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The elements had a delayed effect?
I guess better late than never, but damn talk about a phryic victory.
Well, this chapter kinda killed my interest. There was an interesting start to the story, but the introduction of this alternate personality/posessing entity/whatever it is just showing up and ruining all progress for a childish "No but everybody's bad cause I say so!" feels kinda boring? Like, it feels that the only reason it exists is to create unneccessary conflict that had already been dealt with. Or to just injure the Main 6 because 'gotta give them more trauma so that any attempts at Friendship are severely hampered'.
......... Wat is happening also nice long chapter also nice
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I believe it's Diablo, his pet lizard before the bomb went off, so they got fused together it seems.
While I appreciate the subtle nuance of the Elements failing to affect someone who is only out to defend another, this did feel somewhat, ham-handed.
And somewhat contrived, given that Twilight really ought to have enough raw magical power to grind this fellow into a fine paste when driven to this extreme.
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If that's the case?! Then why the Hell is he controlling his Owner ( Richard), and hurting the Main Six?
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I don’t think it was a delayed effect. I think we’re about to get another Richard dream sequence where the elements gave him the power to fight back against Diablo’s possession.
Kind of a “He has to want to take back control“ thing.
10706831
No, I dont believe they were delayed. I believe they started working when Diablo truly had an evil and wicked action towards another creature while before he was just protecting his "master" in his own way.
OOF
So is this one based in the same universe as Kkat\s Fallout Equestria?
Is it an actual demon or wasn't it just supposed to be he instincts side? Why is the little lizard so powerful? I have questions but I'm not particularly invested because the core conflict between the deathclaw guy, fluttershy and the mane 6 is just gone
WOW🤩
Alright, so we’ve got 2 minds in the body, and it’s Diablo (unless we get a curveball that destroys reality as we know it). We got a glimpse at Diablo’s power... which was not used for more than intimidation lol.
There is a little bit of intriguing stuff that took place, but I think the biggest thing that stood out for me was the use of “her” when referring to Diablo in a few places. There were a number of typos in the chapter, so it may have just been that, but it could be a little more interesting if Diablo was a female. It might explain some of the reasoning behind their motives for wanting to hurt the ponies.
Other than that we didn’t learn much else of note in this chapter. It felt a little bit rushed... or maybe forced. But I feel it was more because of what was going on with Diablo’s character taking the stage. The feeling definitely shifted from smooth to jagged at the drop of a hat.
I’m looking forward to the next chapter.
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She did have trouble with someone when she had power of 4 alicorns
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I thought he lizard was bad ass
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That someone was notably magic-resistant, and he had gorged himself on an entire species-worth of magic. This critter is a very large and admittedly nasty lizard that is routinely brought down by enthusiastic application of las-fire.
Howard deemed him unworthy and despawned him
i cant believe Applejack is fucking dead
Good chapter
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I think it’s Diablo! It does refer to “ mister Lizard “ as master after all.
Ok ,wtf
It's like a Deus ex Machina, but reversed. Or, as tv tropes call it: Diabolus ex Machina. Fitting.
10707304
He probably meant Pinkie.
10706900
I guessed the powers of Badass as soon as his color was pointed out, he's most likely a ''Salamander'' which, in fantasy usually refer to magical lizards able to breath fire, Drakes is another word they sometimes go by.
Are we even sure this is really even happening? Something seems really off about the entire situation to me.
It’s almost like it’s a dream or something? Maybe even a vision?
And this. This right here. THIS is why he is deserving of his name. Badass.
Fuckin elements taking their sweet fucking time
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No. In any case, it wasn't intended to be.
Wow, fuck them. Just... fuck them. They honestly think beating the shit out of him when he is fucking right would prove themselves? It just proves him right! They don't actually care about friendship, they want to be able to just play like they're the good guys when they came there to MURDER him for no damn reason. Thinking they can kick the shit out of someone protecting him from those who are exploiting him just says they're trying to fuck him over so they can do what they want with him.
If they were actually sorry for what they did they would either BEG forgiveness or just leave and never cross his path again. As far as I'm concerned they're beyond redemption, and Fluttershy herself is standing on the edge of it. The little lizard bitch "Badass" can go count himself among their number.
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In the beginning, It may have just been instincts. But at the same time, I had originally intended our MC to have a little "extra help" up until this chapter from a certain little lizard. Now? Well we'll just have to see.
This story has been one of those which I hype the most about seeing in my favorites box, but... Really? Shrugging off direct beams from Twi, the elements themselves having no effect on a murderous bodysnatcher taking over the body of someone without consent, forcing him to kill someone he was just recently wanting to befriend?
There's "My character is a pretty strong force of nature" and "my character is a literal god that would probably be able to take a laser with the power to move stars to the face without reacting".
I'll stay faved for now because this is a genuinely good fic barring what just happened, but if whichever mane 6 just died doesn't come back I may take my leave because jesus christ this is unrealistically unbalanced.
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Yeeeaah, I will admit this whole chapter took a turn I hadn't necessarily intended it to go down in the first place. Pretty much half the chapter wasn't actually meant to be in it in the first place. But after I got thinking, it was just nothing but a mess of ideas that I wanted to try and somehow fit into the chapter. Key word "try." But in the end, the outcome was pretty much as close to how I was hoping it'd go, so yeah moving on...
Rushed? Fucked? Ruined the story? Yeah, I'll take it all. Honestly this story could've kept on the track its was originally going, but I obviously have no one to blame but myself for taking an interest in this little Diablo arc, and in turn, taking the story to where it is now.
BUT! I still have my reasons. Yeah the delivery was a little shit, but when the end to all of this bullshit comes, I DO have in mind one ending that I hope will make up for this latest chapter snafu. And maybe other future fuck-ups to come. Hopefully.
So with all that in mind, I just got to recover, got to somehow get this story back on a more enjoyable track and hopefully not drive it off another cliff yeah? Yeah. I'll try try do just that.
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Truthfully mate? That's pretty much the whole deal. Wanted to try and shake things up and shook a little too hard I guess. I appreciate the honesty though mate, and I'm sorry if this story wasn't going the way you or I thought it'd go.
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And I wouldn't hold it against you, mate. Writing a story that you and other folks can genuinely enjoy is a bitch and a half if you just can't get certain stuff right. But this ain't gonna stop me, no sir. I'm the damn captain of this burning wreck and I'll still see that it gets to shore even if I gotta drag it across that ocean floor myself! But yeah, completely understandable.
10708221
Ooh! It's been a while since I've found a Fallout story not based in that universe!
Edit: Huh?!
My previous comments with three dislikes for no reason? Oh my, that certainly is rare. Been a while since I've had my comments randomly disliked for no reason.
This chapter was a wild turn in tone but im willing to see how you take this. Interesting chapter but, man, did it feel off.
10708284
Just makes you feel all warm and fuzzy inside, don’t it?
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I know right? It's funny and all, but then curiosity hits. Followed by annoyance at the fact you'll never know why. Then again, it's quite funny to know that a mere question can cause someone or people in this case, to dislike a comment.
But haters gonna hate. I saw a dislike on a comment that said two simple words, 'Good chapter'
...
oh some people can be really messed up sometimes
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There are a few reasons that i can think of. Because Diablo is being massively overprotective.
And because he wants Richard all for himself in a "He's my friend/master and there's no one else deserving of his presence."
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As said, i'll stay a little longer at the least. The rest of the fic has been gold, can't let a small portion of a single chapter ruin a great thing ;)
10708654
Seriously?! Diablo is just taking it TOO FAR to use his owners ( Richard's) Deathclaw body without permission. Also, WHY THE HECK is he inside the Deathclaw body as well?! This is some Super Cliche "Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde BS right their!?
I mean, I don't normally hate the concept of having a Protagonist with mental issues, like having two personalities of One "Good", and the other "Bad". BUT, considering that I seen this MANY TIMES in other MLP Stories in here. It's just starting to sound a bit cheesy and overused cliche.
Can't we just have a normal person with not having no mental issues, like NOT having a obviously ( Made up by the Author) parody of the Dissociative Identity Disorder/Multiple Personality Disorder??!! Just because it advanced the Plot!!!!!! ( No Offense to Real Life people that has the DID Disorder. 😞)
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Then again. Considering that this person made some GOOD POINTS that the Main Six are just being OOC JERKS to Poor Richard ( and Diablo himself). I don't entirely blame Diablo for just protecting his owner from the obvious HOSTILE PONIES. 😡
I hope the Author sees this too. And want to know his/her comment about this?
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lol, naw my dude, I didn’t mean that as a bad thing. The shift in the story’s flow did catch me off guard, and the sudden appearance of Diablo was accompanied by a firm aura of ‘well that escalated quickly’, but I was ultimately left with more questions.
Diablo was confirmed to be inside of the body as well, but now I’m wondering more about them (her?). It’s easy to see why some of us were put off by this sudden change by adding Diablo, but that’s because the lizard’s personality came off as unreasonable and a little too incompetent/cocky. I personally felt that Diablo resembled a kid’s mentality with hints of an animalistic side to them, yet they seem to have a power that no normal being would.
I’m honestly curious about them more than what they did to the mane 6. There’s a lot of potential behind Diablo’s character. Are they female? What are their feelings for Richard? What is the scope of their mind? Are they originally from Equestria? But the biggest one is what exactly is Diablo?
So yeah, I’m quite interested in where you take this story. The fun has only just begun!
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Okay. So when it first came to adding bringing Diablo over to Equestria, I had a basic idea in mind that it would act as a guide so to speak as well as a partner for Richard to bond with. However, when it came to wondering just where I could take this story, the instance that was Diablo's reveal and "defeat," was a potential start to sorting out the story's actual plot.
Now, when it came to deciding on whether this little encounter would be as escalated as it was, that wasn't necessarily intentional. True, I did put a significant amount of thought into how this would potentially affect the overall direction that the story was taking, and considered the likelihood that some folks wouldn't appreciate this sudden development, and after some time thinking things over, I still kept it.
Why? Well, hate me for saying it, but yes, I did it primarily to further the plot. Primarily mind you, the other reason why this chapter became what it was was because I had also taken a gamble to see how folks would react to this sudden turn of events and low and behold, I got results.
And regarding that whole two minds in one head bit, well...I would be lying if I said there wasn't a greater reason for what had happened, the way it happened, and why it needed to happen in the first place. And regarding the answer...? Yeah, you guessed it, plot.
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Ok then, but I got more questions? Who is exactly "Diablo"? Is he really a normal pet to Richard? Until they both fuse into the Deathclaw or something?! And what is their gender? Male or Female?
Also, what do you think of this part?
Personally, I know that they were defending themselves to Diablo. But their NOT innocent either. I mean, I CAN'T just Frickin ignore the too much hostility, cursing, and even death threats.
WTF, is wrong with you all, Mane Six??!! Do you really want to pissed Diablo off?!
Also, I think Richard should be mixed with this. On one hand, the Ponies might manipulate him. And are not innocent.
On the other, "Diablo" is his loyal pet. And he/she was just trying to protect him. Even though Diablo was a "bit" overprotective, and went too far. 🤕
Well that answers what happened to Diablo, but seriously... what happened to you Diablo?
Dude if Pinkie's dead I am going to be so disappointed.
That bad personality is his pet lizard’s isn’t it. You really shouldn’t have been a tease about the elements changing him back, that was just irritating. And check your spelling and grammar. All in all it’s a good read, please write more!
Ok, I'm seriuosly lost right now. Can you please tell me what happened?
Give me mooooorrrreee
Heck lol, this chapter went sort of anime in my point of vew. The story had no anime elements until this chapter. When I say anime elements I mean a lack of sence in the story continuation: the villian par was good, a plot twist, but then having the elememts make Diablo feel pain but not actually work seems supper far fetched lol. Furthermore the monologuing is strong with this ones, and then they alll attack him one by one?! XD and where did our protagonist go? Youd think that he would at least appear to fight diablo for power over the body when his friends are in danger but heck, no dice hehe. Again this is just my personal opinion, there are many that love anime elements, im just not one of them hehe