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When a noisy flock of crows decides to roost on Twilight Sparkle's library tree, keeping her awake all night and refusing to leave, she eventually resorts to drastic measures to run them out of town. Unfortunately, Twilight realizes too late the terrible truth about crows. They never forgive or forget. And they have allies.

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This is my first ever attempt at an MLP:FiM fanfiction, although I've been a big fan of the show for over a year. I hope you enjoy it. And if you do, you probably have Alfred Hitchcock to thank for the overall inspiration. (Note: I may have miss-tagged this story. It's not quite dark and it's not quite a comedy but I couldn't see any better way to label it.)

This should be an episode in the third season!

Comment posted by Vanathor deleted Jan 20th, 2013

How'd the hell that happen, that post was not there when I put down the message I literally refreshed the page a second before to make sure I was not being ninja'd.

Comment posted by 1023nelly deleted Jan 20th, 2013

I personally would have seen AJ for advice since farmers deal with them more often, generally.
And I would say the birds have won, showed those ponies for sure.:moustache:

Go nature!!!!!:yay::yay::yay:

I have a feeling this will be featured.:twilightsmile:

wow this was awesome, a really good fic.
btw i hope you dont mind but i just found this error

Applejack grinned. “Twi, you're just the bee's knees. You're plan's workin' like a dandy.”

it should be Applejack grinned. “Twi, you're just the bee's knees. Your plan's workin' like a dandy.”

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Thanks, man! I feel silly now... :facehoof:
Edit: Fixed.

Comment posted by Lucen Aurora deleted Jan 20th, 2013
Comment posted by Hepcat deleted Jan 20th, 2013

You edited this? It popped up in my tracking list.

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Yes, this story will be undergoing some major revisions over the next couple of days. I submitted it for review on Ponychan /fic/ and I was told of several issues--some major, a lot of minor--that need fixing.

Major and minor edits completed. The overall tone of the story is now more consistent (darker), the plot more streamlined, and the sentence structure varied and less monotonous. Also, to avoid confusion, I've deleted all reader comments referring to Princess Celestia, as she no longer makes an appearance in this story.

This was really good. I was really happy about the roc but you scared me when the storm came in. I thought a Thunderbird was coming. XD XD XD Wonderful job and great idea to explain that no matter what happens sometimes life can't be controlled and you just have to roll with the punches.

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