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Awwwwww yes I love apple jack
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I'm glad that you enjoyed AJ's part in this chapter. Figuring out a way to flirt with her that would work while still keeping her in character was a lot of fun. Keep reading, there is definitely more for AJ to come. ^_^
that map looks so much like earth
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Yeah, here in ch7 it's not a map of the Equestrian world. It's just a map of our world if it were ponyfied really. But I just like the changed names like Mexicolt, Prance, and of course Coltugal. These places don't have to really exist in the MLP world for them to be effect tools for Rayne to bluff with. Also I've seen globes in the background of episodes but it is my belief that they don't have their entire world explored. So whose to say that if Rayne comes from a place they've never heard of that he's lying?
Also this may be late but I'd highly recommend having thoughts be in italics it's quite annoying and difficult to determine which is thought and which is speech since the quotes is usually reserved for speech and italics for thought alsonif they screamed a question add an exclamation point AND a Question mark.
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Hello SugarCane and thank you for reading my story. I do understand the point that you are making but I always try to very specifically lable whenever a character is thinking something rather than saying it aloud. Also, unless I had a typo somewhere (which definitely happens) I always try to use correct grammar where I can.