A ridiculous back story leads to a series of relatively ridiculous events that somehow ends up with ponies. (What did you expect?)
My first fic, meant for experimentation and to improve my writing skills along the way. Maybe I'll even have some fun while writing it. Feel free to comment and criticize, I'd love to hear what people thought of it. More tags/ character tags to be added as more chapters are added.
i do not own the cover image, blah, blah, whatever other disclaimers are needed.
Chapters (1)
I literally laughed for a good five minutes when I read the ham sandwich scene. Your writing style reminds me of my brother (which is a good thing ;D), and boy was he a good writer. There are a couple things I want to mention, one being the usual "show don't tell" goodness people are always rambling on about.
And the brony... Oh the brony. What a terrible fate, to be thrust into the world you long to be in, only as a mistake. So... I didn't quite understand the entity, but I suppose I'm not really supposed to, right? I kind of want to see a little more written...
Much better, still confusing here and there but I think that's the entire point of this fic. Lols.
In any case welcome to the world of writers and authors! Now sit back and start chewing ur nails as you await the reader's reaction and criticism.
1176647 Glad to hear you got a laugh out of it. I plan to hopefully come back to this chapter at a later time and do a bit of rewriting to improve on the whole 'show don't tell' thing. For now though it is what it is. I'll admit the whole entity thing is a bit confusing, but trust me it was a semi complex kinda concept to try to get across. What you're reading now is a few cycles simpler than it used to be, so people might actually have a chance to understand what I was thinking, or not. Right now I'm working on the next chapter, but I'm trying to take time in order to try and understand what I want as a protagonist and how I'm going to write it. Yeah, so basically once I kinda get a grasp on my characterization and choice of point of view should hopefully follow soon after.
1176848 Why can't I be popular like you? Actually, I take that back. What I really want is to have as much fun with this story as you seem to have with yours. Except, you know, with way better grammar.
1176907 Confusion may or may not clear up in the future, as I kinda like being serious random. Just kidding, things should get a lot simpler from here on out as long as I resist making obscure implications. I'm glad to hear you like it. I think I should maybe start buckling down so that a visit could one day be arranged.