If you know Applejack, you know her family are the royal crowns of cider. And coffee-like drinks, smoothies, alcoholic drinks, etc. You name it, they can make it, especially if it involves apples.
Not long after Cider Season last year, ponies start crowding around a new store in town. They sell drinks of plenty, some of the flavors exotic or interesting, and worst of all for Applejack, ponies are lining out the door to try some. The business world is suspicious at times, but what if the store is exactly as it seems? Or better?
Whew, finally got around to reading this!
Okay, so it was okay, but I have one big problem with it.
The dialogue is so damn stiff, they don’t sound like people having a natural conversation with each other.
Otherwise, you did great, keep up the good work!