s seen and explored so many worlds, there never has been a true and dedicated ‘alien’ planet in the series. I intend to fix that as we delve deep into both Sacratera and the origins of Layla.
If Midnight really wants to harness the full potential of his Onoma, it first starts with recognizing its name. Then he needs a proper teacher, which will likely be Dion. I’m not sure he can reverse how quickly he’s aged (plus it’s pretty weird for Cerise knowing she’s marred to someone a decade older than her), but I believe he can train his body back to good health. Just needs dedication.
11556183 (1) Yeah, still I definitely wished that he was a good guy. He appeared to be chaotic neutral to me.
(2) Ah, really liked the voices. Like the Pitch Black voice a bit more.
We need someone to VA the entire story.
(4) Ah. Where does Luna rank? Only within their own realms/dimension right? And definitely not with the power of Oona and Omen.
(5) Yeah, sad Cerise had to go through that.
(6) Ah, so the Hourglass is what's speeding up the process of destruction? Too much space time distortion?
(7) Makes sense. Once again I find it funny that he didn't go power up intense yelling lol.
(9) I love all the Characters. They feel key to the story.
(10) Nooooo! Is the rest of her world gone as well?
(11) 30 but he has a life expectancy of 40. So he's still 60-70.
(12) Is Fiery actually strong enough to go against Zeloph? Like I know we joked that he could be the Burning King but uhm... Hmmmm
(14) Yeah. Fiery really hates Shining.
(17) Alright, makes sense. I guess not everyone needs a backstory.
(20/21) Huzzah! The stories will now be linked! How will this work? Links to the next chapter??
(23/24) Omen has dealt insane amounts of Emotional Damage TM
(25) Oof
(26) Ah.
I imagine in order to recognize his Onomas he'd have to first accept the Emotional Damage he has been dealt with. XD
Would he still be on a 40 year expectancy or can he bump it back to 80? Maybe his Onoma can help him extend his life by regulating his soul instead of stressing it out.
Passive Ability Rejuvenating Breath, as long as he's calm, focused, and not stressed, he can extend his life expectancy by 1 day per one 10 minutes. Mana / Stamina recover of 0.1 per second times the amount he meditated. Prevents immediate loss of stamina from Weakened Hyper form, aging slightly reduced.
Right now in his current condition, I'm guessing he's close to incapable of fighting. He's just a few years away from death, which in Lightendark terms, a fight away or another stressful moment.
I wonder if he'll still have the heart attack from lack of lust. I remember how I said maybe meditating might've helped controlled it earlier? But he was basically rushed into using his Hyper form constantly.
I guess now is better than never??
Though, I will say that given the state Midnight is in, I am not opposed to him dying. I personally give him a 80% chance of death, with 50% plot armor chance to save him.
Am I being a bit unfair to my own OC? Eh yeah. But I feel that even if he knows there's a path to extend his life, he'd still want to fight to save what little he can save. And that would probably lead to another heart attack and maybe even death. His soul is close to breaking.
It's a bit sad that he went into PoW thinking he can save his mother but now he might feel he's a burden, powerless, and guilty.
He needs therapy, they all need therapy.
If he's feeling guilty like he did in Lightendark, I think Lightning probably needs to help him here. Idk if Dion or Zeloph's advice could help as much as it did before as Midnight would view that he failed again. This time completely without excuse.
11556280 (26) Will he die within the story though? Like, maybe not this story? There's still another one after this right? But at the same time, he is pretty close to death.
I imagine that by the end, even with their best attempts of moderation, Midnight would have 1-5 Years left. Maybe even less. Maybe only enough to continue in the other story, plus a bit more for whatever epilogue that comes after.
Alright, so odds are 90% we see his death on screen (screen?), 7% it's an epilogue, and 3% it's implied
While I wrote the dialogue for him differently in my own works, and you guys threw in a more comedic aspect to it. I love completely that Folklore's nature as the "To Angry To Die" protagonist is show here.
In fact this applies perfectly well.
"I'm like a roach! I don't die I multiply! Gods are on my side! You hear that fucking whore!?" (Rough translation)
But other than that. I am surprised that with the nature of this story you both decided to just let the town suffer a massacre. Sure no one we know died, but a lot of civvies just got raped and killed in that horror show.
That said I also love the Spacecraft, and that Demi-Humans and Angels are likely connected to or are aliens. Though there is very little distinction in my works between aliens and gods depending on the power scale.
From what I can tell in this story, Folklore's arc is about letting go, he carries the guilt while moving forward, but he still can't let himself live. Must be pretty soon after the Symphony of Canterlot.
Also. Strawberry and Blueberry are great and sexy. Funnily enough Folklore knows certain things do work, he was still right to call out that Sex Rituals are more of Beatrix's thing, while he tends to work more with blood. Though as a rare occasion he should notice that Beatrix may have a point and that if his healing factor stops working and he is at the brink of death someone may need to lay with him for the transference and fusions of magic, essentially kickstarting his healing factor back into function. Kind of like giving an engine a jumpstart.
11556684 I like mixing in dark elements, although I'm also aware some readers find them offputting and thus have strived to keep a balance here, with humor and sentimentality to offset any grim moments.
Indeed, Arcanum's arc is largely driven by guilt and needing to let go! Hopefully he'll have a chance to really live life again! Glad you enjoyed his interactions with Strawberry and Blue Moon! And that he had a chance to kick some ass!
11556684 Glad to hear you’re enjoying our interpretation, as he’s a lot of fun to write and do cool action with. The themes of Guilt and Letting Go tie into the stories and other characters quite nicely!
11557097 Surprised she hasn't become much fiercer after all the hell she's been through! But she feels a need to stay strong for everyone she loves, thus her refusal to abandon Midnight despite his mistakes.
(1) Ah, I think I remember saying how Omen might be playing a very long game, and well, as much as I'm happy that I was right, I did really wish he was one of the good guys.
Ah, I turned a blind eye to the signs lol.
(2) I want to know what voice he has. Would be interesting to hear!
(3) *Reads nervously as Cerise tries her best to confront Omen*
Yeah, I'm just nervous for when Omen decides that playtime is over and decides to fulfill his word of becoming Cerise's worst nightmare.
(4) Oh, Oh
Yeah no wonder Omen says that Beatrix and Oona asking for his help ended up benefiting him so much. Though aren't there other beings who control dreams? I'm guessing none to the extent of Oona and Omen?
(5) No! Omen is using Emotional Damage ™ on Cerise!
It's very effective.
Side Note: Reading Omen's font is kind of hard. But I like it.
(6) So Omen has been using the Hourglass to basically keep all realities in check so that he's able to intervene? Damn, the long game has definitely been benefiting him.
(7) Huh, definitely expected a bit more from Midnight's Onoma. Not at the same level as Lightning's of course for several reasons, but a 'small' gust of wind? Oof. On top of that, Penumbra got possessed by Sombra due to his rage towards Midnight (definitely calculated by Omen) and Midnight officially has expended almost all of his Hyper Stallion boost. He's now pretty much going into the negatives now.
(8) So pretty much everything is falling apart right now. Oh dear. Poor Kitsune, she lost a tail.
At least Arcanum got some help from the Twins to complete his circle???
Very interesting way to add lewd here.
(9) Ok so at least Moon Hammer managed to convince Fiery's wives to help focus the army's attention more to the changelings. But still, it would've been much better if the Crystal Empire and Beatrix's groups were allies!
(10) Oh shoot, now Beatrix is going to get roped into this mess. And I'm sure if she completely falls to the trap, then Tatyana would have less resistance when she invades Oona's world!
Yeah let's hope Beatrix is able to get herself out of the illusion of her mom and her stage group. Or maybe Iclyn helps save her.
Oh yay, Iclyn did save her!
Wait, is Shining Force Trixie canonically gone? Or is it another Omen trick? I'd like to believe the Omen trick since he just did that with Cerise, but then again we haven't seen Beatrix's mom since that Nightmare Night story.
(Reading ahead, uhm…)
(11) Alright, time to see what Kyube, Lightning, and Moonlight together can do! (Good thing they finally knocked Equinox out of commission!)
Another side note: In total how many years did Midnight lose thanks to Equinox and Fiery? I'm guess 20-30
(12) Oh shoot! Fiery beated Deinos?! Alright I did not expect that!
Like, I assumed that if Shining Armor, who was already kind of past his prime, was able to knock down Fiery using his Hypers Stallions strength, and Midnight, a bit fresher and more complete Hyper Stallion, had an assist from Equinox to best Deinos, we'd see Fiery lose. But he actually came out on top?!
He has miniature bad guy plot armor.
At least he laments how things used to be. I'm guessing he thinks he's doing what needs to be done eh?
(13) Huh, so he had the maids wear Moonlight's maid costume from now on. Huh.
RIP to those two maids who spoke out loud, as well as Midnight's world version of the Twins who exploded.
So Cadence and Shining were both holding back Fiery? Was Thunder still alive at that time? Probably. I guess that's why Fiery has so much hate towards Shining.
(14) If Shining hadn't restrained Fiery, would he have gone so low? Cause I'm guessing Fiery has a vendetta against Shining, so much hatred buried in his soul.
(15) RIP to the minotaur who was saved by Shining but probably died to the tentacles a few seconds later.
So Vox vs Beatrix is going to happen. (Yeah no lol) Also RIP to everyone that died so far, all the husbands, mothers, and children.
Yeah Fiery didn't help things here with that.
(16) Oh shoot, the Twins are going to be giving birth. Ah…
(17) I wonder what made Equinox become who she is. I don't remember much of her backstory?
(18) Midnight groaned with pain, deliriously believing he was being lifted into heaven’s gates.
XD
Yeah no bud, you're still alive, and you got a lot of work to do now.
(19) Nice to see a bunch of the crew together, though obviously Zeloph's group is somewhere else…
Yeah, if everyone is agreeing that Midnight screwed up, yeah he did screw up.
At least Equinox has now been placed in her own cell.
Oh wait, they're going to where Zeloph is? And already part of the universe is gone?! (Well Shadow's home world has been completely wiped).
Oh dear…
(20) Alright, time for some more stuff to talk about.
So I'm guessing we won't be seeing any more of Midnight's world until they return to it, probably for one of the finales?
(21) Also I'm guessing this is how PoW will connect with UaR until the stories split for their respective endings? Unless we do see some stuff happen, cause I imagine Fiery won't stay quiet. Neither would Chrysalis and Penumbra possessed by his Alt dad.
(22) Maybe we could see more self reflection from Fiery? That part was cool. Is the Crystal Empire Army still somewhat intact? I think we could see maybe another battle of them before they're probably wiped out in the finale.
(23) I have a feeling that by the end of this story, Midnight's world will pretty much be in between Cerise's world and Shadow's world in terms of population loss and destruction. And that's with other dimensions adding their population pool to his world!
His dimension might survive, but the people inside of it? Uhm…
(24) As I mentioned before, Midnight's Onoma reveal was pretty lackluster, especially compared to his sister. For all his Dragon Ball spiky mane, he pretty much only slapped Penumbra with a gust of wind before continuing to get pummeled (L)
And I'm pretty sure that the healing he'll get in Layla's ship will only help heal his physical wounds. Not his emotional, mental, or age wounds.
Pretty sad to see the state he's in. He saw his wife in a coffin, saw her brother become corrupted, Moonlight told him that their relationship is pretty much over, his homeworld is falling.
Yeah, it's good to hear that they'll return to save his home, but I imagine he might be feeling very depressed (or deep regret, etc etc). Dion will probably have to slap him back into focus, though I wouldn't be surprised that this doesn't work. Might require more attempts.
Like, I'm not saying he's not going to continue fighting, he still has Cerise to save. But, trying to view things from his perspective, does he deserve to see them all happy? (Self Question) Could he even see them all happy if his life is very close to collapsing?
He probably is going to have to think a lot. I guess this is where you could say this story permanently will affect a character.
Gone is the happy Midnight, at least for a long while.
We need to give these characters therapy. Make Snowy their therapist. We haven't seen her since the beginning of the story lol.
(25) So is the ring that Arcanum made gone or useless, considering that Beatrix and the crew will be traveling via Layla's ship?
(26) Also can't wait to hear Lilith talk about the Bible and Demi Humans.
Anyways, I liked this chapter. Was fun to read everything that happened, even though parts of it was sad like Cerise screaming in her nightmare and Midnight feeling casted out and deserving of everything he did.
Tad disappointed in Midnight's Onoma lol. (why am I saying this a third time, I ask myself as I'm reviewing my comment) Not in the writing of course, it's clean and perfect. I just expected a bit more considering what Lightning showed.
Then again his body can't even support it. Wonder if he'll even be able to use his Onoma outside of the 'small' gust of wind. XD
Oh wait, Deinos is there, maybe he can brew the potion? But Shining Armor isn't there to test it out (I don't remember reading such scene). Potential spot for things to go even more wrong with Midnight? Idk if Deinos's potion could reverse the damage done to his age. And I think his Onoma would also be impacted by his weakened body?
Could his Onoma still force his body to weaken even more just because he's unable to take any more? Idk how far his aging is. I'm guess 50-60s, Shining Force type. But Shining Armory was still strong. So I'm guessing 70-80s.
I'm guessing Dion will now have the opportunity to show Midnight how to rely on his own strength? Cause he can't really use his Hyper form as it's now going to be hitting him with negatives.
Would Midnight even be able to fight anymore (in his current condition)? Probably with this many question marks. ???????
Sure he has his Onoma, but depending the extent of his damage his Hyper for gave him, probably a minor boost, mostly range. Again if we're just comparing the presentation of Onoma (a bit unfair lol, also fourth time I'm mentioning this lol) then Midnight's is like a D tier and Lightning and Zeloph's are A and S tier. XD
Dion's is another A tier btw. And I'm just mentioning transformations I can remember right now. I'm very sleepy, it's 1:40AM.
Wouldn't be surprised if Midnight still attempts to use his Hyper form, even if it kills him. Maybe he will go to heaven by the end of this story.
And then his dad kicks him back down into reality so that he can continue the fight lol.
(27) Huh, somehow I'm writing more points.
What I'd like to see in the future?
Lots of things with Midnight. Fiery and his memory lane. Penumbra and Chrysalis. Beatrix's group and Zeloph's reuniting (ah…)
Just the natural progress of the story lol.
Thank you for the chapter!
what a twist. the cultist part kinda reminded me of resident evil 4
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1. I also hoped Omen would be a good guy!
7. I figure Midnight manifested the will to invoke his Onoma, but his current state struggles to support it, thus the weak manifestation.
10. Yep, sadly Shining's Force version of Trixie is dead, or undead. Omen really hitting Beatrix where it hurts!
11. 20-30 sounds right.
12. Surprised me too, but Fiery fought Shining on the ground, directly, and with limited use of his Onoma which has gotten stronger. Of course, Fiery was badly wounded by Deinos despite his advantages!
13. Most likely Thunder Storm was indeed alive then.
14. Probably not, although Fiery would still have a dark side to him.
20. Definitely plan to explore Midnight's world more ASAP!
22. Yep, Crystal Empire is still intact.
25. Probably redundant, but he'll keep it just in case, assuming it wasn't lost in all the chaos?
26. Hmm, good question if the Onoma would affect Midnight's aging?
27. Thanks for reading and commenting! This is now my 2nd longest story, and will be my 1st once it finishes!
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Thank you, always like stories about sinister cults!
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(1) Yeah. Wonder how the story would be if Omen was the good guy and the anomaly was just another being.
(7) Yeah I understood that. I wonder if the 'small' gust of wind is the most he can do right now. Cause he's pretty much running out of steam. He's probably in retirement age.
Pretty impressive that SF2 Shining still fought for so long.
(10) Nooooo!
I'm guessing if Omen did attack her homeworld, it might end up being dead like Shadow's? Don't imagine he'd allow Beatrix the hope of seeing her home ever again.
Quite sad given all her world survived. Just to die.
(11) Yeah.
(12) Ah. So Fiery was holding back against Shining??
Yeah his Onoma has gotten pretty strong. Where would he be in the tier list? (Definitely above Midnight lol)
(13) Ah. What do you think was his opinion of Shining and Cadence's decision that ultimately costed them their twin maids. Also interesting how the mares blamed Fiery for the loss and not Shining or Thunder.
Perhaps another reason why Fiery hated Shining? Fiery got all the blame and Shining the glory? And Thunder no recognition?
(14) He'd probably still think that for the Greater Good Sacrifices Must be Made.
(20) Huzzah.
(22) Oh that's good. How many soldiers did they lose?
(25) Ah ok. Well maybe those who stayed behind can use it?
(26) Like technically it shouldn't, but given his state and status, I wouldn't be surprised that his soul is so weak that even trying to use an Onoma will begin to have the same debuff as his Hyper stallion perk. Even if it wasn't and Deinos removed his Hyper gene, idk if his old body could support it or make much use of it.
He doesn't have enough stats to back it up anymore. If only there was a way for him to rewind his years. Cause at this point he's basically close to becoming incapable of fighting.
(27) Huzzah!
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1. I kinda hoped Arcanum and/or Iclyn would be revealed as the anomaly for the irony after giving Beatrix so much crap!
10. Yes, Beatrix's world continues to suffer...
12. Fiery had to as they staged a 'fair' duel, despite them both cheating anyway! Hmm, not sure his Onoma tier, fire is powerful and pretty versatile?
13. Probably blamed because Fiery is currently in charge, back then I imagine Fiery was the least liked/respected of the stalion swordsman trio?
22. Hundreds maybe?
25. All I'll say is I can't wait to explore the aftermath of the siege!
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1. That would be a fun joke. But Arcanum refuses to be corrupted by the Necronomicon and Iclyn probably can't become the Cult Leader? She loves Oona and now Bea.
Alas, Omen is now the Cult Leader.
(10) Now what's their population loss? What happened to Flurry Heart from her world?
(12) I give his Onoma a B tier. Or maybe higher. Idk how fast his potential can grow but I wouldn't be surprised that just like fire, his growth consumes everything.
When he did acquire his? After Thunder died? Emotional Stress from his friend's death?
How long would he survive against Beatrix?
(13) He probably did the dirty work. As in the thing that nobody wanted to do but what he knew had to be done. The things that border war crimes.
That's why he's still extreme. He's practiced it for so long and now that he's in charge there's nobody to check and balance him.
(22) Oof. Out of their total?
(25) Yep!
Hmmm, so how would Midnight recover his life? Does his Onoma have a hidden stat/trait lol? Maybe there's something in Zeloph's world that could help him (and Shadow)?
Cause again he's pretty close to becoming incapable of fighting, if he hasn't past that limit already.
I'm guessing were it not for the fact that Shadow is dying, many from Zeloph's group would be max disappointed in Midnight? They still might be.
I wouldn't be opposed to Midnight Perma Dying in Lightendark if there's no other option. Cause uhm, that's where he's heading. He's on borrowed time.
I wonder what he'd say if Deinos offer to remove his Hyper gene. Like sure that's what he wanted originally, but (a) kind of too late (b) if he ever returns to being young he probably would want as much strength, Onoma and Hyper, as he can have (c) the whole Moonlight situation and his own shame would complicate matters further.
He also has a lot to think about. His stance towards changelings, his own actions, everything that's going on, Moonlight, Cerise.
I wonder if he can handle this or if we might see him emotionally crack. Just wondering what might come in the aftermath of the battle.
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10. Beatrix's Flurry Heart is hopefully safe...for now.
12. I plan to reveal that down the line, let's say it's tied to the Amazons...
Fiery would stomp Beatrix in a melee battle, otherwise it could go either way depending on if he closed the distance before she nuked him?
13. Definitely makes sense!
22. Between the minotaurs, cultists, and changelings, not too surprising! Not too good at number crunching, guessing Fiery has thousands of troops in total?
25. We'll see for Midnight!
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1) I thought he would be a neat subversion, but sadly, not the case. His character direction could only lead him to being obviously evil. Sure, there are plenty of threats as it is, but not one so consequential as an anomaly like Beatrix, but without remorse.
2) I’ve always found his voice a challenge to get right, since to fluctuates from between being soft/slow to menacingly low. The best I could describe it is that he sounds close to Pitch Black in his passive form, and close to The Beast in his nahtdyr for. Both of whom partially inspired his design, btw!
4) The only other Onieromancer in the series thus far is Minerva, although not a strong as Omen or Oona. Others likely exist, but have yet to be seen.
5) The least you understand, the more you fear. Tis intentional.
6) That’s not quite it. Mandela’s Hourglass only has small effects on the overall timeline. But if used enough times, one can increases the duration of use, which is what’s helping him annihilate the multiverse.
7) Midnight doesn’t have that big of a connect to the arcane, so it’s expected any Onoma output would be little. I was debating on if he should even have one as a normal-ish fighter can add diversity to the cast. But since his sister and family have established a connection (plus an alternative specialty since the Hyper-Stallion gene is so dangerous), I figured I’d go along.
9) I was worried that adding more characters would become overwhelming, but I’ve grown to like their small contribution! Expect more stuff with them in the nearby future
10) Yeah, as far as I know, Shining Force’s Trixie is long gone and was brought back just to fuck with Beatrix. Omen means business.
11) He’s listed as being 20 on the trope page, so if a decade of his lifeline was taken, he would be 30. The white hair is likely due to the amount of stress he’s been put through.
12) Not really plot armor. Pyromancy is just inherently strong in this story. Zeloph and the Burning King can attest to that. Actually, now that I think about it, a duel between Zell and Fiery would be badass!
14) It’s been established a bunch of time that he puts sole blame on Shining for the death of his friends, family and the downfall of all Equestrians. It’s more than just a vendetta. It’s pure hatred.
17) Her backstory was never established. It’s just been assume the war has turned her into the callus, cunty opportunist she is today.
20/21) Yes. We’ve come to what is probably going to be my favourite part of the story; the convergence chapters! The stories of PoW and U&R will now directly intertwine with each other instead of a few communication segments. Outside of a few scenes to continue other plot lines, both stories are now one in the same, albeit with a few Point Of View differences.
23) Oh, believe me, none of what happens here will be easily fixed. The damage Omen has caused will be permanent.
24) As mentioned to Cerise, Omen’s overall goal, outside of the End of Days, is to hurt Beatrix where it counts. Why that’s his objective remains to be seen. But it starts with keeping all her friends and allies at their lowest states of mind.
25) Yeah, all his hard work was kinda wasted
26) Y’know, given that Beatrix is a dimensional travelling witch, who’s seen and explored so many worlds, there never has been a true and dedicated ‘alien’ planet in the series. I intend to fix that as we delve deep into both Sacratera and the origins of Layla.
If Midnight really wants to harness the full potential of his Onoma, it first starts with recognizing its name. Then he needs a proper teacher, which will likely be Dion. I’m not sure he can reverse how quickly he’s aged (plus it’s pretty weird for Cerise knowing she’s marred to someone a decade older than her), but I believe he can train his body back to good health. Just needs dedication.
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(10) :(
(12) Ah, as Fiery is saving the Amazonians?
Yeah, Beatrix can produce huge balls of magic and can make black holes, yeah it'd probably be decided within the first minute who's likely to win.
(13) Hmhmm
(22) Total Crystal Empire population?
(25) Indeed.
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12. Yes, Fiery's Onoma is tied to meeting Panna and Chezka.
22. Again, not much for number crunching? I imagine as an empire it was once relatively vast, but it's long in decline?
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(1) Yeah, still I definitely wished that he was a good guy. He appeared to be chaotic neutral to me.
(2) Ah, really liked the voices. Like the Pitch Black voice a bit more.
We need someone to VA the entire story.
(4) Ah. Where does Luna rank? Only within their own realms/dimension right? And definitely not with the power of Oona and Omen.
(5) Yeah, sad Cerise had to go through that.
(6) Ah, so the Hourglass is what's speeding up the process of destruction? Too much space time distortion?
(7) Makes sense. Once again I find it funny that he didn't go power up intense yelling lol.
(9) I love all the Characters. They feel key to the story.
(10) Nooooo! Is the rest of her world gone as well?
(11) 30 but he has a life expectancy of 40. So he's still 60-70.
(12) Is Fiery actually strong enough to go against Zeloph? Like I know we joked that he could be the Burning King but uhm... Hmmmm
(14) Yeah. Fiery really hates Shining.
(17) Alright, makes sense. I guess not everyone needs a backstory.
(20/21) Huzzah! The stories will now be linked! How will this work? Links to the next chapter??
(23/24) Omen has dealt insane amounts of Emotional Damage TM
(25) Oof
(26) Ah.
I imagine in order to recognize his Onomas he'd have to first accept the Emotional Damage he has been dealt with. XD
Would he still be on a 40 year expectancy or can he bump it back to 80? Maybe his Onoma can help him extend his life by regulating his soul instead of stressing it out.
Passive Ability Rejuvenating Breath, as long as he's calm, focused, and not stressed, he can extend his life expectancy by 1 day per one 10 minutes. Mana / Stamina recover of 0.1 per second times the amount he meditated. Prevents immediate loss of stamina from Weakened Hyper form, aging slightly reduced.
Right now in his current condition, I'm guessing he's close to incapable of fighting. He's just a few years away from death, which in Lightendark terms, a fight away or another stressful moment.
I wonder if he'll still have the heart attack from lack of lust. I remember how I said maybe meditating might've helped controlled it earlier? But he was basically rushed into using his Hyper form constantly.
I guess now is better than never??
Though, I will say that given the state Midnight is in, I am not opposed to him dying. I personally give him a 80% chance of death, with 50% plot armor chance to save him.
Am I being a bit unfair to my own OC? Eh yeah. But I feel that even if he knows there's a path to extend his life, he'd still want to fight to save what little he can save. And that would probably lead to another heart attack and maybe even death. His soul is close to breaking.
It's a bit sad that he went into PoW thinking he can save his mother but now he might feel he's a burden, powerless, and guilty.
He needs therapy, they all need therapy.
If he's feeling guilty like he did in Lightendark, I think Lightning probably needs to help him here. Idk if Dion or Zeloph's advice could help as much as it did before as Midnight would view that he failed again. This time completely without excuse.
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(19) cool. Yeah I want to get more Fiery backstory
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26) Uhm, no. I still expect him to die relatively young.
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(26) Will he die within the story though?
Like, maybe not this story? There's still another one after this right? But at the same time, he is pretty close to death.
I imagine that by the end, even with their best attempts of moderation, Midnight would have 1-5 Years left. Maybe even less. Maybe only enough to continue in the other story, plus a bit more for whatever epilogue that comes after.
Alright, so odds are 90% we see his death on screen (screen?), 7% it's an epilogue, and 3% it's implied
30% chance he dies in PoW, 60% in future story.
.... Why am I calculating Midnight's death???
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While I wrote the dialogue for him differently in my own works, and you guys threw in a more comedic aspect to it. I love completely that Folklore's nature as the "To Angry To Die" protagonist is show here.
In fact this applies perfectly well.
"I'm like a roach! I don't die I multiply! Gods are on my side! You hear that fucking whore!?" (Rough translation)
But other than that. I am surprised that with the nature of this story you both decided to just let the town suffer a massacre. Sure no one we know died, but a lot of civvies just got raped and killed in that horror show.
That said I also love the Spacecraft, and that Demi-Humans and Angels are likely connected to or are aliens. Though there is very little distinction in my works between aliens and gods depending on the power scale.
From what I can tell in this story, Folklore's arc is about letting go, he carries the guilt while moving forward, but he still can't let himself live. Must be pretty soon after the Symphony of Canterlot.
Also. Strawberry and Blueberry are great and sexy. Funnily enough Folklore knows certain things do work, he was still right to call out that Sex Rituals are more of Beatrix's thing, while he tends to work more with blood. Though as a rare occasion he should notice that Beatrix may have a point and that if his healing factor stops working and he is at the brink of death someone may need to lay with him for the transference and fusions of magic, essentially kickstarting his healing factor back into function. Kind of like giving an engine a jumpstart.
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I like mixing in dark elements, although I'm also aware some readers find them offputting and thus have strived to keep a balance here, with humor and sentimentality to offset any grim moments.
Indeed, Arcanum's arc is largely driven by guilt and needing to let go! Hopefully he'll have a chance to really live life again! Glad you enjoyed his interactions with Strawberry and Blue Moon! And that he had a chance to kick some ass!
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Glad to hear you’re enjoying our interpretation, as he’s a lot of fun to write and do cool action with. The themes of Guilt and Letting Go tie into the stories and other characters quite nicely!
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Ceseri needs to get angry and start developing that killer instinct. Her attachments to are doing her more harm than good.
Midnight is kind of fucked. Sorry but he is fucked.
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Surprised she hasn't become much fiercer after all the hell she's been through! But she feels a need to stay strong for everyone she loves, thus her refusal to abandon Midnight despite his mistakes.
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Agreed, Midnight is in a really tight spot to put things lightly.