After a mugging gone wrong, I wake up in a strange castle after being "saved" by Q from Star Trek. To make matters worse, the local population thinks I'm the lost prince of the Crystal Empire, Shadow Heart. Or to be more accurate: King Sombra.
Our hero may need to bring more to his side it could be a very hard to take over kingdom with just two ponys he may need more royal Guard concubines to extend his reach
Story has good potential, nice work. The only think that brought my mind to a bit of a cringe was how gary stew’ish you made things hehe. It adds comedic effect at least and I felt that things at the beginning where a bit rush but I see you are starting to slow down a bit at the end of the last chapter wich is a good improvement from the super hurried first chapters. At any rate: be careful with how badass you are because if your 2 characters are turning heads left and right you will have the undivided and cumbersome atention of royalty and a whole city. Remember: the longer u keep “the cat inside the bag” the longer the interesting feeling for readers last..... at least in my opinion hehe. Again nice work and hope to see more
I took one look around, noticed that I'm nowhere near Town Square and that the sun began to set. One word entered my mind when I realized the situation I've found myself in.
9646466 What I hope happens: Celesta walks into the shop, places an order, make amiable small talks with Shadow while both characters are silently freaking out for their own reasons and trying not to show it.
People said chapter two killed off their interest, cause of the MC's actions but then one would have to remember, would Discord ever make things so simple? Discord did call him a boring, simple man. It would in all sense, make sense, if Discord placed him in an AU where his impromptu background story, was indeed reality. What's worrisome is the ghost of magical instinct he was about to unleash in that office and Angel's exposition of how his story made sense with what she remembered of Sombra's reign. Unless Discord is manipulating memories behind the scenes or that Shadow Heart existed, died and replaced or is overridden by transmigration of the MC's soul.
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I'm going with Cowbell.
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What?..
Noice I like it when does he buy Starbucks?
I really hope you update this at a decent pace. I don’t want to have to wait a month for one chapter of this awesome story.
This is really getting attention! Deserved I might add! Keep up to your pace fellow author.
I kinda hope that he brings in Coffee into the herd because I like her
Please sir, may I have some more?
Thanks you for the new amazing story sir...
The force is strong in this story! Come to the Shadow side! XD
I'm getting a distinct 'brain damage' vibe from the main character. That the world just runs with it makes it even worse.
Our hero may need to bring more to his side it could be a very hard to take over kingdom with just two ponys he may need more royal Guard concubines to extend his reach
I want more, this story is beautiful
Story has good potential, nice work. The only think that brought my mind to a bit of a cringe was how gary stew’ish you made things hehe. It adds comedic effect at least and I felt that things at the beginning where a bit rush but I see you are starting to slow down a bit at the end of the last chapter wich is a good improvement from the super hurried first chapters. At any rate: be careful with how badass you are because if your 2 characters are turning heads left and right you will have the undivided and cumbersome atention of royalty and a whole city. Remember: the longer u keep “the cat inside the bag” the longer the interesting feeling for readers last..... at least in my opinion hehe.
Again nice work and hope to see more
Interesting so far. Wonder how long it will be before he realizes that “Q” likely was hoping for this result or similar.
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I am SO READY FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER this is a beautiful story.
i cant wait for the princess to do a search spell to find the missing tyrant of crystal empire only to find him in their capital selling coffee
Aaah, I loved the ending of the Starbucks interview, it was adorable and hilarious. Also ominous,but oh well :P
Mixed feelings about him being with Angel now.
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What I hope happens: Celesta walks into the shop, places an order, make amiable small talks with Shadow while both characters are silently freaking out for their own reasons and trying not to show it.
What will probably happen:
Celestia: *exists*
Shadow: ay bby u want sum fuk?
Got around to reading, and it's not that bad.
People said chapter two killed off their interest, cause of the MC's actions but then one would have to remember, would Discord ever make things so simple? Discord did call him a boring, simple man. It would in all sense, make sense, if Discord placed him in an AU where his impromptu background story, was indeed reality. What's worrisome is the ghost of magical instinct he was about to unleash in that office and Angel's exposition of how his story made sense with what she remembered of Sombra's reign. Unless Discord is manipulating memories behind the scenes or that Shadow Heart existed, died and replaced or is overridden by transmigration of the MC's soul.
Maybe soon things will be made clear
Ha-HA!!! I know it! Royal Guard are Eye Candy at best and bad corridor decoration at worst
This story is glorious.
Internet story.
Lol, the beginning of this chapter reminded me of "The devil is a part-time"
This was a parity chill chapter and enjoyable to I can't wait to see where this story goes.
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I hope this story get continued and finished one day. Royal Guard are quite the wash it seems.