Just a short one-off that popped into my head one day at work. Based upon the classic poem originally penned by Clement Clarke Moore. I realize this idea is probably not the most original, and I hope that it will pass the rigorous rules of this site, I have dabbled in the written word before but only just.
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Bonny stuff! Suitably Hearthswarming-y, and the second's a good ponification of the original classic. Good wee descriptions sprinkled throughout the first chapter as well, and plenty of good scene-setting.
If you're open to some critique, then some of the paragraphs in the first chapter have a bit too much heft to them, and breaking them into smaller parts would help their readability. The book titles you mention might not need underlined as well as italicised - the latter helps them stand out enough, and the second chapter needn't be all in bold. Something like "Twilight read..." followed by a line break, and then by the rest in normal text would do the job just fine.
Beyond those points, though, it's a good wee piece. Thank you for it, and hope the holiday season treated you well.
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Thank you very much for your input, I'll see about implementing some of your advice over the next week. And Thank you for your warm wishes, I did indeed have a good holiday, and I hope yours was as well.