Demons are feared, exiled criminals are hated, and freaks of nature just aren't tolerated. Luna and Celestia happen upon a stallion whose looks can change and shift almost at will, and they discover a past that is more confusing than they had first thought. As they shine a light upon one mystery of this strange pony's past, they find several other, more pressing issues. A social outcast, living in the Everfree Forest for a portion of his life, with his parents killed and himself almost being destroyed when he was exiled, Bacigalupo Esilio is not what one would consider 'likable'... or is he?
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920082 *smiles* Thank you OwwO
You literally have no clue how much your comment means to me :3
You should elaborate more. Some of the learning experiences he had. I found myself lost the second you introduced Luna and Celestia. Great potential as a story, but you need to take your time. Also, a prologue would be awesome, explaining heaven, hell, significant figures, and the importance of his family. All very useful information to a reader before he/she begins to read a story.
949705 Prologue was what I was considering, but most people tend to skip over prologues, so I have to find a way to seed most of the information in as early as possibly in digestable chunks.
Personally, I think a good prologue can make or break a story. I would still like to know what happened between the banishment and meeting the princesses.
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Ahh, now your delving into spoilers~ Mostly mundane things, bullying and picking on, but there are a few, somewhat larger chunks that will be revealed later on.
Ah, a shame. I trust you have it all storyboarded?
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As in actually out on paper?
Nope :P
In my skull waiting to be written down?
Yes. :3