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A lesson of Loyalty.

Lightning Rider has always wanted friends, and when she sees the cheerful group of ponies in Ponyville; she heads off into the Everfree Forest. After taking a liking to one of the Ponies, she wants to adventure in the Everfree forest with the pony. Meeting the true Shadow Bolts, and her worst enemy Star Sweeper. But whenshe has to choose between dark and light Which will she pic?. And that includes meeting her love of her life.

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AppleOrPie

AppleOrPie #1 · Oct 15th, 2012 · · · Meeting Dash ·

Not bad. This can turn out to be a fairly heart warming story.

I think, however, that it's a little too early for Lightning to say that she has met the mane 6, considering that she was stalking them the whole time. I also suggest that you focus primarily on one or two characters that Lightning fraternize with just see how things play out.

LightningRider

LightningRider #2 · Oct 15th, 2012 · · · Meeting Dash ·

Thanks for the feedback! I'll defiantly work on it. This is actually my first fanfic, soooo yea. I was thinking on being focused more on Rainbow Dash. :D Thank!!

Moon Mist