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DoctorDoguu
A Mexican fantasy writer, the only one for that matter. Also the most loliliscious writer in the Western market.
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good work it was good when it lasted i hope there is a sequel on the way
7670835 There might be a few. But I don't think I will make them as long, or good, as the first one. Well, the qualiy might be the same, but the length much likely won't.
7673968 take you time to write. and in terms of length i prefer at the minimum 5 chaps because i enjoy reading the chars develop and it takes space
good luck
7670835 The first part of the sequel is out by the way. I think I understand why some people release episodic games now. You release the parts you already have done and then release the rest in updates.
Interesting opening, though the rhyme seemed a little off.
7816022 A new reader. Now that is what I call a Heartswarming present! RNGesus and Santa.exe must be smiling on me today :)
love this story
This is.both confusing and cringy.
9162832
It is much better than the usual fanfic. But don't worry. I have worked hard to improve my writing based on actual criticism of my work (Such as pointing at plotholes and structural flaws). This was my first attempt at publishing something, and as such it helped me improve.
9167938
Dude you need to find a editor, I would volunteer but I already have enough on my plate.
9167974
Nah. No need for an editor. I got my own talent and advice from people with more experience. Trust me, it has been long enough to know what I am doing. I guess you have not read the release date. Not to mention editors tend to be less than useless when addressing things that some might hold as politically incorrect.
Sincerely, while I appreciate proofreaders and critiques, I detest editors. They tend to butcher good works because "It won't sell."
9168071
You as truly a dolt if that's what you think an editor does. They are suppose to fix grammar and plot holes. Trust me, for the I've been doing it long enough to know. All they change is incorrect grammar using rules you are meant to know, words to better fit the mode and tone. I would suggest adding body motion and language to make the character feel alive instead of ridged. If editors butcher good works, then why is Fallout: Equestria - Make Love Not War a good story? Why do professional writers use editors? You are truly ignorant and dense, you said this story was better than most; in reality though it is absolutely garbage. I have no clue what is even meant to be going on. Maybe you see that as an opinion, and frankly I don't care. You're arrogant.
9168603
I see through your ruse. You wanted me to hire you as a editor.
Well. I am not hiring someone whose grammar is lower than mine and believes he is superior to me as an editor. I severely dislike editors because I have seen what they do to professionals, and I am no longer the amateur I was when I wrote this fanfic.
BTW, I have no interest in Fallout Equestria, I find it derivative and cliché. I suppose there is an ulterior motive to your mention of it.
This story is better than most, and I got more talent in the tip of my nose than you got in all your body.
I accept critique and advice on how to improve my writing, but I do not take veiled attempts at self promotion through insults and non constructive criticism lightly.
9168780
You have personal preference that I care little for.
I wasn't trying to be your editor, I said "you need one"; I don't have time for you (if you realize what my second message said) nor your pathetic insults. I was not promoting myself; no where close to it.
I was not the editor for "Fallout: Equestria - Make Love Not War", look at the editor's name of said story.
As for my talent... you have no idea who I am and yet you resort to such a inadequate insult. Quit being conceited.
One question for you, where did I say I was superior?
9168817
You compare my work with your personal preferences but disregard mine.
I do not need an editor, and coming from someone with such abysmal grammar, orthography, and writing skills feels insulting to some extent.
I didn't mention you were an editor for anyone. I just stated it seemed suspicious to bring that up.
I need not to know who you are to see your lack of talent. I just need to read your words. You lack the skill necessary to write, and use personal preferences as criticism. At no moment I have seen you pointing at grammatical or composition flaws in this work (Which does have some, but I decided not to correct them since this story is not for profit).
You didn't say you were superior, but called my work "Absolute garbage", and that I take as an offense or an affirmation of you being capable of creating something better, which based on your wording you are not.
I am not arrogant, and I AM a professional. I am confident in my own capabilities after showing my most recent work to more experienced people. Not everyone needs an editor, and in fact I get the feeling anyone who hired you as an editor in particular should ask for a refund.
While I recognize the flaws in this story, its slow pacing in particular, I actually got some proper criticism of it back during its release period. Criticism which helped me improve and go beyond what I could do back then. Criticism which has allowed me to create things far superior to this simple fanfic or anything in this place.
I wonder if maybe it is not the structural aspects of this story, but the plot itself that bothers you so much. If that is the case, let me tell you something, that is why I reject editors. They firmly believe they are helping while projecting their own position on things. That, sir, is the difference between a proofreader and an editor. And I do have a few reliable proofreaders who inform me when there is a plot hole or a word repeats too often within the same chapter.
And, compared to this piece which I released without reading it myself before publishing, all my latest works have been thoroughly reviewed to increase my quality. Of course, you won't find them in an MLP fanfic site since they are not MLP fanfics, and you won't find them for free.
9169039
You know what, I don't care anymore. I have better things to do; things I actually care about instead of arguing with an incompetent person.
9169522
Sincerely, my long replies are proof of my verbal competence. After all, if I couldn't write at all, I would be unable to put any flair when insulting you, who are actually incompetent and laughable.
9169931
I wrote a 7 paragraph with 4-7 sentences proving how incompetent you were, but to much has happen yesterday for me to care for you, deciding that you are most likely retarded and Arguing with a disabled person will not solve anything. You'd be so conceited and arrogant that all my words would be ignored. Have you ever tried to argue with some so set in their ways? Do you even realize how stupid you are? I can go to the 3rd chapter and point out so many mistakes.
I went to other people, friends, random people; the most common response was "how stupid is this guy?" Proving my point you lack skill. If you excuse me, I'm going to practice my baritone. However you're just to continue and act like I don't have a life.
9169039
I wouldn't have the heart to do something so reckless. I reread my stories 50-200 times before I publish them and use every possible internet tool to improve their quality.
https://www.fimfiction.net/group/213620/programmatical-editing
http://www.grammarcheck.me/
http://www.reverso.net/spell-checker/english-spelling-grammar
http://www.onlinecorrection.com
http://www.spellcheck.net/
http://www.slickwrite.com
http://www.paperrater.com/free_paper_grader
http://www.writersdiet.com/test.php
http://hemingwayapp.com
http://www.polishmywriting.com/
http://spellcheckplus.com/
https://app.grammarly.com/
http://www.expresso-app.org/
http://www.webpagefx.com/tools/read-able/
If you don't do your due-diligence, your readers could get hurt in the process.
9170814
That is true. I was a lot more reckless back then than I am now. I have in fact improved quite a lot thanks to criticism from my mentors and friends back in 2016. Nowadays I have reliable proofreaders and even a cover artist for my upcoming novel.
I got fans in my own IP and even someone who expects my autograph.
Thanks you for the links. There are several, but I will take my time to check them during the course of this month.
9170269
My inner circle also has a negative opinion on you. Not that it actually matters much. However I must point at something. Considering you are complaining about something I released in 2016, don't you think any and all useful criticism that could be provided has already been delivered? Don't you think then that, through such criticism, I have improved over the course of two years after this was released?
You approached with nothing but rude statements and no criticism at all. Do not expect more than rudeness then.
I have never denied this work is somewhat subpar compared to professional writing. But let's face it. It is a pony fic. It is not something done for profit. I actually didn't mind too much about quality because it was my warmup for what I am doing now. Any mistake you could point, was already pointed between 2016 to 2017, any relevant mistake in my future works has already been weeded out or processed for future endeavors.
You provided no useful feedback.
9171168
Journey to Avlaan: A short story compendium. (The Avlaan Cycle Book 1)... written by Sergio Leonardo Cornejo, released on April 18 (English version) with zero reviews on Amazon... this is the only book I find other than the Spanish version (which is the exact same but release date is June 18, 2018 and is clearly in Spanish)... which I can just read for free with Amazon unlimited... the book is a price of $4.05 Amazon or $9.86 on paypal. The book is 109 pages for the English version and 218 if you buy the Spanish version. How many copies have you sold of each? Were does it say that a reader as to be a proofreader/editor. You should be the one fixing your mistakes in the story, not me. I shouldn't have to point it out, you're a "professional" after all.
9171879
Oh. Yes. As you see, the reason it is listed as the first of a series is because the rest are in progress. A novel should be available by the end of this year, right before winter sales begin.
I am not allowed to disclose sales numbers given my contract. And in case you wonder, my proofreader was removed from the credits due to a breach in the contract between her and myself. I take this seriously. I also like to take most if not all the credit to be honest, in case you wonder, since I am the conduit to stories that no one else have told.
I am not sure about the prices however. It is set at 2.99 USD, so I ignore the pricing in other parts of the world.
There is of course an interesting story regarding the Spanish edition. You see. First of all, I am a professional, I take word count and not page count into consideration. Something any professional should, since no publisher will release something under the 40k word count even if it has 300 pages.
The thing is, I translated it to Spanish not for profit, but out of pure and sincere affection. Some people I care deeply about are quite illiterate in the English language, so I took my time to translate my work to Spanish for the sake of them.
Of course my readers gave me some useful feedback on my work, which will be implemented in future pieces to increase the quality. I never repeat a mistake.
As I said. Generally speaking I do take feedback into consideration. Now. I ignore the reason for the lack of reviews, but I won't worry. It was released in April. I got plenty of time to build a brand.
I sincerely ignore the page count difference between the two editions since the page count in the text processing program I use, as well as the word count, are similar. I will contact Amazon to clarify any irregularities as I see fit, any and all irregularities are a true inconvenience to me as well. After all printing expenses are taken from my pay.
I am a professional, I never said I am seasoned. I just take my writing, out of fanfics, quite seriously and professionally. After all I need to make a profit to pay my bills so I can continue responding to you.
I just see no actual reason to bother with the correction of a fanfic that has gone mostly ignored for years. I prefer to focus on refining my skills in future endeavors, both in this place and in others.
Please, since you took the bother to actually look for my work (Thank you by the way. That was unexpected), buy a copy and leave a review. Even if it is scathing and loathsome, I will appreciate it. All reviews serve as publicity.
Now, as a customer, that is once you buy my book, would you kindly inform me of any content irregularities? So far I have not been informed of any, and instead I got a message of a fan expecting an autograph once we meet face to face. But I sincerely believe if there is any formatting irregularity that prevents my customers from actually reading my books, I must know.
I am no expert on many things, but as you can see I know the importance of engaging with one's audience, even fi said audience is only there to call one arrogant and try to prove a point without much substance.
I am well aware some alleged native English speakers find my mannerisms to be somewhat pedantic. After all I am not an native English speaker and I sincerely ignore the proper tone to address detractors without coming as uncivil. Not to mention I am, more often than not, quite formal in my tone according to my muse. I also tend to skip from idea to idea when replying to people in order to make sure all points are clear.
Given the fact that you are actually observing my work, I hope our next interaction will be between provider and customer. Until next time.
9172232
I'll guve you a few tips.
1) Put commas after the first section of dialogue.
"I hate cows," Billy said stomping his feet. "I hate them so much.
This is correct. However if your using question marks, exclamation mark, or an ellipsis point.
2) don't start with conjunctions. You can do it, but it's weak and grammatical incorrect. You should try to evade using them in the beginning of a sentence, especially in formal writing.
3) fragmented sentences are one worded responses, that is incorrect grammar.
"Well, I can do that. Not gonna be perfect, but yeah... I can still do that."
4) a good story needs mode, tone, and imagery; it's rather boring without them. Describe how the character feels through actions and not how they look. if you're going to describe a wound describe it to every detail. Just saying wound doesn't give the reader anything to picture.
"What?" Billy yelled clenching his hand White. "Fix it!"
The sword come down on billy's arm, causing a wide Jagged cut. The cut leak blood all over his cloths making them bloodied. With blood dripping onto the ground, he slip and fall on his side. Lying still under the sweltering Sun.
5) Make the character feel more alive, it's better to read if they don't just do things cause of random reason.
6) Have you works proof-read by people who actually know grammar; your story still has grammatically incorrect sentences.
9172698
Thank you for the advice. The first piece in particular will come in handy. All improvement is useful.