You can do it! I actually just got out of a looong rut myself. Just let it flow and let it go, friend ^^

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You better check again about what have you written, there are a few words out of context in there.

This is the successor of the old fic. I hope you can continue what the original author couldn’t do. Listed on favorites.

It’s new year and in the very moment that people saw the announce of the original author, we have come to this place and read the story itself.

Do you take Ideas?

Present tense make some want to puke.

The idea is decent. Expression is.... Something. Grammar is something. Present tense is appalling.

Please don’t quit this story like the others

Good so far, please keep going and not quit this story please

https://www.pinterest.com/pin/683984262137845907/
Found a link for the pic but this is as far as I got

There is, or rather was, a man. His name, for the purposes of this story, will be unknown. It doesn't matter, it has never mattered, and it will likely continue not matter long into this story. Today, he has chosen to go to a convention. His name will be no more important there than anywhere else, surely.

let's just call him king

Oh, nice. I was hoping someone would pick this up, one of the very few scp stories I've seen on here.

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Yes, actually. I'm very much worried that I won't be able to do the story justice, so any help I can get is welcome, though I can't guarantee everything will be included. I may actually rewrite even the first chapter besides. Not super happy with it.

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I am sorry about that. I think I may actually sort of rewrite the first chapter. I really want to do the idea justice if only because it intrigued me so much, but I'm still sort of looking for my style, if that makes any sense.

Interesting. I look forward to the next chapter.

"If what you say is true, then let me see the real you. I know that form you wear is not yours to be taken, and I won't let myself for a fool be mistaken." She says fearfully from the other side of the door, prompting him to quickly mold himself again into the form of the Scarlet King, though, not discarding his voice.

Why would Zecora know that?
She is a shaman, yes but don't make her omnipresent or all-knowing for some reason
If she can do that then everyone else can, which takes away the whole reason, purpose of it

Especially that he didn't change with magic but he literally molded himself, piece by piece

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I get that. But for the love of all that is right in the world, do not use present Continuous tense throughout. Don't. Please.

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Completely understandable. I think I may have fixed it? I need an editor, to be honest.

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I suppose maybe I should have made it clearer. I meant for her to sort of notice the wrongness of the form he took through a window. She saw at least the tail end of the transformation. I'll fix that.

In the beginning...

In the first age
When shadows first lengthened

heres a theme song 4 the main character :)

This reads like a terrible isekai power fantasy.

And yet, I like it.

My eyerolls at the beginning of this story were extensive. From what I've read in these first few paragraphs, you're not a bad writer. Just try to avoid cliché's, especially on this site and with a displaced story, as I'm sure you might know. Before I continue reading, I bet the dealer is Discord.

I normally don't critique work, but I both enjoy and hate displaced stories. 100% sure you join the displaced-verse. Ignoring the voices in your ear to make their shitshow more valid is hard. Makes me wonder what spirit animal you're going to meet when the pokéball opens.

Edit: after reading some of the comments, I see that you think you need an editor. That's not exactly true, you need a proofreader, that's on the same page as you. Your grammar and punctuation is passible.

And I'm not trying to discourage you or troll you. Writing stories and putting yourself out there is hard, I know. So, respect.

Edit: sorry it was a bit harsh, but...
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...get your mind out of the gutter.

I can't. Its attached to my body.

Today, he had chosen to go to a convention.

Oh god damn it, another one of these.

Before reading I noticed in the short description that it said this was based on an SCP. I didn’t know that going into this. Naturally, I googled the SCP, and did a little bit of lore digging.

And holy shit that’s some dark lore. If what I’ve read is correct, this SCP could single handedly destroy Equestria.
Thankfully it’s a human in control, right?
...right?

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The Scarlet King will be the end of existence as a whole, only one SCP is stronger, and that is “A Voice Behind Me”

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I know right the only reason I put this to read later was I stombeld on it not even three minutes after waching a video one the crimson king scp

Great first chapter, can’t wait to see where you take this.

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nice

O shit... That new to me Starting as a rather obvies evil Elder God... Than again abilitys and nature get defined by intention and soul.

Great start.