“I give it less than a week, maybe a few days considering how lovestruck that changeling was, as for Bluebelle and her friends I give it til the end of the trip.” She smirked.
As expected from an experienced chess-master. Now I know where Cadance learned her shipping skills from.
10306735 Thx, but with the pandemic going on personally for me I see it as an opportunity to buckle myself down and work on my writing. Along with helping Sonic on his too.
This is just uh... not good. I hate to be that guy, but like.
Yeah. I feel like this is one of the stories that made the featured box because "Spike" and "harem."
None of the characters are particularly in character. There's little to no difference in the way the characters speak from the actual narration itself, there's grammatical issues and a lack of proper dialogue tags everywhere, and it's just... it's not good. At the very least it could have at least gotten some extra editing to fix the nearly-one-mistake-per-paragraph ratio.
10307529 Whether it's good or not, this being featured is good for the author's ability to write. I am still trying to get featured but my stuff isn't likable because I don't got the nuance. Luck and skill is just nothing short of genius, so I'll tip my hat off to the author for getting what is impossible to me.
Friend, I am not sure if I told you that I am not used to reading this type of story when the oc is not with its manes, but I must say at first glance that they will like this story a lot and I still support you 100% with this story.
I don't know if this could fit into your plans but... You could have Shining Armor join the trip and be an obnoxious, jealous jerk, until Cadance gets fed up. Then she tells Shining the she's going to make it so he was right and she's going to sleep with Spike...and Shining is going to as well! Then Cadance turns Shining into Gleaming Shield and threesome ensues.
Celestia and Luna made a bet?? that's it!!! (pull out a table and two jars with one being yellow well the other is blue) place your bets on who will win?? Tia or Lulu??
Hope yeh continue this soon, it's a pretty good story, considering it has a ton of very detailed clop scenes xD And that's probably what's best about the last book, and here, you can tell it'll be good. Usually clop stories don't really make good stories when trying to integrate a good story, but you my friend made it possible, along with a select few others, so Kudos to you.
Spike X Harem for the win! XD (I kinda imagine that the CMC will join in soon enough, considering how close friends they are to him, maybe even the rest of the pie sisters, and that one Kirin Mare)
10327569 ah, that makes sense...also, flyers wouldnt have the big girls, they cause way too much drag, makes getting airborne difficult if not impossible to have something that size on their chests...
Does anyone know what going to happen to this story, I didn't see any of the blogs talk about this so just wanted to know if this story will get updates.
I hope Luna ends up winning the bet. She could it it to get "payback" on Celestia for not telling her about the island Celestia had(I get she wouldn't tell others but not telling her own sister and trying to go "You didn't ask" as an excuse is not really cool.). And I bet the "payback" would be fun to see in a fun way pretty much :0
A few things, one; I was really going to enjoy the talk the nieces will have with Celestia. Two; I should let every single one of you know that as long as the horn is just cracked, then they can still use them, while removed or sliced don't. And three, when they parroted "beach vacation" or something, it reminds me of this.
Well damn....ya’ll sure as hell put in some work getting this started alright. Yeesh maybe you guys also need a short vacation for workin so hard.
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Perfect pic
I'm being reminded of the Duke brothers' bet from Trading Places
As expected from an experienced chess-master. Now I know where Cadance learned her shipping skills from.
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Thank you that last part was all me. And I love Trading Places too, great film.
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Thx, but with the pandemic going on personally for me I see it as an opportunity to buckle myself down and work on my writing. Along with helping Sonic on his too.
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It an Coming to America are my absolute favorite Eddie Murphy films
This is just uh... not good. I hate to be that guy, but like.
Yeah. I feel like this is one of the stories that made the featured box because "Spike" and "harem."
None of the characters are particularly in character. There's little to no difference in the way the characters speak from the actual narration itself, there's grammatical issues and a lack of proper dialogue tags everywhere, and it's just... it's not good. At the very least it could have at least gotten some extra editing to fix the nearly-one-mistake-per-paragraph ratio.
Why is this featured?
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Whether it's good or not, this being featured is good for the author's ability to write. I am still trying to get featured but my stuff isn't likable because I don't got the nuance. Luck and skill is just nothing short of genius, so I'll tip my hat off to the author for getting what is impossible to me.
Alright, glad to see a sequel. Cant wait for more.
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What exactly is wrong so far? I'd like to try to understand what some of the problems are?
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I wish it wasn't, those furry monarchs might conquer one day..........
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I'm sure coexistence will be the option
Friend, I am not sure if I told you that I am not used to reading this type of story when the oc is not with its manes, but I must say at first glance that they will like this story a lot and I still support you 100% with this story.
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Dude, it’s mares, not mane.
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good mistake of mine
YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS FINALLY, I HAD BEEN WAITING FOR THIS SEQUEL.
I don't know if this could fit into your plans but...
You could have Shining Armor join the trip and be an obnoxious, jealous jerk, until Cadance gets fed up. Then she tells Shining the she's going to make it so he was right and she's going to sleep with Spike...and Shining is going to as well! Then Cadance turns Shining into Gleaming Shield and threesome ensues.
' Be gone thot!!!!' Is what I hear when I read this.
Celestia and Luna made a bet?? that's it!!! (pull out a table and two jars with one being yellow well the other is blue) place your bets on who will win?? Tia or Lulu??
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No that's a bit much.
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That's not very likely to happen... XD
Hope yeh continue this soon, it's a pretty good story, considering it has a ton of very detailed clop scenes xD And that's probably what's best about the last book, and here, you can tell it'll be good.
Usually clop stories don't really make good stories when trying to integrate a good story, but you my friend made it possible, along with a select few others, so Kudos to you.
Spike X Harem for the win! XD (I kinda imagine that the CMC will join in soon enough, considering how close friends they are to him, maybe even the rest of the pie sisters, and that one Kirin Mare)
a little surprised u used Gretta and not Gabby, but then, i suppose that Gabby is more a Crusader...or maybe in the Young Six...
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This was before I knew about Gabby being interested with Spike.
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ah, that makes sense...also, flyers wouldnt have the big girls, they cause way too much drag, makes getting airborne difficult if not impossible to have something that size on their chests...
Does anyone know what going to happen to this story, I didn't see any of the blogs talk about this so just wanted to know if this story will get updates.
...Fuck it, more harem it is! Cuz why the hell not?
I hope Luna ends up winning the bet.
She could it it to get "payback" on Celestia for not telling her about the island Celestia had(I get she wouldn't tell others but not telling her own sister and trying to go "You didn't ask" as an excuse is not really cool.).
And I bet the "payback" would be fun to see in a fun way pretty much :0
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Isn't that the whole point of this story?
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I would say so, yes.
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A few things, one; I was really going to enjoy the talk the nieces will have with Celestia. Two; I should let every single one of you know that as long as the horn is just cracked, then they can still use them, while removed or sliced don't. And three, when they parroted "beach vacation" or something, it reminds me of this.
https://m.Is it an Egg thing?
If Bluebelle were to join Spike’s harem, wouldn’t that technically be incest due to them being adopted cousins?
please continue the story