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I believe you sir, have just won the prize for best Pinkie clopfic I have ever read
889319 aw shucks! I don't deserve that much!
889331 Don't sell yourself short man! It's been a bit since I last read one, but this is definitely the best Pinkieclop I've ever read.
889351 then thanks! That makes it all worth it!
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889368 I've seen this before many times! Hawt Pinkie pie! :P
889368
Excuse me while I go and try to avoid too much thought on that one...
Too late! Dang that is a sexy Pinkie image!
889368
I know what i want for Christmas
whoa... sweet!
889368 Well didn't see that coming (LOL pun)
I really enjoyed your depiction of Pinkie Pie. Some writers make her sound too smart or too slutty, but you captured the bubbly, helpful personality of Pinkie.
I feel that improvements could be made on your writing style, however.
For example:
"She squirted all over his member, as it milked him hard of his seed. Her femness trapped it inside, as she became full of cum spilling it on the floor."
There's some issues with those sentences. The first sentence has a 'him' and two 'his' words. I'd use varied words to describe your characters. In Big Mac's case, 'The stallion,' 'Big Mac,' 'the red pony,' 'the work horse' or 'the apple farmer' all work great, in addition to 'him' and 'his.'
I'm not a fan of the word femness, but that's just personal preference.
'Becoming full of cum' and 'spilling it onto the floor' might work better as separate sentences.
A possible rewrite could be:
"Her feminine folds milked Big Mac of his seed as she squirted all over his member. Pinkie trapped the stallion's payload within her moist marehood, until the sheer amount of baby batter became too much for her hot oven. The mare gasped as a river of cum spilled out of her onto the floor."
Hope these ideas help! Keep writing!
Those anit cupcakes...
They CUMcakes!!
20/5 for clop pinkie!! LOVE IT!
890372 damn that's useful. Thanks for the info!
890866
You're welcome.
Feel free to check out this blog post for more writing tips.
http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/44151
One word. Hot. That is all.
Drugs are bad umkay
Clop and 4th wall breakage? I've never seen it done!!! Game Over! YOU WIN!!!
Wait, how'd she know we were reading?! FOURTH WALL! FOURTH WALL!
Oh god... why did you make this?
Oh god... why did I read this?
But... Wow...
891913 south park
Dude, that was just... dude.
Congrats man. Congrats.
893489 Why thank you!
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895485 I see what you did there!
893291
Yes but that he intention was that you were on drugs when you wrote this!
At first i was like
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And then it was like
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Eh, it was alright. I'm incredibly biased against this pairing due to another story, but it was alright.
YOU HAVE SAVED YOUR WORLD YET AGAIN
Before:
"We'll bang, OK?"
"Eeyup!"
After:
"Wait, we were FILMING this?"
"Eeyup."
"Okay, Pinkie. Don't panic. Don't panic..."
*Click*
"LIVESTREAM?"
"Eeyup!"
The video cuts out after that. Neither one of the pair was ever seen again.
889373
Um...wow. I just wanted to give a shoutout to you theorangefox. You lad have made one of the best Pinkie Pie clopfics ever made in the history of the My Little Pony : Friendship is Magic fandom. Ill be honest, and in all do respect I have been debating if i should 'watch' you, as a writer. You have written some of my favorites, such as "Beach Heat"(btw. you were TOO modest in that description, it was a great read.) and I think the other was called "The Very Best Remedy : Remastered." Something of the sort...
To put this in 'leeman'[is that it? or is it 'lamane'? Idk (._.)] terms, you are a great writer and have earned yourself another follower on FimFiction.net.
Keep up those clops pal!
962067 Wow, that literally blew me away! One of the best pinkie clopfics? That's twice I've heard that now! Thanks so much!
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Anytime pal, its good to be modest, but you have a gift so its okay to give yourself a pat on the back every once in a while!
Brave Jump!
965404 I just don't like showing off really.
965997
Listen mate, in all do respect its not bragging, its good to be aware of your talents. Need I remind you of the Friendshp is Magic episode, "Boast Busters"? That was bragging. Be humble but be aware of your talents!
HOT
well at least this isnt my amen account....
wait
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i forgot to say...
Great story! keep it up!
1808584 Hey it's you again, thanks for the reading!
Alright, the concept of this made me curious… let’s see. Normal format: Active. Commence read, proofread, and review!
… “Big mac failed” – BIG MAC FAILED!!!... Oh wait, ‘mac’ needs to be capitalized.
… “Pinkie pie who was” – Like before, Pinkie Pie is her name, thus, ‘Pie’ should be capitalized.
… “mouth.
“Oh” – This part is actually only spaced a single time, when you seem to use double-spacing all the other times. Just a heads-up.
… “liked being licked that.” – There should be a ‘like’ between ‘licked’ and ‘that’.
… “his legnth, and” – ‘legnth’ should be ‘length’.
… “watch Pinkie pie,” – ‘pie’ should be capitalized.
… “rested his forehooves either side” – This should actually be ‘on either side’, or ‘on both sides’.
… “their orgasm’s reached” – This should actually be ‘orgasms’, since it’s talking about both of their orgasms.
… “on Pinkie pie so” – Again, ‘pie’ should be capitalized.
Pretty solid, though I found it a bit... I dunno, 'simple'. I guess I've just been reading too many Big Mac fics lately with him getting more and more dialogue. Kinda felt strange reading one where he's not the 'main focus', though he's definitely in character, and that's obviously the case for Pinkie Pie. There's just one problem: Who's gonna clean this up? Mr. and Mrs. Cake?
"Yeah, Pinkie, you got a bit of frosting on... our entire kitchen."
Might as well end it with this:
Listened to this from Dr. Clopfic
Synopsis for it sounds silly, but it's surprisingly sensual after that start. #o.o#
Goodness...
Oh, and I finished right before hearing "I'mma frost the cake!" which made me laugh hysterically
2292990 Yeah I get a lot of feedback on how funny my clopfics tend to be. Despite me not being a funny person, or writer for that matter!
I've read three of your stories so far, and I've noticed that each was a clopfic. Do you have any that are not clop?
2363349 nnnnnnnnnnnnnnope!
Wait; so this is a clopfic based off the picture series?
2727457 Yup. Most of my fics are based off pics!
2727529 Two words:
EP-IC