After a mugging gone wrong, I wake up in a strange castle after being "saved" by Q from Star Trek. To make matters worse, the local population thinks I'm the lost prince of the Crystal Empire, Shadow Heart. Or to be more accurate: King Sombra.
Wow, poor colt, he just got finessed straight out of his job. I like this story, a pretty fresh take on the "sent to equestria at death" theme. I wonder if the Starbucks' in equestria have better coffee than where he was before. He'll probably make sure that if its not, it will.
Well looks like he had fallen into his old routine that he had in his previous mortal coil despite all the new possibilities of making a more interesting life for himself with his magic, with basically getting himself the same job had. I wonder his he could do something more daring to get noticed more by the population or to getter more capital for himself.
I feel that it was a mistake of his of pretending that he was the real prince of the kingdom, as he knows next to nothing about the history or culture of the Crystal Empire that he was supposedly destined to rule over and doesn't know any of the little facts and quirks that would pass for a native, and that Angle Blade was too stupid to notice it. I still do like the back story he had created for himself despite that, and I wonder if the body that he is inhabited isn't in fact that of the real prince, and what would have happened to his soul before the guy inhabited his body now. Is it laying dormant inside or and will have to wrestle for control of the body or with the two souls merge over time through osmoses, or was it removed and placed somewhere else?
Now, I know what many people would think when talking about marriage with a random stranger who they just met. "It's a bad idea," and, "Don't do it, you moron," are both common and valid reasons in most situations, but in my current predicament. It's actually quite beneficial. Let me explain.
Actually, the thought that comes to mind is 'why'? Why would you do ANYTHING you're doing right now?
okay, so there are some explanations for his reasoning but not his behaviour. I can't read anymore of this, I wanted to stop last chapter but was hoping for an explanation, the explanation I got isn't good enough
Let me put it this way: You are a Captain guard pony or something in the crystal empire. You have probably trained for and against threats against you home for years. You rose up the ranks to gain your high position and unless this is due to the whole institution being a joke this means you have particular strengths and abilities to facilitate this. You are patrolling and hear a commotion that you respond to. Who dares threaten the peace of your city that you have taken oaths to protect? It's Sombra, the evil, enslaving mad king of your cities past. This is serious, better respond to this by getting backup, letting higher ups know the situation or at least try to keep him at bay. Oh wait, You wasn't trained to fight againstmale threats against the state! Guess you should just lay down like a scared puppy and blush when he makes extremely derogatory comments toward you. What's this? Oh dear, this individual is responsible for the bitter enslavement of your family who you probably swore to protect is really quite scary and handsome. You better faint and hope he makes you his wife? Oh you woke up because he threw you into a secluded train car that's leaving the city where your life, family, job, and friends are and he's very romantically ripping your armour off, a mare he literally just snatched off the streets and has constantly made rapey comments too. Well what did you expect? your guard training specifically said that if the assailant is a male your only hope is to do whatever he says and hope he could be a kind husband. It could be worse.
That comment from last chapter, something about "I'm so making her my wife"? is really telling. There's a reason a marriage proposal is called a proposal. If your relation starts out with i'm going to MAKE them be my wife there's something seriously wrong.
I could accept this and even understand Angel Blades decision to trust and follow our main character but not so easily. And definitely not after being assaulted in a manner usually only used by the worst criminals. His motivations make a little more sense in this chapter, he's clearly made plans, but that does not excuse "playing with her feelings." mostly because this isn't "playing" it's completely reworking an individual's life for the uses of an incredibly dubious guy whose first reaction is kidnapping and stripping for pretty much exclusively sexual reasons. For these reasons the only way I could accept this is by moving on in the story believing all females in it are nothing more than things. Our main character may be comfterable with that but I am not.
This. The characterization in this story is just beyond awful, to the point where I seriously just can't keep on reading even with it having a slightly interesting premise.
I, Shadow Heart, came up with a brilliant alibi halfway to the destination the train was heading towards. It's quite simple really, and a stunning stroke of genius if I do say so myself. I based it all on the information I managed to lovingly caress it out of from my future wife, Angel Blade.
My "drop that shit and blacklist the author"-o-meter is reaching critical levels which sucks after such a promising prologue.
Now, I'm watching the landscape pass us by. Angel Blade sat close by, giving me shy glances every now and again with little flutters of her wings. She gradually warmed up to me when she realized that I wasn't the evil King Sombra that she learned to fear. In fact, I think she found my fake story very heroic. I won't destroy whatever fantasy is going through her mind. Right now, being honest about who I truly am on the inside matters. I'm a little relieved that she finds my true personality attractive rather than the fake one I used back in the city. I don't think I could keep up the charade for long.
On one hand, show don't tell. On the other... I'm not sure if I want to watch this piece of literal shit seduce a kidnapped woman through lies.
I wonder what Candace and Shining Armor r going to do if they learn about him.
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Lol that's funny. All how down to Shadow Heart. He is the Crystal Ponies wet dream.
Great chapter
This is one of the best things I read in a while! I love it and cant wait for more!
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Yeah I'd figured that's where your inspiration for this came from, hope to see more chapters soon.
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I see that you are an individual of culture as well. *Tips left boob*
Wow, poor colt, he just got finessed straight out of his job.
I like this story, a pretty fresh take on the "sent to equestria at death" theme. I wonder if the Starbucks' in equestria have better coffee than where he was before. He'll probably make sure that if its not, it will.
Well looks like he had fallen into his old routine that he had in his previous mortal coil despite all the new possibilities of making a more interesting life for himself with his magic, with basically getting himself the same job had. I wonder his he could do something more daring to get noticed more by the population or to getter more capital for himself.
I feel that it was a mistake of his of pretending that he was the real prince of the kingdom, as he knows next to nothing about the history or culture of the Crystal Empire that he was supposedly destined to rule over and doesn't know any of the little facts and quirks that would pass for a native, and that Angle Blade was too stupid to notice it. I still do like the back story he had created for himself despite that, and I wonder if the body that he is inhabited isn't in fact that of the real prince, and what would have happened to his soul before the guy inhabited his body now. Is it laying dormant inside or and will have to wrestle for control of the body or with the two souls merge over time through osmoses, or was it removed and placed somewhere else?
OOOF!
4th wall? What wall? We've never had a wall there, it has always been a set of curtains, bloody things don't even close properly.
Ok, maybe is because I love fics where the MC is kinda an inept, but maybe you are making him look too good.
Awww. Poor kid. I hope he has a place in the new order.
We were all thinking it, but I gotta say it:
This coffee house is about to see a spike of customers!
I’ve recently read a couple much slower paced stories. So the much faster paceing here has thrown me a bit. But I’m still enjoying it.
Actually, the thought that comes to mind is 'why'? Why would you do ANYTHING you're doing right now?
okay, so there are some explanations for his reasoning but not his behaviour. I can't read anymore of this, I wanted to stop last chapter but was hoping for an explanation, the explanation I got isn't good enough
Let me put it this way: You are a Captain guard pony or something in the crystal empire. You have probably trained for and against threats against you home for years. You rose up the ranks to gain your high position and unless this is due to the whole institution being a joke this means you have particular strengths and abilities to facilitate this. You are patrolling and hear a commotion that you respond to. Who dares threaten the peace of your city that you have taken oaths to protect? It's Sombra, the evil, enslaving mad king of your cities past. This is serious, better respond to this by getting backup, letting higher ups know the situation or at least try to keep him at bay. Oh wait, You wasn't trained to fight againstmale threats against the state! Guess you should just lay down like a scared puppy and blush when he makes extremely derogatory comments toward you. What's this? Oh dear, this individual is responsible for the bitter enslavement of your family who you probably swore to protect is really quite scary and handsome. You better faint and hope he makes you his wife? Oh you woke up because he threw you into a secluded train car that's leaving the city where your life, family, job, and friends are and he's very romantically ripping your armour off, a mare he literally just snatched off the streets and has constantly made rapey comments too. Well what did you expect? your guard training specifically said that if the assailant is a male your only hope is to do whatever he says and hope he could be a kind husband. It could be worse.
That comment from last chapter, something about "I'm so making her my wife"? is really telling. There's a reason a marriage proposal is called a proposal. If your relation starts out with i'm going to MAKE them be my wife there's something seriously wrong.
I could accept this and even understand Angel Blades decision to trust and follow our main character but not so easily. And definitely not after being assaulted in a manner usually only used by the worst criminals. His motivations make a little more sense in this chapter, he's clearly made plans, but that does not excuse "playing with her feelings." mostly because this isn't "playing" it's completely reworking an individual's life for the uses of an incredibly dubious guy whose first reaction is kidnapping and stripping for pretty much exclusively sexual reasons. For these reasons the only way I could accept this is by moving on in the story believing all females in it are nothing more than things. Our main character may be comfterable with that but I am not.
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This. The characterization in this story is just beyond awful, to the point where I seriously just can't keep on reading even with it having a slightly interesting premise.
Pretty badass... Only one Problem... Luna&Celestia remember Sombra... If they ever meet eye to eye things can get... Troubelsome...
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My "drop that shit and blacklist the author"-o-meter is reaching critical levels which sucks after such a promising prologue.
On one hand, show don't tell. On the other... I'm not sure if I want to watch this piece of literal shit seduce a kidnapped woman through lies.
Played for laughs but this kind of shit happens IRL.
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Is that shit legal?
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nope
I hope he give up taking over the kingdom and just trys to find a chill life as a prince or a regular life.
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Not a bad idea but why not both