After graduating first in his class at a hair styling academy, Zephyr Breeze is more confident than ever that he can win over Rainbow Dash. Can her human friend help her find a solution to get the message across to the stubborn stallion?
8396670 8390068 8277641 8274317 8274175 Thanks. These last few chapters are the ones I felt needed the most rewriting. I'm glad to see the extra effort paid off. And as to the added afterglow dialogue: it always annoyed me that the majority of stories cut off the interaction right after the deed is done. That seems to focus the story (or at least the chapter) on the scene itself rather than the development of the relationship.
Ive just read this entire thing up till this chapter back to back and I love it. Its been a long time since there has been a well written heartwarming Dash x anon story. Cant wait for more.
“I fought off Rarity and Cloudchaser and that gay stallion down the street that runs the fruit stand…” Ohh so that's why he always gave you a good deal, “…and a bunch of other mares who I can’t think of their stupid names now
She stays silent for a moment while you work your fingers past her feathers down to the hot bare skin of her wings, ”I don’t care as long as you stay stocked with those honey-oat granola bars,” She replies earnestly. She pulls her head back a bit to bury her muzzle in your hair and take a deep breath.
That’s what this has all been about: she’s playing the long game trying to get her hooves on me lucky honey-oat bars! Crafty breakfast thieving she-demon. Lol
Literally just finished reading the last chapter.
Well, time to continue.
i hope they have foals!
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Super adorable read! Perfect balance of fluff, funny, and conflict. Keep it up! :)
*your
*probably (this might have been on purpose, but authors generally don't actually spell out mistakes in a character's pronunciation)
*definitely
*has a
*might be
*and
*the Wonderbolt
*it's
*is it
That's all I have time for at the moment.
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Thanks for the finds! That's what I get for proofreading my own stuff.
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Every mans dream, straight or gay.
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Thanks. These last few chapters are the ones I felt needed the most rewriting. I'm glad to see the extra effort paid off. And as to the added afterglow dialogue: it always annoyed me that the majority of stories cut off the interaction right after the deed is done. That seems to focus the story (or at least the chapter) on the scene itself rather than the development of the relationship.
Strap in, the next chapter will be the last.
This is honestly one of my new favorite stories on this site
This is going on my favorites for sure
Ive just read this entire thing up till this chapter back to back and I love it. Its been a long time since there has been a well written heartwarming Dash x anon story. Cant wait for more.
Gotta say, this is the best Dash story on the site.
It’s so visceral and alive!
Top notch work!
This. This makes this my favorite chapter so far.
Wait...a gay stallion that runs a fruit cart? Did you intentionally make that joke or was it completely coincidental?
That’s what this has all been about: she’s playing the long game trying to get her hooves on me lucky honey-oat bars! Crafty breakfast thieving she-demon. Lol