Like I said last time, I can't really see Starlight being a sub in any way. So if you DO go ahead and do that story in this canon, I hope one of the parts has Starlight be the dom just for a change of pace in the relationship. (You are, of course, inclined to do whatever you want in that fic if you do)
Also, I find it kind of odd and amusing how I don't ship StarTrix beyond a friendship (I hardcore ship StarBurst), yet the two being in a relationship ISN'T my least favorite thing about the fic.
Similar to previous posts. I'm personally not very interested in Starlight's and Trixie's relationship, but if it pushes the plot, then I'm fine with it. I'm also happy you got Starlight to scold Trixie. Last chapter she was acting like a textbook bitch who took advantage of Twilight due to her own petty jealousy and spite. Seeing her talked down to by Starlight and forced to behave was pleasing to read.
Eh, I’m not really a fan of the dynamic between Starlight and Trixie here, for a few reasons: First, Trixie’s being really vindictive, almost cruel. Second, and this ties into the first, it’s not clear that Starlight is enjoying it, it comes across as abusive rather than a fetish. And third, Femdom isn’t really a kink of mine.
It’s still well-written though, so I’d probably read and enjoy a sequel with this duo if those first two things could be addressed.
Namely, riding Starlight’s cock for hours without giving the poor girl the privilege of pleasure at all, nevermind release.
That is EVIL.
“Try again, without being a smartass.”
Aw, but that's half the fun!
“Hm… You sure you can make that happen?” asked Starlight. She took the notes from Trixie, examining her research and calculations. “Wow, this is some incredible work, Trixie. Your study on the Circle is really good.”
Well, the thing is, Trixie isn't bad at magic, Twilight's just BETTER.
“Beatrix Amanda Lulamoon.” Trixie froze, unsure as to what to do next. Full names like that were never a good.
Oh boy, Full Name Ultimatum.
“Yeah. It would’ve been easier to use her hair,” noted Starlight. “A lock of her hair would have more of her residual magic than her panties. So why’d you…” Starlight stopped herself as she connected the dots. Trixie smirked when she was sure that Starlight had pieced things together, snapping her fingers. In a flash of light, Twilight’s worn, slightly-damp panties appeared in her hand.
I adore the dynamic between Starlight and Trixie, I truly do.
Tried to keep this short cause I wasn't sure if anyone other than me really gave a damn about the Starxie relationship.
I liked this relationship and don't mind seeing more of it. Starlight wasn't a total pushover and Trixie knew how to push her buttons but also her boundaries.
This has been a good fic, but Rainbow and Trixie are really starting to disturb me in terms of their treatment of Twily or in Trixie's case, her attitude about Twilight in general
I wanted to comment that in chapter 2 iirc, I thought that Dash was going to pop open the vial and drink all of twilys 'smart juice' and the fic would continue from there. It felt like that was going to happen.
Aww... I mean, yes, I was terribly disappointed about the lack of Twily stuff .. but nonetheless that was fun, though I suppose I am glad of shortness too.
I see you did include a description this time at the beginning why Starlight is so desperate. Good. I do wonder where Twilight is though. Maybe you could include a mention.
“Yes?” Trixie decided to approach the situation cautiously. She knew Starlight well enough by then to know when to push her and when to let her breathe, and this was definitely one of the latter.
I would think not. With Starlight trying to stand up but faltering I would think this is an ideal moment to push her authority.
But, for Starlight, Trixie reasoned she could at least postpone her revenge.
I like what you are doing but I would imagine it would take a little more than this to get Trixie to change her mind about something. She is a very stubborn mare so I think it would take something like Starlight putting her hoof down in direct defiance or tearfully begging her to make that happen. Something that makes her think that if she doesn't do this she might lose Starlight's love.
Yeah, I'm glad it's short.
Like I said last time, I can't really see Starlight being a sub in any way.
So if you DO go ahead and do that story in this canon, I hope one of the parts has Starlight be the dom just for a change of pace in the relationship.
(You are, of course, inclined to do whatever you want in that fic if you do)
Also, I find it kind of odd and amusing how I don't ship StarTrix beyond a friendship (I hardcore ship StarBurst), yet the two being in a relationship ISN'T my least favorite thing about the fic.
Similar to previous posts. I'm personally not very interested in Starlight's and Trixie's relationship, but if it pushes the plot, then I'm fine with it. I'm also happy you got Starlight to scold Trixie. Last chapter she was acting like a textbook bitch who took advantage of Twilight due to her own petty jealousy and spite. Seeing her talked down to by Starlight and forced to behave was pleasing to read.
Eh, I’m not really a fan of the dynamic between Starlight and Trixie here, for a few reasons: First, Trixie’s being really vindictive, almost cruel. Second, and this ties into the first, it’s not clear that Starlight is enjoying it, it comes across as abusive rather than a fetish. And third, Femdom isn’t really a kink of mine.
It’s still well-written though, so I’d probably read and enjoy a sequel with this duo if those first two things could be addressed.
Yeah, not really my cup of tea. Writing's up to the same quality levels as always, but femdom and Trixie as a dominant are severe turn-offs on my end.
Are you kidding? I love Starxie!
Also, calling the catalyst being a strap-on
That is EVIL.
Aw, but that's half the fun!
Well, the thing is, Trixie isn't bad at magic, Twilight's just BETTER.
Oh boy, Full Name Ultimatum.
I adore the dynamic between Starlight and Trixie, I truly do.
You kidding? I love these two!
I feel you, Starlight, i feel you...
On a similar note, this chapter...
I liked this relationship and don't mind seeing more of it. Starlight wasn't a total pushover and Trixie knew how to push her buttons but also her boundaries.
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I was thinking panties that activate the spell automatically when worn, but that sounds good, too.
This has been a good fic, but Rainbow and Trixie are really starting to disturb me in terms of their treatment of Twily or in Trixie's case, her attitude about Twilight in general
I wanted to comment that in chapter 2 iirc, I thought that Dash was going to pop open the vial and drink all of twilys 'smart juice' and the fic would continue from there. It felt like that was going to happen.
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Aww...
I mean, yes, I was terribly disappointed about the lack of Twily stuff .. but nonetheless that was fun, though I suppose I am glad of shortness too.
I see you did include a description this time at the beginning why Starlight is so desperate. Good. I do wonder where Twilight is though. Maybe you could include a mention.
I would think not. With Starlight trying to stand up but faltering I would think this is an ideal moment to push her authority.
I like what you are doing but I would imagine it would take a little more than this to get Trixie to change her mind about something. She is a very stubborn mare so I think it would take something like Starlight putting her hoof down in direct defiance or tearfully begging her to make that happen. Something that makes her think that if she doesn't do this she might lose Starlight's love.