After graduating first in his class at a hair styling academy, Zephyr Breeze is more confident than ever that he can win over Rainbow Dash. Can her human friend help her find a solution to get the message across to the stubborn stallion?
8236153 I think you're right. That's the main reason I stopped the story when I did. When I rewrote the most recent chapter I added a few hints that would help with his continuity if I ever make a sequel. This whole story turned out to be more slice-of-lifey than anything else and I think that's it's biggest problem.
8264834 I was watching The Dark Night Rises when I was writing that section, didn't get banned. I don't recommend reading the paste just because it's a sloppier version of what I'm posting here. There won't be any major changes to the plot though so if you want: https://pastebin.com/sngxxa0W
8273905 Thanks. I spent a lot of time thinking about how I wanted to portray Dash and I sat on the finished chapter for about a week making minor adjustments before I felt comfortable with it. Glad you like it.
8820170 And now, I know. My work here is done. *Dons a hat and begins trotting off into the sunset, before suddenly realizing there are still two more chapters.* Holy smoking-hot wingjobs, bat-pone! We’re not quite through yet!!!!
Okay, maybe I missed a biology class, but what exactly happened to Dash when she forgot to go to the bathroom? Did she piss or leak milk or what? I'm so lost lol.
Some women do something popularly known as squirting when they orgasam hard enough, there is probably a medical term for it but I don't care to take the time to look it up.
Often people confuse it for peeing, but it is basically just the same fluid that is in the vagina all the time, it does however come out of the urethra which is why people sometimes think it's pee
awww
My god you improved the hell out of this chapter. Love it, so much detail, so much dash! You write her so well.
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I think you're right. That's the main reason I stopped the story when I did. When I rewrote the most recent chapter I added a few hints that would help with his continuity if I ever make a sequel. This whole story turned out to be more slice-of-lifey than anything else and I think that's it's biggest problem.
8264834
I was watching The Dark Night Rises when I was writing that section, didn't get banned. I don't recommend reading the paste just because it's a sloppier version of what I'm posting here. There won't be any major changes to the plot though so if you want: https://pastebin.com/sngxxa0W
8273905
Thanks. I spent a lot of time thinking about how I wanted to portray Dash and I sat on the finished chapter for about a week making minor adjustments before I felt comfortable with it. Glad you like it.
Excelent chapter. Characters were executed perfectly. Wcenes were writen immersivly. Good job.
I liked the extra part on the end. Little conversations like that are what i think truly separates a good fic from a great fic. So sweet and loving.
I love it
aw come on! we have echidnas here! it's not some kind of super-obscure-magical beast
...unknowledgable swine!
This line
All the way to this line
I was like this
https://m.This Is an over exaggeration
I will never be able to look at Vanilla Ice cream the same ever again.
8820170
And now, I know. My work here is done. *Dons a hat and begins trotting off into the sunset, before suddenly realizing there are still two more chapters.* Holy smoking-hot wingjobs, bat-pone! We’re not quite through yet!!!!
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Great story.
I love the reference
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Later....
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Okay, maybe I missed a biology class, but what exactly happened to Dash when she forgot to go to the bathroom? Did she piss or leak milk or what? I'm so lost lol.
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Some women do something popularly known as squirting when they orgasam hard enough, there is probably a medical term for it but I don't care to take the time to look it up.
Often people confuse it for peeing, but it is basically just the same fluid that is in the vagina all the time, it does however come out of the urethra which is why people sometimes think it's pee