No matter who you are, you're likely to get depressed at least once in your life, especially if you're a teenager. This is the story of how that feeling manifests itself, what it leads to, and if it's too late to stop it. This is the particular case of a certain dragon and a flightless filly.
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Hmm. Interesting.
Make a new paragraph whenever a new character speaks, otherwise this is extremely well written.
Depression, a sickness, a curse, a meme. its many things. this story captures two of these descriptions in one chapter, i have to say, for a first story, it's extremely good. waiting for more :)
i'd also advise you to watch the first two seasons of the show to get a gist of things, I've not watched the show since then and i know about the most recent season. well, except for the MOST recent. otherwise the latest i know is the Pony of shadows and the School.
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Thanks; I have a background in Fanfiction, as well as took a creative writing course in high school, so this is really fun for me!
How did you make the spacing like that?
EDIT: huh... it doesn't do it in the comments... weird.
that makes sense, what you said about Discord..... but he isn't outright rude like he is in this story, he just, does not care about anyone else.
and this chapter is better than the last one when it comes to layout, because it conforms with the site rules about dialogue. otherwise it's as good as the last one, which is impressive.
i followed you because it was a whim, but you started pumping out this stuff, man i'm glad i did.
anyway do you have any plans on proofreading for others? because I know someone who needs an editor and I have a story that I need to work on. would you be interested?
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What a climax.
Spike is dying.. Scootaloo is about to as well.. this is going downhill very fast, lets hope RD can save her..
Good chapter, light on details, but a simple re-write can fix that. hoping for more.
and if that was not enough emphasis, this should be.
MOAR!!!!!MOAR MOAR MOAR!!!
Why isn't there a sad tag?
Wait What WHAAAAT?!!
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Sorry; wasn't thinking about that at the time. I'll add it
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;)
So the story end?
Yep. Thanks for reading!
Welp this was an amazing story, can't wait for the next one 😃
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You won’t have to wait too long :)
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Horay!
pretty good story, kinda quick but the writing is good
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Thanks for reading. I’m actually thinking about redoing this story in the future; looking back now, I’ve found things I can improve upon.
Was making each sequel progressively longer intentional?
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Nope. It depends on how far ahead I’m thinking. The reason each sequel is longer is because I’m trying to add more detail with each chapter.
I want to look at the conflict with all characters from different angles. It’s why there are chapters with specific character focuses.
Damn that was dark.
My boy lives!
Good on you Rainbow and you too Redheart.
That's not true Discord does care about his other friends including Spike Big Mac the other members of the six.
Ok I'm just saying this now if no chapter in this or any other of this series has rainbow with a bat smacking that guy upside the head I'm gonna be mad
Let me tell you how it feels. It hurts. A lot. It hurts so much that you eventually learn to live with the pain.