juggeling two storys? be carefull not to over stress yourself they are both good so make sure to take your time and only put up when you think they are ready

Prince of all Monsters and the Emperor of the Crystal Empire

Really sorry to hear about what happen, but AWESOME to see this story back. I'm quite eager to read more and see how things develop won't lie.

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Yes, I know, I'm trying to work on it.
Although to be honest I can't see bad pacing until someone points it out to me.
I think the pacing is a little better on my other story but I don't really know, check it out if you want.

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Thanks and again I'm sorry about the short chapter but when I lost what I had written I had just finished with my other story and to be honest this was as much as I could bring myself to rewrite.

This is great. Thanks for the update

Great work keep it up

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I know and thank you.
To be honest, as I said in Lapis Moon I was just planning to write it to get it off my head and to get out of writer's block but it worked a little bit to well and like in child of grogar it just kind of wrote itself.

"My name...is Greema." I spoke.

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Go with whatever chapter length feels right to you. Longer chapters are nice, but if you feel more comfortable with 1-2k word chapters, that's perfectly fine too. With that kind of length, you can get things out quicker and then get more feedback on things which can really boost things along.

so far i really like this story

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Thanks although If you wanna read a longer chapter check out my other story too, I just posted a 3k words chapter.

...west district while housing ponies is where the griffons settled and compromise the majority of the population...

'Compromise' feels like autocorrect did a thing, I think that should be 'compose' unless the Griffins are doing something sneaky in the empire.

griffons settled and compromise the majority of the population there - comprise the majority

Nice to see this story getting an update! I laughed at the fact all four administrators were angling to get Greema hitched to a relative. :D Also, now the Crystal Ponies finally know the name of their new ruler! It was also nice information to learn the general layout of the Empire. It always bugged me how in canon it was just a single city, not to mention it ended up as little more than a protectorate of Equestria.

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Thanks for pointing it out, I'll fix it in a jiffy.

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Also if you want to see a story more focused on Equestria check out my other story, it's set on my own version of the griffon wars.

Interesting so far. I just hope this can stay updated and not die like so many other promising fics as of late.

For guys who are supposed to be important administrators for the realm they don't seem to be taking their jobs and new ruler seriously in at least pay homage to him or at least evaluate what sort of new tyrant he might be from the old one, and their absences should very much noted, and reviles a lot how what sort of ponies they really are. My theory that are the most likely of what is actually happening is that they are actually collaborators of King Sombra and were profiteering off the slavery and suffering of their fellow crystal ponies and once they heard that he was killed they knew they would have a linching for the rest of the citizenry or that they think(justly) he will clean house and will do away from him just as easily as he did with the old ruler and are running away with as much riches they can carry with them and hopes they won't be hunted down, which they will; the letter are just meant to buy time in confusion.

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on the other hand he took out their tyrant, and is bonded with their artifact, one powered by love, so it might be a fair assumption that the new guy is at least tolerable and at a minimum wont turn to mind control, as for couldnt be there, they did just recover control over their regions, though tbh on this point we dont know enough yet to really judge, there was a recent bit of turmoil in the leadership so its not an unreasonable assumption that they may have been too busy to come in person

Yay update To bad you lost your chapter 2000 word would be ideal

Keep up the good work

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I'm not sure how much this will apply to the story or your comment, but this feels relevant;

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I have seen the video and I loved it. that is primarely the reasoning that I was basing my reasoning that those four administrators are probably really nasty piece of work to have cowardly/greedily accepted Sombra and let him take over or were gifted the post by him.

Siento que el episodio es muy corto

"My name...is Greema." I spoke.

A name that shall live in fame or infamy? Only time will tell.

Good show so far my friend! I hope to see more great work going forward.

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Thanks, in the meantime, feel free to check out my other story.

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Moar!

Also backups, people, backups!

The 3-2-1 rule:
—Create 3 copies of your data (1 primary copy and 2 backups)
—Store your copies in at least 2 types of storage media (local drive, network share/NAS, tape drive, etc.)
—Store one of these copies offsite (in the Cloud)

Creating four regions and Houses of interest, is already more world building than most fics had bothered to do.

I laugh at the notion that they're each sending a family member as a potential bride. This is their chance at an "in" to power, where they likely failed with Princess Amore, surely this new guy, Greema, would be much easier to sway. Though this does question their noble status, are they ducal houses? What would that mean for the griffon representative or was their House granted nobility? Meh, you'll flesh it out eventually

I think just to mess with them he should send a formal request for a census of the regions various spies.

Emperor Greema, The Crystal king, Bane of Darkness, Keeper of the heart and soon to be, thorn in Equestria's side, I hope :D

Why i heard it like:
Grandma

Wormtongue

I already love it!

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I'll admit I'm a zod fan and I really liked that song but I'm confused as to why you've shown me this.

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I sent you that song see if you like it or not and now I know you do.

Took me a while to get to this.

As someone who has felt the pain of deleting a story chapter by mistake i can easily see why you wouldn't want to put yourself though writing it all again immediately after, honestly if shorter chapters mean faster updates then i am okay with that.

So overall this short chapter was just to introduce us to the four main province/district of the empire and what each specialize in, i am sure this will become important latter on if any enemies forces where to ever attack.

I forgot that up until now no one had asked Greema his name.

Ok, Greema can be a good name. Might sound silly, but hey, this is a mlp fanfic after all.

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Oh like Fancy Pants isn't silly.

Just a note. I find the titles for the leaders here to be a bit confusing and inconsistent. We have King Sombra, Princess Amore, and Emperor Greema. It seems a bit strange that they have no system in place, like keeping it simple with King and Queen titles. Also, it is a pity that there was no Queen Greema announcement. Would have loved to see some gender confusion!

hints at single-relatives

Love that one! Please let them send over their single relatives! Would love to see Greema deal with a griffoness!

So he decided to keep the name. Interesting.

He is Greema
First of his name
Last of Grogars spawn
Protector and Emperor of the Crystal Empire
Host to the Crystal Heart

Damn... So mutch to do and the Tutorial level is set to hard... This will be one tough weed to chew tough...

One can hope his advisors are up to stuff... ruling alone can't be easy.