And here we go, huh?

That was fast.

No "five for five" yet... Finish it first.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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This is a game that I'll inevitably lose one day. Just hoping it isn't yet!

...*adds to read later*

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Weird how it even became a game.

In any case, good start so far.

~Skeeter The Lurker

OH man what a great chapter and a way to really build up the desire. I think he is going to snap and I don't think he is just going to rut her. I am 100% sure he is going to try to breed her. He is going to go at her with the intent to knock her up. I think Shy having a thing deep down about wanting to be dominated by a large powerful creature like Spike and just be wreaked would be cool. It would show that on top of this side of her there is a side that no one knows about and that is this super submissive side to her mate. I really REALLY hope this goes beyond the hook up (that is if you want to go beyond that), and we get to really see this relationship grow and how these two function together, not to mention how wild their mating life prob will be lol. There is alot of interesting places this story can go and I can't wait to see mroe

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There are so many ways you could have phrased your comment, and you chose "uncomfortable." It made me laugh though.

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Poor spike, running away from his dreams. You can’t have a nightmare if you never dream, but it’s really really hard to stop dreaming.

Now this is the story I desired from you.

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Lol what can I say I have become jaded to so many fanfics after so many years when I find one I like it set a fire that burns with the white hot intensity of a thousand suns. Even more so for a Spike story since they seem to have become as rare as a miscolored unicorn that farts cheeseburgers.

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Even more so for a Spike story since they seem to have become a as rare as a miscolored unicorn that farts cheeseburgers

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Hi Princess Celestia! I'm so glad for the visit!
Twilight . just call me Celli and I'm really here on official business, Is Spike available ?
Spike! Princess Celestia wants you!
Wut? her too?
Spike I'm here to deliver papers
Great I can catch up with the latest news around Equestria!
About that getting around, These are paternity papers. . .
WHAT?
Daddy Spikey
You too? Fluttershy!
Who's your daddy! Gummy's happy too!
He knocked you all up! Ha ha ha ha ha
I like more then just apples!
Ah it's a pony thing? Herds and stuff?
Forget some pony?
All of Ponyville, Just not you...

Very hot! Where's the picture from?

Fluttershy, you sly minx. You know very well what you are doing to a obviously young adult, pent-up drake.

Honestly, I didn't even realize that it was in you in the first place, let alone that you were daring enough to tease Spike like this...

wow can't wait for more

I just saw it sitting there, being unloved, and I had to have it. You understand what I'm saying?

Dude.

Wow! WOOOOOOOOOOOOW!

I just saw it sitting there, being unloved, and I had to have it. You understand what I'm saying?

I think this is my favorite line so far. It could only be improved if you had had Flutter say "You feel me?" instead.
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special about her, from the 

The rest of the sentence leads me to believe that this comma would serve better as a semicolon.

more lost in the thought

more lost in thought

Fluttershy was his friend, and ever since she had met him eight years ago, she had always had a soft spot for him, he could see that much, but where Fluttershy was soft, with time Spike had become more and more hard in comparison, both in his appearance and in his loins whenever he was around her. 

Holy run on sentence Batman.

He wasn't sure what would come tomorrow

Hopefully both of you.

I've spent the entire time reading this trying to come up with ways Fluttershy could put as many double entendres she could put in a sentence as once.
I discovered both that I have very little imagination in that regard, and that I can only think of stupid conversation topics.

No source on that image?

Just want to say, props for recognizing that Spike being older means time has passed for everypony else as well. That gets handwaved away far too often.

Should probably credit the artist "Devo87" for the cover image.
Although they sign everything with "DEVROSS(year)" or "D87" so it can get confusing.

I have completely the wrong mental images for what might come next.
I'm imagining Spike grown to about the size of a typical pony, and remembering something someone said recently about creatures where the male has some elaborate display or complex courtship ritual (peacocks etc) being overcompensating.

I can't shake this image of Spike finally giving in to desires, only to find out that Fluttershy is trying very hard not to sound disappointed.
"I thought dragons were huge and super masculine. That's not even half the size of your tail! Haven't you ever seen a stallion with a hard-on?"

Wow! That was so very, very hot and tempting! Please don't let this go on for long because I felt like mounting her for, Spike! Damn, cute, sexy and beautiful Fluttershy!

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Google "Devo87", go to their e621 page, scroll down for a bit

You piqued my curiosity; you now have my attention. I'm interested to see where this goes (well, we ALL know where it goes, but I'm looking forward to the plot. Which one, you ask? Yes.)

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And pour his butter in her gutter.

I absolutely love your stuff so far. I'm really impressed and slightly baffled by how you're able to make relatively tame, vanilla premises so captivating, and any new story of yours is going straight the top of my after-dark queue.

Quick criticism, I think you went a little overboard with the exposition in this chapter. I counted nearly 2k words near the top where a few paragraphs would probably have sufficed. Normally I skim past the non-porny parts of clopfics, but you seem to make really good use of your prep-time. The scene in Fluttershy's house hammered the tension home fantastically, but Spike's inner monologue just sort of circled the drain.

Anyway, eagerly awaiting more from you.

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Thank you for this criticism. I was wondering if the first scene dragged a little in places and felt it could have been better served with a little more blending and some paragraphs being shortened or cut. Unfortunately, this is the issue with the majority of my writing—I don't edit or redraft.

It's also wonderful to hear that you enjoyed the other scenes. Porn with a plot is brand new to me, and as such I may have overdid it a little when trying to establish Spike's character and struggles. It's a mistake I'll attempt not to repeat, as I usually value brevity in my writing (see my other stories) over needlessly long and tangential abstractions.

As for you awaiting more, I'm very glad to hear so and I hope to be progressing with chapter three by tomorrow. I have a couple of other things to be getting on with in the interim.

Thanks to everyone else for showing interest too, it's nice to see that this story has been well received!

Spike was a simple dragon: he saw his best friend's pussy, he got hard. No amount of mental conditioning was going to change that.

No one judge you. I mean, it is cute, innocent(?) Fluttershy.

Now with a shiny new porn tag.

: "Yay!"

He felt ashamed of his thoughts. Fluttershy was his friend, and ever since she had met him eight years ago, she had always had a soft spot for him, he could see that much, but where Fluttershy was soft, with time Spike had become more and more hard in comparison, both in his appearance and in his loins whenever he was around her. It was a terrible thing, one that he hadn't even managed to talk to Twilight about, and while he hoped that it would fade in time, much like his infatuation with Rarity had, it only seemed to be getting more prominent as he aged.

He can't talk to Twilight? Yeah, I can see that. Oh, if only he had two or three perfectly valid positive male influences in his life that he could talk about this with. Surely Shining Armor, Night Light, and Big Mac have no such knowledge of such feelings; especially the married stallions. I doubt even Ember could help her fellow dragon cope with his newfound draconian urges and how they influence his emotional feelings. No, poor Spike has nopony to share in his burden.

If his cock had been restless before, it was now screaming for release. Between the relatively thin surface of the cushion and him was Fluttershy's squirming ass as she struggled to place the band on Spike with a pair of hooves, leaning into him and brushing a fluffy wing against his side as she breathed a contented hum. Everything about her was musical, from her mien to her breath to her movements to her voice, and she brought it all to bare with immeasurable sexiness, making him want to grab her by the mane, pull her forwards and unleash his still growing cock. Surely she could feel it by now, but she still made no comment on it, as if she didn't even realise there was anything there.

Yep. She's totally oblivious.

For my snark, I do enjoy this. I can't wait to see where things go from here.

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Flutter around his nutter, until his mind is nothing but butter, and his body starts to shudder. Oh, how he desires to rut her, have her milk his udder.

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FWIW, I completely agree with @Prudentity: after reading paragraph after paragraph of Spikes fears of his own greed, I started getting a "Alright, I get it. Move on." feeling. However, the slow buildup of tension, especially when Fluttershy was (unknowingly?) grinding down on him, was extremely well-done.

As for Fluttershy? If he hadn't left when he did, she would have been walking funny for the next month.

...Or not at all; she could always fly if walking felt too painful or awkward afterwards.

"I just saw it sitting there, being unloved, and I had to have it. You understand what I'm saying?"

The moment you just want to die to end the suffering!!

Damn, talk about teasing. But you have my full attention. I love this pairing.