Part artist, Part writer , Part student....All brony....XD
His most beloved, slain....His most trusted friend, has betray him...His land now besiege but corruption and death....will Jino perform his duty? or will he forsake and do what is right? He now stahds at a crosspath of fate....left to decide what he must abandon do walk the path he chosses.....( Read Chapter1 to the current chapter to familarise...)
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Since this is my 1st ever story i need some comment about my story....i dont mind critiscsm or insult ....cos i really need to improve
I'm going to have to go ahead and assume that english is not your first language.
45921 English is indeed not my 1st language....at least now i know what i must do to improve anyway
Do plz leave a honest comment after you read.....help a fellow brony to improve so that next chapter would be even better
Leoheartxx2 chapter 1 was a bit hard to understand becase the dialog was fizzy chapter 2 was wonderful chapter 3 was decent in other words this is a very good stoey keep up the good work!
Why must the solution always be singing.
50966Thanks for the feedback.....appriciate it much!!
50966Thanks for the feedback.....appriciate it much!!
51165 Singing it all that bad....besides its still incomplete....so do keep ur hopes high....xD
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What he said. You must pay attention to the grammar and the typing. Even more so if english is not your first language.
Ya this im aware of this a week ago......i actually hadnt got the time to fix chapter 1......but thanks anyway for the feedback......
To be honest, I would have dropped this fanfic as this is bit hard to read but I already forgive you due to your situation and that English is your second language. Keep writing and improve! Be sure to find really good proof-reader, and study the rules of English.