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Evening Shade liked to think she was a normal pony. She pays her taxes, goes to a party every so often, and goes bar crawling with her friends. Sure, she wasn't the most well-off pony in Canterlot, but she made do.

Now? She isn't sure what to think. After accidentally bumping into a piece of Nightmare Moon's armor and being possessed by the spirit trapped within it, she's become torn between her duty as a citizen of Equestria, and her morality and empathy towards this strange new being she is now sharing every moment of her life with.

With twists and turns around every corner and enemies lurking in the shadows, it will take everything she's got to keep her newfound secret while remaining true to who she is as a pony.

Be sure to check out Cyonix, who is the editor for this story!

Edit: Featured on 8/9/2019, thank you guys so much!!!
Edit2: Featured on 8/23/2019!

Art done by the lovely Pillowrabbit!

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This will be a 1st person story, occasionally swapping P.O.V to different characters.

This story is my take on an MLP version of Venom!

Chapters (11)
Comments ( 259 )

Ill give it a whirl.

Haven't seen Venom, Then again, Ive never heard of most crossovers that many of these fics are crossed with, and I still like em. If well written.

The Monk
“A spider’s got to spider.” -Scarheart

В какой-то момент во время чтения у меня в голове заиграла эта музыка:
At some point during the reading, this music started playing in my head:

https://youtu.be/k778OYeg6D0

9681222
I do hope not to disappoint you then!

9682605
Not gonna lie, I haven't heard that soundtrack before, but I definitely see what you mean.

Not a bad start. Looking forward to more.

The Monk

An interesting take on the Venom story arc... You have my attention, but can you keep it?

9694721
Very good question. I've got a few ideas for how I want to handle the story, and I've got a good grasp on how I want the main character to function.

I suppose I'd like to ask you. What do you like in a story such as this? What do you think I could do to make the story better down the road?

9695315
Well I just like your story (so far) mostly cuz I love the Venom a lot & it really delivered, what Spider-man 3 couldn't to with Venom. That's really it, chapter 1 quickly connection so well with how Evening was quickly suffering the early side effects & experiencing the powers from Nightmare inside of her, like how Eddie was in the film.

And now as far as what I would to see, I just hope to see Evening & Nightmare having that same awkward, buddy-cop humor that Eddie & Venom had in the film.

9695377
Then there's nothing less that this story needs.

Well, I find this interesting. Please continue...

Alright, now we have the evil corporation & a love interest for Evening as well as another message from Nightmare in her head. Can't wait for chapter 3!

9742096
Number 3 should be out within around two weeks! I've got a particular arc planned and I'm dying to seemwhat you guys think of it!

Additionally, I've commissioned some cover art for the story, so be on the lookout for that!

Annnnnnnd this is the story that perks my interest

This Chapter reminds me a lot to the VENOM movie.

9742312
Glad to hear that I've caught your attention!

9742535
That is indeed what I'm going for with this fic, with a few changes. Because it isn't a movie, I've got a lot more freedom when it comes to character development and pacing, so I can afford to give attention to every character and unveil the plot as the story goes on.

Should this be put into the Alicorn-O.C. group(s) ?

Right?

Yeah that's where you're wrong kiddo
Edit: story's meh, and kinda interested in reading it. Tracking

9763047
Anything that you think could be done better to improve the story?

9763214
I certainly plan on completing this one! I actually haven't felt this much motivation to write in quite a while, and I'm honestly glad people are enjoying it!

She only frowned at me on the way out, muttering something about "Bucking millennials these days..." It didn't bother me much as I strutted out the door, finding myself a bench to sit down on. I had some impromptu background checks to run.

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This was a great chapter showing off Evening going all "Eddie Brock" in her investigations.... But that e-mail & document, she read earlier, really messed with her badly... Not good is an understatement...

9763598
I definitely want to highlight that side of her life in these earlier chapters because it shapes so much of who she is as a character. Her personality, her worldview, how she views others, etc. It's something I think should have been done with Brock but wasn't due to the short runtime of the movie.

9763601
And you did it with glorious fashion!

9763598
This is something akin to the SCP foundation, memetic agent used to kill unauthorized personel.

exemple : http://www.scp-wiki.net/scp-001

9763927
In due time. You'll get to see the Nightmare in a few chapters.

9763760
That is indeed where I took some inspiration from! As the story goes on I'll explain why and how they exist in more depth, and I'm sure you'll enjoy the twist!

9773894
Holy shit I did. I would've never noticed that. Thank you!

9774046
Glad to hear that I've caught your attention!

Great Rarity cameo, but the next chapter is where all Evening's investigations & will crash down on her....

9774292
Wasn't just a cameo, I'm sure if you read between the lines a bit you'll see what I established with that particular passage :twilightsmile:

I tried to enjoy this fic as best I could, but I really couldn't.

The setting is just modern urban society with the faintest veneer of MLP stretched across it and that is really, really obnoxious to work through. Anytime I'd come close to enjoying the story, it would reference 21st century technology/science/institutions and completely obliterate any semblance of immersion.

The concept as presented was great. But as it stands, it's pretty much unreadable for me.

9776109
There is an AU tag slapped on it for a reason, but I see your point.

Is that the only issue you had with the story?

9776553
Pretty much. Aside from the jarring modernisms, the story was pretty good.

9776554
I do apologize if the modernisms were a bit too much then, but in the end they are sort of vital to the plot and how the story will go in general, so I can't quite just toss em away.

Thanks for actually explaining why you weren't able to get into it instead of just saying "Lul story bad", it means a lot to me!

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