Flash Sentry never thought that he and Timber Spruce could become friends. Surprisingly Flash begins falling for Timber and he's shocked. When something happens to Flash, Timber helps him get through it and their connection grows even stronger.
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This is... New.
If I could suggest one thing though: Space pragraphs out a little more. Right now it looks like a wall of text, which is a tad intimidating.
Other than that, not half bad. Maybe not even a quarter bad. Heck, even an eighth might be pushing it.
Still pretty cool. Some of the dialogue is a little clunky, like Sunset's "Let's go do work" but still fine.
Maybe it's my imagination, but Timber was giving some creepy vibes this chapter. Just to settle my head, how old is he in this story? I can't remember if you said it, but now suddenly it seems weird that he is dating Twilight (and soon flash) but he himself is not in school. The obvious answer is that he's the same age and just either dropped out or never went (home taught). Just some clarification would be nice.
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The story is set soon after The Legend of Everfree and they aren't that clear on how Timber does his schooling, I'm guessing he's around the same age as Flash and Twilight though. I'd say in this story he's being home schooled at this point in time.
8158056 That makes sense. Normally that would be my assumption but it was 1:00 AM where I was so my brain wasn't functioning properly.
hello...just wanted I have been reading this story since past two chapters. also gave an up vote on it. there's not a lot of male x male equestria girls stories or this pairing. I have a story plan to publish it's gay spike ship & a beautiful story. follow me if you want to.