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Looks really interesting
You have my attention author
Well done
not bad i enjoyed it 😊👍
Well done 👍
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Im glad that my story has your interests. This is my first time writing so I'm just seeing what works and what needs some work. But thank you very much for your comment, its appreciated.
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I'm glad that you like it.
Interesting start I like it
Not enough to go by to make a like or dislike yet will wait for more. But good start non the less. Caught my attention since lightning master hasnt updated
Interesting idea, but it feels rushed and you should probably get an editor, but apart from that I am interested to see where this goes
You have a few grammatical errors here and there and also have a few occurrences of repeated words. An easy way to fix up a lot of grammar issues easily is to simply read what you wrote out loud. Reading it out loud makes it easier to hear your own mistakes rather than see them.
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Thanks for the he help. I will look back at it as soon as I can. I'm glad that you are helping out.
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Yeah I've never written a story before so this is all new to me. But I am going to make an effort to fix the problems and add more details to the story to make it have a more smooth flow to it.
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From what I've seen so far this is a good story, for your first. Hell, this is straight up good. But - and this is a big ass but - the frequent spelling mistakes pull you down big time. I won't list them , but I suggest that you go over chapters thoroughly for spelling mistakes before you post them - nothing ruins the immersion you can create with a good story like bad spelling.
I hope this helps. You're a diamond in the rough, Auto.
Hey... This is pretty good.
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Hey thank you. This helps a lot with the story and helps me get more experience out of this. I know this one for sure is rushed but I will be sure to look through the chapters and make sure they are a lot better than what they are now. Again thank you very much.