who will he gonna meet next mares?

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Thanks for comments. Yes.. I have need editor. See next

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I agree. I'm looking for a publisher and one is offered but it will take a while. I would like to hear your comments on the future chapters and to know your opinion on improving me also.
Thank you and we will feel the next.

dude... bruh, the grammar in this story makes my mind bleed

also I'm pretty sure Twilight's female not male unless.... oh god no

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Embarassing. by confirming that I use a translator to write unfortunately most of the errors are precisely that I always exchange "him" with "her" and inverse. even when he makes a correction editor. apart from grammatical errors.

When Alex woke up, he realize it was time to get up

*Puts hand on chin and nods*

Hmmm, the obvious has been stated

That was a sweet and awesome read can't wait to see what happens between them ,to them,and who's neat to loin.

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Thanks for your comment. I hope you continue the story as you please and see your other future comments. new chapters have already been updated.
see you

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What? You never woke up outside of your time if of getting up?

After claning themselves and putting on new clothes, Alex gave Twilight a loving kiss, bade her and an embarrassed Spike farewell and started walking down the streets of Ponyville.

Cleaning

"Oh, don't hold back... ah! Do it inside!" She yelled in ecstasy; with a final push he sends themboth over the edge. Twilight's inner walls clinged to his cock like a vice, desperately milking it until Alex unloaded his seed inside her. The human's hips subconsciously continued to push slightly while both were consumed in their respective orgasms, as a mixture of both their juices running along their thighs, dripping on the shower base.

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