After a long day of cheering for Rainbow Dash at the 'Best Young Flyers Competition', Fluttershy invites Rainbow Dash back to her house for something to eat, but one thing turns into another as they finish their meal. The night starts with a meal cooked by Fluttershy with the help of angel. (not introduced in the story) After they finish their meal they start talking then things go from one thing to another and soon after they find themselves enjoying a little 'ACTIVITY' that Twilight let them try out. (Once again Twilight is spoken about in 1 or maybe 2 lines of this story.)
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that made no sense
...this looks like a chat-based RP, and not even a particularly well-done one. That is NOT a story. I recommend removing it and typing up an actual story using that as a basis for ideas. At most this is just a vague outline. It shouldn't even be uploaded in this condition. Try again.
Da FUQ did I just read?
Right.....
It's... It was.... It sure have a lot of...
ok, let's say it this way... Look it as a rough diamond... you have to "perfectionate" it, and it WILL be a great story, maybe some... explanations, or declarations, or even talking before.. you know, the "action"?
Dude, Tyke you just earned a ticket to the ass.
Your long lost friend ~ Rick
I just read it and...wtf? Seriously Tikie, you've changd man. It's like Steam chat or some s(YAY)t. You need to work on your fics bro. The more things change, the more they stay the same.
Der ferk did I just read?
82010 long lost friend..... i miss you buddy
please come back man