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Okay....WHAT??
I'm speechless, for more than one reason...
44679 erm what reasons exactly?
not bad... ah screw it... MOTHER FUCKING AWSOME!!!!!
44683 Thank you so much, I love hearing feedback, don't forget to check out my other stuff!
You had me confused when you started talking about hands. It took me a moment to realize you were using Anthro Ponies.
Also...Fluttershy isn't very...Fluttershy here. Not really sure I like how you portrayed both her body and her personality. She's the Moe of the series everyone knows their kind isn't busty. They're small, meek, and adorable with really big pretty eyes.
Oh, and to be honest, the sex was rather generic, and there were a number of grammatical errors.
44702 Yeah this is one of my early crappy works, the later clopfics I've posted are a slight improvement.
did you make betreyal cause if you did i love you also you should make a sequel to dat
44742 Yes I made it indeed, hmm i have thought about a sequel before, but i'm not sure how it would go, however i shall consider it. Thank you for your feedback though!
I couldn't fell much enthusiasm, but it was nice (:
Grammar dude. You really have to work on that. I read these because the writers are usually very enthusiastic about what they're writing. This felt very generic, though, and the descriptions were a little simplistic and crude. Also, literary pornography is written because it can be much less corny and isn't limited by attractive people with no acting talent. Try to make it more believable. Your dialogue is almost identical to the script of a video porno. Don't get me wrong, it was pretty good, but there's a lot to work on.
55492 This is an old clopfic anyway, now that I look back at it, it does seem a little trashy compared to what I write now.
again i find my self saying this i envy firestorm but i must say i love your work and hope reading more yet again
is this human or pony?.........because you use terms for both
339703 they're anthro
339710okay....shoulda mentioned that in description though
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371118 Lol thanks. This story is old though!
373266do I look like I care?
374827 I was just saying, it would have been better compared to how I write now
375528the answer would still be
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cuz you're awesome!
376629 aww thanks!
FLUTTERSHY ISN'T A VIRGIN?!?!?!?
To be honest, I think I like this one a bit more than the remake! 
Well, I absolutely LOVED IT!
Oh yeah! I almost forgot! *likey like like!*
Well written, enjoyable, fapable and all round good, you have won my internets
1376648 If you loved that, you should see the remastered one!
1380395 I only just looked at my noticacations now lol... So, remastered one you say? sounds good :D
Want to know something one of my OC are called Fire sotrm and he also likes Fluttershy
1543088 What does he look like?
1543590
Unicorn
Carpenter cutie mark
A fire coloured mane
red coat
red eyes
Wel that was......... direct.
I am not impressed i hope that was just clop for clops sake cause if it isn't it's crap, if it is all it needs is a little work.i
4646671 Nah it's crap. It's old as fuck lol.