You are a human named Alex, works as an assistant tailor in the Rarity boutique, as well as being a Handyman for his past work experiences.. As more than just his fair share gains.
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He better be prepared.
aside from some grammar issues really nice chapter im sure youl improve in time
First and second chapters are more readable guys/girls!
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thanks to you friend,
It was confusing a certain part because you kept getting the word he and she mixed up it was on was hard to tell who was what gender because of it
you told the story of the bully twice
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thanks for letting me know. they immediately corrected
Good grief the he /she gender confusion breaks the readers enjoyment of the story, maybe find an on line admirer of your work and ask them to proof read.
That was a awesome read expect for the grammar and the genders where all over the place ,and last a lot of it was the same as special spa treatment: human edition .Other then that awesome. read.
ok this whole chapter need to be looked at words out of place he,she,him,his and her is used for all that wrong people gilda, rainbow, rarity and aloe have a lot to as him his and he when it should be She or her alex has a lot of her when it should be he or him this heavy grammar miss placement takes you out of the story and have to re read line multiple times before i can place them
This fic is good
Just needs serious editing
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Yea really needs a good polish.
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This needs editing. Like, badly.
Gilda is a girl bruh! How do you get that wrong? ðŸ˜ðŸ˜‚
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If you haven't noticed, all the pronouns in this story are all over the place making it practically unreadable at several points.
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As mean as it is, this made me choke on my water laughing
Incorrect word : end
Name Error : Gilda