A seemingly normal day at school takes a unexpected turn as the young colt named Forest finds himself thrust into an adventure in unfamiliar territory. The adventure leads him to a discovery of himself and what his special talent is.
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Lunar Rays
Brony since beginning of November 2011. I live in England. I enjoy writing and drawing. Other than that i'm just a friendly ol' doormat.
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This is really good! Oh... and first comment! But, I realized that you didn't capitalize I'm in a lot of places in the story, such as this one:
'"No, I.. uh... i'm fine, Autumn Song" He answered, his eyes looking away from her.'
It should be "No, I... uh... I'm fine, Autumn Song."
But it's still a great story!
Wow thanks, i'm glad you liked it
Thanks for pointing that out i'll fix it
Whoa, didn't think it would look this long when put together. The story is great, but you already knew that. Yeah I agree with the guy above, there are still a couple of grammatic changes to be made. Told you I'd roll up here to check it out! In the words of one awesome pony: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9-19kMXEBw8
Now back to bed
Thanks for reading, I know you said you would
i'll be fixing the errors up, just glad its small grammatical errors 
Wow. Just . . . wow. This is freaking beautiful. There were a few grammatical mistakes, but not enough to distract me from the sheer epicness of this piece.
>>Fluttershywriter
Thanks for reading and I am so happy you enjoyed it. I'm glad the mistakes were not a distraction to your reading
Wow, so simple, yet touching story, I love these "Slice of Life" stories, they give a lot of "context" to the FIM universe, the normal life around. I enjoyed it greatly and are now in my "to read again" list. Just a few gramatical errors, not distracting, and even I'm not sure they're errors, as I'm not native english-speaker. Great job!
Just wanted to let you know, this was a very nicely planned story. Others have pointed out some grammatical errors, so I'm not going to repeat that point, but instead stress that you crafted a touching story with a nice depth to it that's sadly often lacking.
Congratulations, and I look forward to seeing you grow and improve, just as Forest will. :)