You are a human named Alex, works as an assistant tailor in the Rarity boutique, as well as being a Handyman for his past work experiences.. As more than just his fair share gains.
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Nice chapter, but do you have an editor there was quite a few mistakes in this one
it be long and you return.
This was a fun and interesting remaking of this ,I hope Chrysalis ,her sister and both princess sisters join his herd/harem. I vote for all the flower sisters.
I recommend using grammarly, copy what you wrote and paste it in there, it should point out 95% of your errors. If you hope to catch the rest, you will need a proper editor, or spend some time reading stories. Not only once but go over the stories you read at least twice. If you need something that doesn't have much grammatical mistakes, look at my library and go over my 'Great' bookshelf.
Go over these stories slowly and really understand what's happening. Spelling doesn't matter, what matters is the grammar and flow of the story. What words work together? What transitions did the author use? How did the author hook you into the story? What are the things that the author emphasizes on? The theme and message of the story? Was there anything to learn, or was it just pleasure?
You should constantly ask yourself these questions when reading or writing. Spelling is one small part of writing that can be taught to anyone with ease, but the flow is what makes stories great.
Not to mention your getting the male and female terms mixed up. It a bit annoying
Good story
Good setting
Good smut
But seriously, get an editor!
I think NineTailedBeastBall would be your best bet. This sort of thing is his forte
more chapter
Very curious about Bon Bon
Hope you get her in soon
Good story but there a lot of he and her in the wrong place