Matthias Martin lost much when fate dropped him into the heart of Equestria but thanks to a certain trio of princesses he's gained much in return. However, he finds himself wanting more and is afraid of what he'll have to give up in exchange.
I was listening to the upbeat faster version of Simple and Clean while reading this chapter. I thought it fit pretty nicely. I wonder if it would fit as well with the slower more somber version. I'm gonna test that when the chapter isn't as fresh in my mind.
Either way, this chapter was amazing! Keep on keeping on!
8451825 Thanks for looking out for me! Jewel is a unit of measurement I've seen authors use on this site to measure the work energy of magic. I figured it would be a good pun to have May face palm over.
Comment posted by ThirdSound deleted Sep 28th, 2017
This chapter brings a lot of warmth into my heart. Not that it was cold to begin with, but more good feelings can't hurt. So much reassuring, and that banter... ah, that banter was great. I wonder how long will it take for Matthias to be able to sleep properly. It will be a lot of work, but Luna will be there for him.
Speaking of Luna, she certainly knew how to completely derail his thoughts Then again, unexpected kisses from good looking girls tend to do that to a guy.
Poor May, though. Now he has no idea whether to be excited or not. One thing is for certain, however; he will definitely be nervous. The way Luna spoke all of those things... she knew exactly what she was doing, didn't she? I wouldn't put it past her, and even more so if she felt as close to him as we've seen in this story.
Ok, now that I've re-read chapter 2, I can get started on a proper comment for this.
Wow, this is getting really good. I don't know if you're simply going to "Noodle Incident" your way through May's time with the Diamond Dogs, but I hope we'll still get to see some flashbacks of when May first arrived. Also, I wonder what Celestia would think if she knew about Luna kissing May, and if we'll see Twilight soon. This was a pretty good chapter my dude. _________________________
How long was I out,” he asked
Add a question mark
satisfied sigh from Luna:
Do you you need a colon here?
if it were truly the case that the arcane holds no sway over you, then how is it you appear, even partially, in a simulacrum formed entirely of magic.”
Question mark again
every part of her body:
Do you need this colon either?
breaths to further help even him out:
Now I'm just wondering if I need to Google this and if you're using it correctly.
holding onto him that much tighter:
Do you know where you learned the rule for this? Because seriously, a period could definitely work in all the scenarios, but I'd rather learn something new if you can teach me.
petting and reassurances:
around him snuggly:
down to Matthias:
leaving his lips quite exposed:
anxious little princess:
obvious thought struck her:
from the shell-shocked human:
pushing her hips into his:
trademark azure flame:
she felt like flaunting for a bit:
Nothing much to say here. Either these are all right, or all wrong. I hope you can tell me, I'm very interested.
Wow...jusy wow. Celestia and Luna really care for May (wants more in Luna's case as far as I can see), but he feels he doesn't deserve their affection. I wonder where Twilight is. Looking forward to more.
I do read the story, but it's been a while since the author last updated it. With new stories and long times between chapter updates, one tends to forget about what they read in the previous entries. I'm one of those readers, unfortunately, plus with other things happening irl.
Damn man you must be fighting against a horde of demons taking this long to update you trying to find the tri-force as well maybe the infinity stones ,chaos emeralds, hell even dragons ball Might grant my wish to ::See the story continue
I was elated to edit.
Nice chapter and also FIRST COMMENT YEAAAAAH!! #WhereDaBulkBicepsEmoji
Ooooooh, Luna gettin that head start
You know, when I first read this, it made me think of that car scene from A Goofy Movie.
Pure awesomeness, can't wait for the next chapter.
I saw "Matthias Martin"and I was all, "no shit, the Matthias? As in the heir to Martin the Warrior Matthias of Redwall Matthias? In Equestria?!"
Then I saw the HiE tag and was all, "Well, that's no mouse warrior hero..."
But you made it into the read it later pile based on your blurb, so there's that?
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yes the continent of earth.
had like the worst fukin' day
but this damn sure makes it better
love your story
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Glad it could help
this updates to slowly but is amazing.
upgraded to favorites if you already arent.
YAY! We back.
I've waited a very long time for this, but it's 1 o'clock in the morning. So it's going to be an after lunch read.
Can't wait :)
I was listening to the upbeat faster version of Simple and Clean while reading this chapter. I thought it fit pretty nicely. I wonder if it would fit as well with the slower more somber version. I'm gonna test that when the chapter isn't as fresh in my mind.
Either way, this chapter was amazing! Keep on keeping on!
Joule
I like this story.
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Thanks for looking out for me! Jewel is a unit of measurement I've seen authors use on this site to measure the work energy of magic. I figured it would be a good pun to have May face palm over.
And piece by slow piece, the house of cards come tumbling down...
But you know what the best part of falling apart is? You get to use the resulting mess to make something better.
This chapter brings a lot of warmth into my heart. Not that it was cold to begin with, but more good feelings can't hurt.
So much reassuring, and that banter... ah, that banter was great. I wonder how long will it take for Matthias to be able to sleep properly.
It will be a lot of work, but Luna will be there for him.
Speaking of Luna, she certainly knew how to completely derail his thoughts
Then again, unexpected kisses from good looking girls tend to do that to a guy.
Poor May, though. Now he has no idea whether to be excited or not. One thing is for certain, however; he will definitely be nervous.
The way Luna spoke all of those things... she knew exactly what she was doing, didn't she? I wouldn't put it past her, and even more so if she felt as close to him as we've seen in this story.
Ok, now that I've re-read chapter 2, I can get started on a proper comment for this.
Wow, this is getting really good. I don't know if you're simply going to "Noodle Incident" your way through May's time with the Diamond Dogs, but I hope we'll still get to see some flashbacks of when May first arrived. Also, I wonder what Celestia would think if she knew about Luna kissing May, and if we'll see Twilight soon. This was a pretty good chapter my dude.
_________________________
Add a question mark
Do you you need a colon here?
Question mark again
Do you need this colon either?
Now I'm just wondering if I need to Google this and if you're using it correctly.
Do you know where you learned the rule for this? Because seriously, a period could definitely work in all the scenarios, but I'd rather learn something new if you can teach me.
Nothing much to say here. Either these are all right, or all wrong. I hope you can tell me, I'm very interested.
End quotation mark
Glorious new chapter!
That ending
Like this 20sec mark
>Anthro
>Herd
Delet this. REEEEEEEEEE
Wow...jusy wow. Celestia and Luna really care for May (wants more in Luna's case as far as I can see), but he feels he doesn't deserve their affection. I wonder where Twilight is.
Looking forward to more.
More you glorious bastard, MORE!!!
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i so agree give us more this is so fun and funny
Sneaky little Dracula reference. Very nice Renfield lines.
What's wrong with Matthias? Why is he having random bouts of mental panic attacks and breakdowns?
Siddhartha Mortality Quotes?
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you.. really dont read the story do you?
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I do read the story, but it's been a while since the author last updated it. With new stories and long times between chapter updates, one tends to forget about what they read in the previous entries. I'm one of those readers, unfortunately, plus with other things happening irl.
That was another awesome and sweet read, He need to make that herd soon.
Damn this is a fantastic story.
Just awesome.
I so love your art - and its not only a written story, its a symphony of words.
And the references ahhh so good
Hope to see more soon
Hope this gets an update soon. It's awesome.
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Don't worry it's happening. I won't promise a definite release date but I am working on the next chapter every chance I get.
Want to give it a chance but for the most part o hate anthems, maybe after your done....maybe the comments section certainly like its.
Damn man you must be fighting against a horde of demons taking this long to update you trying to find the tri-force as well maybe the infinity stones ,chaos emeralds, hell even dragons ball Might grant my wish to ::See the story continue
Are you dead?
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It's coming soon. Thanks for your patience
For writing of your caliber? I'll wait as long as it takes my friend.
The redwall series was one of my Fave too, Martin the warrior of Redwall Abby an' lil Mathias taking up his mantle later on.