Good concept, and I like the multiple endings, but the very brief chapters hardly give any time to appreciate the scenes before they're already over. Also, try to keep multiple people from speaking in the same paragraph; it can make the conversation harder to follow.

Still, good tension and nice use of a picture that needed a story to go with it. Overall, pretty good work.

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Ah, good reminder. I keep making that mistake.

I made this over a number of days as a derpibooru fic first, which is why it may seem a little on the short side. Still, i'm glad you liked it ^^

I think ending 2 is the best one.

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I'm glad you enjoyed it :) Yeah, a 'good' bad-end is always fun~

I like both the 2nd and 3rd endings.

Good story.

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Hope you make more like this

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Been a while since i've written anything, the closest I have is Chrysalis's Favourite Pet... Though that's full-on ponies.