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Diving Into a Good Book

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Galaxy Knight

Galaxy Knight #1 · Mar 30th, 2017 · 1 · ·

Pretty vanila stuff. You need to work on your formating a litle bit, like starting a new line when a different character starts talking, but other than that it's a pretty solid fic. Good job.

SeventhHeaven

SeventhHeaven #2 · Mar 30th, 2017 · · ·

8060418 Tried doing that the first time, but the story was rejected due to "sake of readibility".

Thank you, however.

Blackpaw

Blackpaw #3 · Apr 22nd, 2017 · · ·

Not bad for a starter. Went a little fast and I agree with Galaxy Knight, the formatting needs work. Flesh out some of the details and take some more time describing the scenes and you would have a great story.

SeventhHeaven