FEATURED: 26/11/2018. HiE, parody of the whole "We make ponies feel good". crackfic with plot. Buck is a human soldier that finds himself in Equestria and to survive he uses his only skill outside killing: Massages, and those work great on ponies!
8480947 Thank you! XD I am surprised myself! XD XD A question though: are Read-and-React against the rules here? I have one about Sweetmiss story I wish to also add here to see if you others like it...would it be possible?
8480923 I already know that mines do not work like that, I just preferred to use a "Hollywood Mine" instead of a real one for this story, no matter how tactically-bad it would be to use a mine working like that XD A bit of handwaving, so to speak...I think I can concede myself this tiny bit of freedom by virtue of being the author, am I right? XD
Okay I must admit it, this story is funny. Luna and Discord's poor attempt to capture Buck is the best and Blueblood's accidental misfire made me laugh my ass off, almost making me spill my morning coffee. Perfect!
8481159 By read and react do you mean those stories that are like another story, with your comments spritzed within? I'm pretty sure those are treated as plagiarism here.
8481160 As in the featured section like so many people looked at it and liked it the story got featured. You should put the date in which it got featured will boost readers.
yes! thats right Blackbeard, give in to the adorable pones (or in this case zebra). curious to see what kind of effect his fingers will have on a griffon.
8481554 I modified the short description to look like this:
FEATURED: 10/11/17. HiE, parody of the whole "We make ponies feel good". crackfic with plot. Buck is a human soldier that finds himself in Equestria and to survive he uses his only skill outside killing: Massages, and those work great on ponies!
8481485 in order: Yes...and then: Okay, I am keeping THAT story of mine far away from this place then XD (Consent of the original author or not, I am not gonna risk it! XD)
and Celestia give silent apologies for the heat-wave
*gave
"Must be a pain in the flank being that tall..." Mr. Cake observed amused.
"Honey! Do not body-shame him!" his wife growled angrily.
Wut? Isn't that a sympathetic observation, not a criticism??
Mrs. Cup Cake (Nee Chiffon Swirl) had been brought to him by Miss Cheerilee *once* the older mare's back had
get rid of 'once' and replace it with 'in the past when'. With its current wording it seems that Cheerilee was waiting specifically for Cup Cake to injure herself. Also, you have two spaces between 'back' and 'had'.
"Yes?" the man said worried.
put a comma after 'said'. Maybe replace 'worried' with 'curious' given that Cup Cake has not been described in such a way as to cause him to be worried.
"I think it is time for you to find a nice mare to settle-down, you are not getting any younger." she said simply.
I think you meant 'settle down *with*'. also you don't need the little dash mark between the two words. They're just fine being separate. ------- I know from the comments section of an earlier chapter that English is not your first language, but my inner grammar nazi is going ballistic at what seems like every ten to fifteen seconds. I can't keep reading this because it's driving me nuts. This is a shame because when the mistakes are ignored it's a fun read. But I'm not good at ignoring them. As things stand now if I hadn't seen it myself I'd never have believed this had gotten on the Featured List. Amusing as it is this is hardly a new premise, and it needs a LOT of editing work.
At this point, I don't care if the "Wile E. Coyote and the Road Runner" thing between luna and blackbeard becomes a long running gag. There is somethings in life where more is more
8482371 I use "Huhuhu!" because to me that is the sound of a soft, gentle laugh (classy even!) I do not like "ufufufufu!" because to me is the soft laugh of a hidden pervert "HAhaha!" is for normal laugh "Hohoho!" is for the "belly" laugh or a guffaw kind of laugh. and "Hehehehe!" is the creepy laugh. This is my laughing list, here, have at you! u.u Your move, my friend! ;)
8480947
Thank you! XD I am surprised myself! XD XD
A question though: are Read-and-React against the rules here? I have one about Sweetmiss story I wish to also add here to see if you others like it...would it be possible?
8480423
what do you mean? featured? where?
8480934
8480923
I already know that mines do not work like that, I just preferred to use a "Hollywood Mine" instead of a real one for this story, no matter how tactically-bad it would be to use a mine working like that XD
A bit of handwaving, so to speak...I think I can concede myself this tiny bit of freedom by virtue of being the author, am I right? XD
I'm really enjoying the story, I would suggest a quick once over for editing though.
Okay I must admit it, this story is funny. Luna and Discord's poor attempt to capture Buck is the best and Blueblood's accidental misfire made me laugh my ass off, almost making me spill my morning coffee. Perfect!
this makes me so happy!
Good god this bucking (heh!) hilarious!
A bit too fast paced and lacking in narration for my taste, but the humor hits like an RPG-7 to the face.
8480734
What the fuck
8481160
Your story made it to the feature box.
Just go to the homepage and find the featured section.
8481159
By read and react do you mean those stories that are like another story, with your comments spritzed within? I'm pretty sure those are treated as plagiarism here.
8481160
As in the featured section like so many people looked at it and liked it the story got featured.
You should put the date in which it got featured will boost readers.
yes! thats right Blackbeard, give in to the adorable pones (or in this case zebra). curious to see what kind of effect his fingers will have on a griffon.
8481554
I modified the short description to look like this:
You mean like this?
8481485
in order: Yes...and then: Okay, I am keeping THAT story of mine far away from this place then XD
(Consent of the original author or not, I am not gonna risk it! XD)
8481744
Very good! But also add it in the long one as well.
8481757
Done! XD
First Impressions (Have not read story yet): Is that Keemstar as the cover art?
Just imagine how sad They will be when he grows old and dies Would they start to worship him like a God
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Wow...I have nothing else to say.
*gave
Wut? Isn't that a sympathetic observation, not a criticism??
get rid of 'once' and replace it with 'in the past when'. With its current wording it seems that Cheerilee was waiting specifically for Cup Cake to injure herself. Also, you have two spaces between 'back' and 'had'.
put a comma after 'said'. Maybe replace 'worried' with 'curious' given that Cup Cake has not been described in such a way as to cause him to be worried.
I think you meant 'settle down *with*'. also you don't need the little dash mark between the two words. They're just fine being separate.
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I know from the comments section of an earlier chapter that English is not your first language, but my inner grammar nazi is going ballistic at what seems like every ten to fifteen seconds. I can't keep reading this because it's driving me nuts. This is a shame because when the mistakes are ignored it's a fun read. But I'm not good at ignoring them. As things stand now if I hadn't seen it myself I'd never have believed this had gotten on the Featured List. Amusing as it is this is hardly a new premise, and it needs a LOT of editing work.
Wait (I haven't read a word of this fic, not into clopfics), is Blackbeard in the HiE in this? Or did you just use him as the coverart?
At this point, I don't care if the "Wile E. Coyote and the Road Runner" thing between luna and blackbeard becomes a long running gag. There is somethings in life where more is more
8482445
so basically he becomes the god of fertility
*Snrks*
8482886
Is not a clop fic XD
There are "suggestive images " but nothing too explicit ;)
This is comedy gold. Thank
You so much for doing this.
8483861
Ah.
8483167
But is the stiry centered around Blackbeard tho?
8482371
I use "Huhuhu!" because to me that is the sound of a soft, gentle laugh (classy even!)
I do not like "ufufufufu!" because to me is the soft laugh of a hidden pervert
"HAhaha!" is for normal laugh
"Hohoho!" is for the "belly" laugh or a guffaw kind of laugh.
and "Hehehehe!" is the creepy laugh.
This is my laughing list, here, have at you! u.u
Your move, my friend! ;)
My side my fucking side hurt hahahahahah oh god!!! 😂🤣😂🤣😂
Imagine Maud Pie experiencing one of his massages...
Make it happen. NOW!
8503414
Maaaaaaaaybe!
You are traing to kill me with laughter!!!!!!!!
8503414
are you CRAZY?.... if he makes her smile...i mean truly smile.... THE WORLD WILL EXPLODE