Hello ^^ my first pony story, and to help myself along im using my oldest character to help figure stuff out. I have read and seen the episodes of the show, but if I get characters wrong let me know and ill fix stuff up ^^. In fact, any help at all would be a huge aid for me ^_^. Im not a very good writer grammar or spelling wise, so if ya see any problems let me know.
Anyone who wants to help by proof reading or will help me with the Mane 6 please leave a comment or send me a message. The first chapter does not feature them at all until the ending but I plan to have them around later in the story. I hope you enjoy reading the next adventure (first Story adventure) of Alexander Renard.
Chapters (8)
Bit rushed, some spelling mistakes, but all in all, it was good.
44636 only rushed cause I kept getting interrupted but glad to have a positive comment thanks ^^. Yeah I took my time going through with spell checker.. but it must have missed some X_X. Glad to hear ya liked it though ^^ OH before anyone asks, I know I left Alexander's description out, but that's going to be explained in my next chapter.
Nice.witch story is this a "spin off" on? And where can i read it? (your other story). Good story. Keep rocking brony!
44764 Spin off of other rp and Castlevania. Alexander is a castlevania character, Ark is from Sonic adventure two. Zachary is a second rp character who has his own set of story lines.. But if Spin off is related to another story here then I shoudl probably remove that button.. LOL. I was thinking it meant spinoff of other stuff not a spin off of a Story here.. This is generally the first Alex story I have written for a long time since most of his stuff is done in RP set up. Oh yeah Rarity should be appearing soon as well.
Hah, Miss Sparkly Horn, what a name. Nice to see you writing this, definetly interasted in the next chapter!
Well these two chapters where mostly set in my head. For a story like this you had the arrival, and the reaction parts. Thought most of the second was my head going into RP mode. I am pretty sure I got the characters right, but yeah, gotta plan and think up stuff ^_^
yep planning some crazy stuff.. lie Alex practicing magic. Maybe accidentally blowing up a house or two. 
♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
Seeing the word Alexander, I thought Alexander from the bad ending of Amnesia: The Dark Descent
I was wrong
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YEp and now the randomness begins to be unveiled. Great fun typing out that Convo between Alex and D.
Basically D Alex is his Evil double, sort of a mix between doppleganger and clone. Whatever Alex learns, D Can learn and Vise Versa. Sorta works like a second personality, except is a whole other being as well. Both feel and share pains plus flashes of emotion.
though the best part was adding in the 4th wall deadpooling D-Alex does. Alex is also aware of his existence as a Video game character, but doesn't really care much. "Every person exists in every reality in someway. Be it a made up being or a real person." Was his response. D on the other hand just loves to poke fun of and drive Alex nuts By 4th wall beating. ^_^.
bacon?
MEAT EATING PONIES!
I'm a unicorn, U JELLY!
AH the Bacon yeah i thought that might get some replies but there is a logical explanation. Spike is a dragon and they are omnivores. Also its obviouse Alex isn't exactly a pony so while Ponies are Herbivores, Alex and spike still need to consume meat. So strangly enough that's the least random thing in the story post XD.
(Remember at the beginning They saw Alex while he was shifting out of his slandered form *that of a kitsurian: a MAn with fox ears and a tail* into his current unicorn form. Its possible Fluttershy *who was the first one to see him* recognized the Fox like form and thus Alex's need to eat meat is revealed.)
While it can be argued that spike mostly eats gems, he has been shown eating a variety of other thins like apples and meat at one point if I remember right.
^_^ glad people seem to still like my story, I was kinda afraid the over random in this chapter was a bit over the top. (though Alex and D are always over the top, least by this point they aren't in combat all the time.)
A random possible addition to the story, or the intro to a whole other story. Let me know what you guys think ^_^.
Interesting. I am sure that if I saw one of my friends as a pony I would be more than a little startled. Although this guy thinking it is a dream would make sense of that little problem. Is there a reason why the person, I cannot find a name for them, is not ponified and Alex is?
Alexander has always changed forms due to having the power of Adaptation. By landing in any new world he shifts form depending on his environment. Of all characters Alexander is the most able to adapt being able to communicate with anything capable of speech of some sort. as well as changing to a form better for the area. The character shown in this perspective is Zachary the author AKA me. Since I don't have the power to adapt like Alex I was unable to talk to anyone. (Which i'm surprised not many do in these stories. to be honest.) With all the forms he take and worlds hes been Spotting Alex after you know him (or created him) is easy no matter what form hes in.
Oh and I left out the name intentionally as its a first person perspective. But yep that's me, Zachary, more freaked by the fact he has all those items then hanging out with Alex (which happens a lot in my dreams). If I continue this bit I will show a freak out when I realize its not in fact a dream. Though once I had seen Zacora it became obviouse.. and since this is an exact present time me, (since he even talks about how hes writing the story he just fell into.) he already knew Alex was around.
Can he use his pokeballs on ponies?
No because they already have monsters inside lol. Interesting question though...
Also.. while making the last chapter.. I had thoughts of Game screens, would you guys like me to make RPG like screens for some moments in the story line?
BAAAAAAAAAACOOOOOOOON!!!! PINKIE!!! LET ME THROUGH THE FOURTH WALL!!! PLEASE!! I NEED BACON!!!
My fluttershys. Take them all.
AS for the game picture idea id posted about before.. I'm thinking of doing it Final fantasy style. An homage to older games. The idea solidified after playing some of the Final fantasy 1-2 dawn of souls game for GBA. I just need to find some Pony sprites in that style of art. If anyone can lend a hand finding or making them id really appreciate it ^^ anyway, enjoy the new chapter
As well as the look inside the bad guys mind.
Oh uh please don't get mad at the bit insulting the Mane 6 that completely underplays them.. I don't want to make anyone upset, its just how PD views them all. IT has great schemes but has a problem with over simplifying people. It doesn't see things like Rainbow Dash's loyalty or Twilight's brilliance.
Next chapter has the crew enter their first dungeon, and I plan it to be one HELL of a doozy. ^_^
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When I saw the word alexander, I instantly thought amnesia.
I was wrong.
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ok now that I have seen two comment about that... what is this amnesia thing anyway? Is it a game? A story? what?