Adventures of a Bat*

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Adventures of a Bat*

This is the story of a pony who is confused about his place in the world. These are his adventures throughout life.

This story is set in a world where Celestia and Luna never retire but instead, split Equestria into 3 ruling states.

*- Title is a work-in-progress, suggestions welcome.

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Prologue · 7th May 2020 · 1,386 words
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Modified Map of Equestria & Character Info: Kenaz · 7th May 2020 · 326 words
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Chapter 1: The Day of the Cutie Mark, part. 1 House Hunting · 18th Jul 2020 · 1,645 words
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Sephocolys #1 · May 7th, 2020 · · · Prologue ·

Ichor grabbed him and almost immediately got pocked by the young foal's horn. As he held his newborn son he noticed something odd it felt like his son had wings. "Honey, I know this is going to sound completely dumb, but does our s-," he started before she cut him off.

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"Well, even though most other guards would have a different reason than mine, it is because without you we wouldn't be together, you did ask for me in particular to be part of your guard," Glyph replied.
"Not to mention if it wasn't for you I would still be living in the cave at the east side of Canterlot mountain with no future, who asked me to be part of your guard even though I came from a poor family," Ichor reminded Luna.
"I forgot that that was how you became one of my guards, and to answer your question, yes I would be honored to be his godmother," Luna said, through light tears. "But on a different note where does your son get his rainbow mane?" she asked.
"I believe that is another thing he gets from my side, my mother has a rainbow-colored mane," Glyph replies. "Also Luna, I personally was wondering that since you are here, can you help us think of a name for our son?" she asked.
"Of course, I would be glad to help," Luna replied, "let me think. . . . . . . maybe no. . . . . . . what about. . . . . . . aha, I got it, how about you name him after the rune for transformation," she suggested.
"Well, that would fit, there isn't a rune for transformation, there is one for the fire of transformation, Kenaz, it more often used to lead the way often with light, though," Glyph says. "What do you think?" she asks Ichor.

You don't need to label the speaker over and over again if it's a conversation like this.

You can read the Writing Guide by Ezn for more information on typical grammar, etc.

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BronyWriter186 #2 · May 8th, 2020 · 1 · · Prologue ·

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Thank you for telling me. I fixed the first part but as for the second part I was always told to say the person, pony, or creature's name at least once each and every time they speak as to avoid confusion for slower readers.

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Sephocolys #3 · May 8th, 2020 · · · Modified Map of Equestria & Character Info: Kenaz ·

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I'm glad I could help you friend.

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