Allegro has always lived a comfortable life. Belonging to a slightly rich family of musicians has its perks. Unfortunately, Allegro is tired of his snobby parents and runs from home. With only a violin and himself, what will he do? Also, who is that beautiful grey mare?
By the way, did I mention you're Allegro!?
As a musician I couldn't help but write this.:)
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The language mechanics need work, the storyline and such aside. Very choppy, doesn't look as if it went through much revision.
>>Ashbad
Sorry, I wrote this chapter at like 12 o'clock and it's the third day I haven't slept.
Shit just got fantastic.
>>Citpo
Thanks!
I await you next update on this story btw.
>>Citpo
Yea, as I said i'm going to start updating this story every Tuesday and Thursday but I think that's all I can handle with school and all, Sorry.
Keep up the good work man. This is getting really good.
I await your next installment with more excitement than a school filly.
Oh damn. Shit just got interesting. Can't wait for your next update man.
I really like the title of chapter
Once again I sincerely apologize if this chapter feels forced. My brain was a complete mess this week.
My childhood hero is Gold Star? Well alright then.
Nice turn of events although it wasn't exactly to my liking. Don't get me wrong it was pretty fucken fantastic but something seemed off... I can see why you had so much frustration when writing this.
I suggest that if you wanna make the parents strong antagonist characters add more spite into them. Things such as using proper adjectives for them and adverbs/verbs.
Other then that, I hope you can clear your mind/overcome writer's block and I await your next story update.
(I'm always available for proof reading/stories if you need help, pm me for Skype if you need to throw ideas around. Also would be a good idea to get the other guy in it as well i.e Mr. Gold Star person guy that I can't remember nor can I bothered checking him up even though it'd take less than 10 seconds.)
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First of all I said a childhood friend not your childhood friend. If I did say that he was yours I'll fix it later. As for the grammar mistakes I'll fix them tomorrow, not right now because it's like two o'clock, but I'll fix them soon enough.
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Ah, then that's a fault on my part. It's not grammar mistakes it's the general vibe of the chapter is all. The entering of the parents needs more negative adjectives and adverbs/verbs to spruce it up.
Go to bed you silly filly/colt. Whatever, take your pick.
I have a feeling that I will get into the fight as well. Good chapter
The awesomeness needs to be trained or else it gets out of hand
Good story man. The section where allegro goes into the music store needs a bit of clarification work as i found myself reading over lines at least 4 times before i got who it was and the walking to the store where he gets stared down left me a bit confused. Other than that i can't wait for your next update.
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Sorry about that, I'll work on it.
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Awesome. Don't mean to sound like ye cock though so i apologize if i offend.. Can't wait to find out what happens to conundrum.
Minor errors, not a lot but enough.
Wrong which.
A I believe, but I am not so sure.
Straight,
but other than that I thought it was pretty good.
Liar this ain't no hiatus it's the revival of a fantastic novel.
Although I do understand your desire to improve this chapter it is still more than enough to satisfy the minds of the fellow reader.
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Two days of editing and I still left mistakes as obvious as that? I need to get an editor
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